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Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name:zach211w

How old are you?:13

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:usa/washington

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:yes im english

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:yes i have a play many rpgs but only one sucky minecraft rpg server

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:yes sir i have

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?:my friends told me about it they said its a epic server and i should really join

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft: no I haven't tryed but my friends want me to join them

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraft...nique-gameplay/! :im doin that right now i thought

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is:roleplaying is when you play as a role of a person or thing

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is:i think metagaming is when u use out of game info to your advantage for example:My friend told me this is a rpg server

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is:I dont know but im not going to cheat so ill guess its like when emate that u have alot of power its proubly wrong i hope i dont fail i just love lord of the rings and minecraft but 2 in one thats the best so plz dont judge me on this question

In-Character Details

Character Name:zach

Character Race:elve

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:

Once there was a very poor kid named Zach he had only a few friends but his nearest friend was a hobbit.Once he came over to his house while they were playing tag a dark hooded figure came up to them and tryed to attack they screamed exactly when their parents heard the scream they ran out the door and saw their son and his friend at death point to a dark hooded figure sword.they screamed "get away from our son you beast"at that time his dad came charging at the figure it blocked his sword attack swiftly and stab him is his stomach I shouted "Dad noooooooooo!"but it was to late.Next his mom grabbed his fathers sword and hold the figure's hand.She managed to grab the sword out of his hand and use it she was choaked by the magic of the dark figure.She suffocated and turned pale and fell to the ground.When the figured looked back he didn't see us.We were hiding I ran into the forest and hid behind a tree while my friend hid in a field of corn he started crying so suddenly the figure heard him crying and went that way while he was I grabbed a sword of my dad's in his room.Then I followed him right when he stabbed my friend i stabbed him, but it was to late for my friend he killed him, but I also killed the figure.But it wasn't that they got killed but his heart was killed.So from that day on he wonders around trying to save people from the dark monster and he lurking in the shadows waiting for a war to break out.

What are your characters ambitions?:To save all races for his life

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:He is mysterious but kind to everyone

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?I would come up to him and say "I think you dropped this" i would give him a bagg with 10 bars of gold and a note that said: here make your new dream home.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?If i saw violence break out I would throw myself to the orcs attack so I could protect the dwarf and I would stab the orc from the stomach.

While walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man.His walking stick,looks weak and frail, just as you are about to ask something,the stick breaks,and the man falls to the ground.As he falls down, a bag of minas falls to the ground,and splits open.As you watch the multiple coins spill out,you peer down at the defenceless man.What should your character?I would pick up the coins and put it in my slingshot nut holder and put some of my money in it with his too and help him up and bring him to a store and buy the finest bamboo cane and bring him home on my horse. If u read this thanks alot for spending ur time listen n

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Your application has been...

Denied.

Expand on Meta-Gaming and Power-Emoting definitions. Incorrect Meta-Gaming example and one is required for Power-Emoting. You can find more information on the forums and wiki, but make sure that you use your own words.

'Zach' is not a very Elven name.

There are no Hobbits on the server, but there are Halflings. The bio sounds suspiciously like the backstory in Harry Potter. Please add some server lore, which can be found on the forums and wiki.

Need a skin screenshot.

All Open Response Questions need to be longer. They should read as small stories with action and dialogue.

Broken formatting. Copy and paste the application format from HERE exactly as it is without changing anything.

There are many capitalization, punctuation, spelling and grammatical errors throughout the application.

Wait at least 24 hours after this post to reapply. If you have any questions feel free to send me a PM.

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