[Denied][Orc] Sheltons5 Application

[SheltonS5 2]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name:SheltonS5

How old are you?:16

Time-Zone:Central time zone (UTC 6:00, UTC 7:00)

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?:Yes I have

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?:None

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?:www.youtube.com/demitridagamernerd

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):Yes

Have you read the Orcish lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:Yes

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:Creating or becoming a character and living his or her life.

Meta-gaming:Using knowledge learned from personal experiences like from a person, place, or thing.

Power-emoting:using emotes In a way that wouldn't allow the other player(s) to react to. "John stole Mary's crops." Is a power emote while "John is going to steal Mary's crops." Is not.

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name:Khangore Algo

Current Age:25

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):Khangore Algo was born in the war city of

Aegis from his parents Minglo and Karglia. Unfortunately Khangores mother died while giving birth to him. He was raised by his father Minglo. Life was good until Minglo was called

Into battle against the undead

Forces. His father was killed at the great battle of Meckuda. Khangore had to raise himself, an years later left the city of Aegis to peruse a new life away from all the war and corruptness. For many months he wandered until he came across the new small clan of Grungar. The clan was just right for Khangore to live his life in peace, and decided to learn of his Orc ancestors. He learned that the Orcs were great warriors and that he derived from an Orc named Krug. He was very proud of his heritage and taught himself everything he could about war and survival and got very good at it. Some years later he was called into war against another Orc clan. His clan prevailed and the clan of Grungar finally met peace and prosperity for many years.

Ambitions for the Future:Khangore one day wishes to raise enough money to open his own shop and sell ores and food to his fellow clan members. He wants to live a peaceful life until his death, and will only go to war if really needed.

Personality:Khangore is kind and respectful to his fellow Orc people. He is generally kind to anybody he meets. He is willing to lose his life to any of his fellow citizens. Although he doesn't wish to fight he is a very talented fighter.

Skills:Very efficient fighter with great adaptive skills. Khangore is good at gathering food and materials. He is also a good weapon maker.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Http://imgur.com/p29Sb9E Khangore is of the Uruk sub race. He is a 7ft tall Orc weighing 275lbs fully comprised of muscles. He wears the skull of his father Mingli to always have his father with him.

Any other details you wish to share about your character:

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

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1. You are roaming the mighty capital of the War Nation Of Uruks, as you near the Arena you spot an Orc, wearing what seems to be human garbs as he looks at you he smiles and say out loud in common not in blah “Come friend let me teach you of civilization and break your mind from this orcish savagery!”, how do you react?

Answer: "Khangore": I do not wish to have any such fight with you kind sir.

"Orc" : What? Do you not trust my fighting skills?!

"Khangore" :I am not a fighter unless my city men and women need me.

"Orc": Then let me show you the fighting ways of the Orcish people! Hoorahh!

"Khangore": No thankyou sir, I have enough training. Their is no need to challenge you, but thank you for the offer. "Walks away"

2. As you are watching an Arena fight between two Orcs, the Goj of Krug walks towards the Arena, and shouts “Mi brudderz da Feztivel ob Krug iz coummeh! We needz zacrifizez tu zummun da Zpirit ob Krug un diz uzg, go gadder da Warbandz nd raid da landz nd bring mi buck zacrifizez, twiggy nd pinky dat we kan zlauhater upun da alter ob Krug nuw go mi Brudderz!” How do you react to this?

Answer:"Khangore": I have great respect for Krug and yourself, but I must not perform such an activity. Please forgive my disrespect to your activity. I do not believe in sacrificing an innocent soul. I apologize. "Khangore leaves the stadium."

3. As you are travelling in the barren Orcish deserts you come across a quiet oasis. Beside it sits a small tent where a young orc is preparing a meal of roasted halfling. He calls you over, offering you to join in with his meal. What does your character do?

Answer:"Khangore": Thankyou kind sir! My gratitude for your kindness is great! I shall accept your offer and must pay you In Minas for your kindness. It is my honor to serve with such I nice Orc. If their should be anything you might be needing please find and ask me. I will do my best to return the favor in full.

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

Your application has been...

 

 

Hello! After reading through your application, I've come to a conclusion to deny it for the following reasons:

 

 

• Your meta-gaming definition is incorrect. You can probaply find the definition on the internet, but remember, write it in your own words, plagiarising is strictly against the rules.
• Your power-emoting definition is correct, however your example is wrong.
• You cannot be born in Aegis and just be 25 years old, you have to be atleast around 100 years old, but don't worry, Orcs never* die of age, they mostly die because of being killed. *Orcs can die of age, however, there has been no recorded Orc that has died of age, in short, Orcs live really long
• Aegis is not a city, it was a continent that we once lived on.
• Orcs do not go away from war because they want to live peaceful, Orcs are a race full of bloodlust; they will accept wars rather than run away from them
• All Orcs are descendants from Krug.
• There is and there has never been a clan Grungar.
• The skin is very overused, perhaps you can find a new one, or you can try the skins forum! [ The skins forum is listed under General Discussion -> Arts and Entertainment -> Graphics -> Skins, From there, you can find one of the many skin threads or make a request thread with some of the details you'd like your skin to have!]
• In your biography, you said that your father was sent to fight against the Undead, however, you somehow got his skull back.
• Please add some actions to all of your Open Response Questions, we want to see all of your roleplay abilities.
• In both your first, second and third Open Response Questions, you seem to be very peaceful, however, Whitewash Orcs are hated in the Orcish community, and will not be tolerated. If Orcs are going to make an offer to Krug, it is normally seen that everyone is coming. Orcs also do not mind if an innocent soul dies. And finally, you'd need a VA for cannibalism for your last Open Response Question.

 

I know, this may sound like alot, but I'm fairly certain that you can fix it! 

 

 

Please re-apply in 24 hours from this post or face instant denial. If you have any questions, feel free to pop me a PM!

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

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