[Denied][Elf] Capman101 Second Attempt

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[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: capman101
How old are you?: 13
Time-Zone: Eastern Time-Zone/United States
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I can't say I've had any prior experience in role-playing, but I do understand the rules of it and and how it's done.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: My friend told me about it (maskman2303)
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/79200-capman101/  (My first attempt)

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):
Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes

 

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Taking over the life of a fictional character whose story pertains to a certain lore.
Meta-gaming: Looking up information or asking an outside source for information to help you.
Power-emoting: Forcing your action upon another player without giving them the opportunity to react to it.

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Sirame Mayilu'Yuln
Current Age: 176 years old
Race: Elf
Sub-race (if any): Wood Elf
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): As a child, I grew up in the homes of Malinor, it was relatively peaceful living up in the trees. I learned to wield a bow and was a prodigy after a week or so of practice. I learned a few bits of the Ancient Language on request of my parents. Ah... my parents.

It seems so long ago now that they were alive. My father was a Blacksmith and my mother was a skilled archer, she taught the young one's how to use a bow, which wasn't all that often. For the most part she worked in her shop selling herbs to passer-by's. Then came Ullral'Ker, the monstrous night, well,that's what I called it. Men, Human men, came to us in the night. Why they came to my family I do not know to this day but we were all kidnapped, my mother, my father, and I. They took us to this... cave of sorts.... And my parents... they gave their lives in order for me to escape. I never looked back, and I never saw them again.

I went back to Malinor to seek refuge in the homes of my friends who were troubled about it almost as much as I was about and soon forgot about. So as I continued to mourn my loss, I became more and more of an outcast. After years of living a lonesome life in Malinor, I decided that there was no place for me here, my parents would have wanted me to move on and so that's what I plan on doing. My goal is to find the people who kidnapped my parents and create a new life for myself elsewhere.
Ambitions for the Future: Find the people who kidnapped my parents and create a better life for myself.
Personality: A wise, kind, and grateful wood elf, he's a bit awkward around people after living as an outcast for years.
Skills: Cunning, Great Archery
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):
Any other details you wish to share about your character: I was a mercenary for a while.

 

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]

[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of High Elves are mocking a small Wood Elf child. How do you react?[/b]

 

Answer:I say to the high Elves they shouldn't be insulting a member of their own race, despite their high and mighty depiction of themselves and their abilities us Elves have to stick together. (This scene relates to me and I feel like it is my duty to defend the child as I know how it feels to be an outcast, mocked and ridiculed.) The High Elves would probably act as though I had no right to talk to them like that, and they may be right, they're more respected than I and I'm just a lonesome traveler, but that's no reason for me not defend a poor child. Hopefully with my presense they'll think that what they were doing is no longer worth their time and wander off. I would then comfort the child and offer him some food from my satchel and suggest that he find his way back home.

 

 

[b]2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?[/b]

 

Answer:Since the old man is a human I am cautious with my approach given my prior history with the race. Upon further inspection I find that the old man is of no threat to me and ask him his business in these forests, if he is up to ill deeds I shall leave him there not really caring about his fate. However, if the man seems to be of a kind nature I shall help him up and search around for a sturdy branch to fashion him a new walking stick. Upon returning to him with a new walking stick I will pick up his coins and return them to him, I would not have the means no the time to make a new coin purse for him however so I apologize for that

[b]3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion involved).

 

Answer: I go up to the trader and ask what he has in food, I stop him as he's listing his wares and am intrigued by a potato as I have never heard of it before. Trying not to seem as though I want it too badly, as that would surely raise the price, I offer 3 minas for it. Seeing a hint of glee in his expression I quickly change my offer to 2 minas, he raises the price to 4 minas. I then offer 3 minas and we settle on that. I walk off a happy traveler with my first potato on the road to my destiny, "Van-ayla", I say as I walk away, he mimics my farewell and I'm off.

 

[Queen of Aegis 174]

- Metagaming and power emoting definitions are wrong 

- biography lacks lore and is too short

- all ORQ's lack dialog and are too short

 

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~BoomBox~

[Queen of Aegis 174]

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