[Denied][Dwarf] Jasper_P

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[b]Out-Of-Character Information[

 

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Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Jasper_P
How old are you?: 18
Time-Zone: North American Eastern Time Zone
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: I have read, understood and agreed to the rules
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: There almost the only type of game I play. Examples: Skyrim, Runescape
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: While searching for a new Minecraft server to join 
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85423-dwarf-jasper-p/

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85468-dwarf-jasper-p/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): yes
Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: I have read the Dwarven lore and I will follow it in my biography

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: An online game in which you create your own character and life
Meta-gaming: Making an action in the game based on information you should not know
Power-emoting: Doing something to another player in a way they can not respond or try to prevent it

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Theron Dult Seter
Current Age: 5 seasons
Sub-race (if any):
Clan (if any):

 

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

 

Theron was born in kal'Karik and raised by his parents Thero and Jaslio. Jaslio worked on a farm high in the mountains, and normally came home every night or Theron would be left all alone because since his father Thero enrolled in the army he was hardly ever home. Theron only saw his father on the weekends, in the days Thero was home he would spend almost all his time teaching young Theron how to be a blacksmith and fight with wooden swords, because that's what Theron was most interested in and Thero his dad was a blacksmith in his younger days but didn't see it as a good way to make money. Mostly because there was a lot of other blacksmiths in the area.

 

His family history comes from his great great great Grandfather Zondi on his mothers side. He always told the family how great of a blacksmith he was. He said he once owned a chain of blacksmith shops across the kingdom.

The other half of his familys history comes from his fathers side. Dulop Theros dad past away a few seasons ago at the age of 54 seasons. But what he did never was forgotten by his family. Therons father always told the family of how Dulop slayed a dragon and was one of the mightiest warriors ever seen in his day.

 

When Theron was getting to be older around 14 he made some friends Voder and Fanker they were both other Dwarfs form Kal'Karik  and around the same age as Theron they always played in the town square bugging all the merchants. But as he got older he got more respectable. At the age of 20 he started labouring in the mines and making the finest armour for himself and others. He was beginning to get known for his blacksmith techniques.

Overall Theron turned out to be a very strong and respectable Dwarf always true to his word and fast with a blade. He had a good family and a good life nothing could be better for him. 

 

Ambitions for the Future:

To become a great blacksmith and be know throughout all the kingdoms or become a solder in the kings army. But he does have one other dream...its to become the next great king.
Personality:

 He's true to his word, very giving and loyal, proud of his family history, and sticks up for others
Skills:

He was a good blacksmith in his younger years so he knows how to make all the best armor and weapons do to all his practise with his father but as he aged he got more into the army which made him very skillful with a blade and very strong.
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):

Any other details you wish to share about your character:

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?[/b]

Answer:
Theron: Hey!!! Torner get over here look what I found!!  Torner: OH BOY that's a lot of diamonds!  Theron: Ya but that bridge don't look that stable does it?  Torner: I don't know I just know I am going to go get those dimonds!. As Torner started walking across the bridge of rock it began to crumble. Theron: TORNER GET OFF QUICK ITS FALLING!!! Torner: No I can almost get it. So he takes one big jump in an attempt to jump across the rest of the way. But sadly he didn't make it to the other side. I watched him as he fell. Kowing I couldn't do anything hurt the most. I sat down at the edge looking where he fell and began to cry.

[b]2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?[/b]

Answer:

When I saw them I right away stood up and said no you don't! the one Dwarf said and who are you to tell us not to? I replied by saying: Does it matter who I am! I am going to help this young Dwarf from you to murderers!. One of the Dwarfs pulled out a sword so I pulled out mine as well and said back off they both backed up a little seeing my strength. I told the young Dwarf to come with me and we walked out unharmed.


[b]3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?[/b]

Answer:

Theron: well hello but how did you even get down here? Bar tender: Well I just thought you miners would need some ale to go along with a hard days work. Theron: well that would be true buts what's the catch? Bar tender: Isn't no catch I just being nice to a local miner is all. Theron: well in that case why sure thank you very much. I took the ale and drank it in three big gulps. Bar tender: well seeing you liked it so much ill go some for the other miners! ill be back soon.

 

As I began to walk away another miner walked up to me and said who was that? I replied by saying some crazy bar tender giving out ale! he said he will be back with more soon. Other miner: well guess I will have to wait here. Thanks fella. Theron: No problem. After that I continued on my way

 

 

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

Your application has been...

 

 

 

Hello! After reading through your application, I've decided to deny it for the following reasons:

 

First off, you said that you posted on the Minecraft Forums, whilst you didn't. Please fix this issue. Here is a link to the topic so you know where to post! http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/

 

Second of all, I wish for you to add some examples to all of your definitions, but remember, don't plagiarise from anywhere, write it in your own words!

 

Thirdly, whilst your biography had a lot more detail, I wish that you add some more lore in it. Maybe you can add some places to where he went! Here is a link to the wiki so that you know where to find it: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/

 

Also, with our biography, you mentioned that one of your ancestors slaughtered a dragon. If he actually did slaughter a dragon, you need to change this, as someone can not simply do that. If it's simply a story, then it's okay.

 

Now, all of your Open Response Questions. I found them rather hard to read. Could you word it better, possibly like this? "When I saw them I right away stood up and said "no you don't!" The quotation marks are used to seperate actions from speaking, thus making it easier to read for everyone!

 

 

It may sound like a lot, but don't get discouraged by it! I know you can do it!

 

 

 

Please re-apply in 24 hours from this post or face instant denial. If you have any questions, feel free to pop me a PM!

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

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