[Denied][Human] Jon Atrmos

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Minecraft Account Name:_DragonBorn__

How old are you?:16

Time-Zone:Central

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes, and i will do my best to follow them.

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Quite a lot, i know how to rp, I have played on many rp servers, such as, Assassins Craft.

How did you hear about the The Lord of the Craft?: I saw it on the Minecraft forums

Link any applications that you have previously made for the
server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/85658-jon-artmos/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If
not, then please do so (link above): No

Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make
use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take
any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: Making up a character to fit into the story
that revolves around the world/server, that you are playing, meaning, if you
are a Elf, act like an Elf would, say and do things accordingly. 

Meta-gaming: Is when your character knows something that he
shouldn’t know, like an Orc knowing how to know math thus, giving the player an
advantage.

Power-emoting: Power-emoting is when, you don’t give the
other person a chance to fight back from things you do, for example,

     “Jack steals Jons things.”

     “Jack then kills Jon and disposes of his body.”  

Jon does not have the option to defend himself

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Jon Artmos

Current Age: 25

Sub-race: Halfling

 

Past / History:

Jon doesn’t remember much from his
childhood, except the frequent adventures to Frerry Forest when he was 9, to
gaze at bugs (he isn’t afraid of them at that time) and wondering about life
and his cause in life. One day Jon went out to the wood like he did every day,
but something would happen that would change his life forever. While Jon was
studying a special red leafed plant, that caught his eye immediately, a large
spawn of Spiders had just finished eating their first catch of the day, had
overheard Jon talking to himself about the plant.

     “It must be some sort of azalea,”
thought Jon. “Well I guess I must be off, it’s almost time for lunch.”

     “Mm, hey Spinner, look at that
tasty snack walking down there,” stated Speidor.

     “Oh that does look tasty, let’s
kill him and eat him,” replied Spinner.

With that, the spiders leapt at Jon, who was unaware of
their presence.

     “Eek!” Cried Jon as the spiders
landed on him nipping and gnawing at him.

     “Hm tasty, his flesh tastes good.”

At this time Jon had fallen unconscious, from the shock.

      “Get off him!” Exclaimed Godfree, Jon’s soon to be best friend.

       “It’s Godfree!”, “Run away!” cried the two spiders.

Godfree slayed the two spiders, who will never spin another
web. He checked on Jon, and figured that he need medicine, and fast.

 16 years later, Jon and Godfree became good friends and visited often. But
adventure was around the corner. Thus Jon developed a phobia of spiders.   

 

Ambitions for the Future: Jon hopes to become a Mage and
lern the ways of alchemy. He studies medicine books most so that one day, when
the need comes, he will know what to do.

 

Personality: Light hearted, shy, but brave when the
moment calls for it.

 

Skills: Has amateur skills in medicine. 

 

Appearance:

 

Any other details you wish to share about your
character: None

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a
minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as
descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

 

 

1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a
dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he
is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do
you do?

Answer: I would call for the guards and chase after him and
bring him to justice.

 

 

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come
across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it
stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two
heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with
leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

 

Answer: I would examine the situation, then act accordingly.
I would use the element of surprise to my advantage and spare the two bandits
if I could.

 

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when
you notice a small man standing behind a colorful stall. You approach the stall
and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he
is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to
allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling,
items of choice and the discussion that happens).

 

Answer: The man offers me some food for the journeys I would
embark on. I would examine the bread to see if it was of value, and pay the man
accordingly, maybe 10 dollors.

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

 

1.  Your biography is very short and too general. Please expand upon it and don't leave such large time gaps. What happened in that time? Also, your biography doesn't contain any lore that I'm aware of. You may find some to include on the Wiki.

 

2.  Please expand upon your open response questions. Make them read like short stories with detailed actions and dialogue. Make them at least a paragraph long.

 

 

Other than your biography and open response questions, this application is pretty good. Just work on those areas and I'm sure you'll settle in just fine! Also, you should move the character profile you linked in the "Previous applications" section to the "More about your character" question. Just a tip.

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post before posting your next application. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

[Roxforbraynz 251]

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