[Denied]Casey33 2Nd Attempt

[casey33 0]

Out-Of-Character Information
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Casey33
How old are you?: 19
Time-Zone: central us
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Rise of kings
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: Rise of kings
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: n/a
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): yes
Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: yes

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Acting out the story threw character interaction and to advance the plotline
Meta-gaming: Using information gathered threw out of character means or threw information gained out of character
Power-emoting: putting serveral emotes into one, and or making your character unbeatable such as: Sword is thrown at bobs heart,

bob takes the sword and continues to fight

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name:  Raktor  Grayhammer
Current Age: 190
Sub-race (if any): Mountain Dwarf
Clan (if any): Grayhammer
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

I am Nalro of the Grayhammer Clan's cousin which both of my parents grew up in before they passed due to a mining accident. This has created Raktor Grayhammer into a deep depression knowing he cannot learn or feel the love of his parents once again, as he thinks back he would remember his parents death creating him into a larger depression spike for that time being. Rakot Grayhammer tries to drink his depression away as the memory would fade away for that moment although come back stronger in some cases afterwards since of his parents death day. Alas Raktor Grayhammer has enough to drink to try and keep his depression or sorrow away, although again the more he remembers the endless cycle of depression starts again. His cousin has began to teach him engineering as a way to relieve his depression. He spends his time now working on new machines and devices to help the dwarven community. He has created many contraptions that he thinks will work but always blow up in his face, some times this saying literal. As on a few occasion he has had his beard caught on fire and thus making him the laughingstock of the dwarven community.
Personality: Caring,  Random at times,  Depressing.
Skills: Engineering
Appearance  he is 3'4 with orange hair and a orange beard, his has a fit dwarven build and he wears a helmet all the time http://www.planetminecraft.com/skin/-medieval-contest-viking-/ 
Any other details you wish to share about your character:

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?

Answer: I hit the bridge few time with my pickaxe to see if it stable. Once I am sure it is stable I cross the bridge and start to mine the ores, but while mining the ores the bridge begins to collapse and I become stuck. I call for another dwarf to assist me. It takes sever hours to get me rescued, but once I am I head to the bar and order the largest ale I can.

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do? I offer to buy them a drink while I motion for the young dwarf to run away. If that doesn't work I take out my lucky pickaxe and threaten to send them home to there mothers if they do not leave the boy alone. As the fight breaks out I begin to throw punches left and right but I am beaten to a pulp and they kill the boy. I still have nightmares of that day as it only adds onto my depression.

Answer:

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?

Answer: I take the ale and swiftly guzzle it down, then I ask for another, I do this till I forget the memorys of my parents but by then I have a huge bill to pay and I ask the bar keep to put it on my tab, but he refuses so I give him my pickaxe as payment.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Here are some things that need to be improved if you are wanting to reapply.

 

Add more server lore to you application. You have a great length and have put in a good amount of effort you just need to add things like events, city names, etc that pertain to our server. You can find all of this information on our lovely wiki.

 

You could describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Your ORQs are too short. Expand on them, adding more dialogue and emotes. This is one of the most important parts of the app as it shows whether or not you are able to roleplay in unique situations.

 

Your power-emoting definition is partially correct but should be expanded on. You can use the wiki for help but put the definition into your own words.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

[cruzazul 2815]

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