[Denied]Elf Application, Blockbuster247

[BlockBuster247 0]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: BlockBuster247
How old are you?: 13
Time-Zone: GMT
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes, I agree
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I played on an RP server (Herocraft).
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: My brother recently got accepted (Soggy365/Aldal Boltfist)
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: N/A
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): No, but I shall.
Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes, I have, and I will.

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Taking on the role of another character who is not you in order to enjoy yourself among a community of people who are also taking on the roles of other people.
Meta-gaming: When you are role-playing and your character makes use or reference to information they are not meant to know about. For example: Calling someone by their name before you ask them what it is.
Power-emoting: In RP, when somebody makes a statement it has to come true. Power-emoting is when someone makes a statement that you cannot defend yourself from, such as stating that you die instantly. As it is an RP situation, you must do as stated and die. 

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Dorondir Nedheleg
Current Age: 20
Sub-race (if any): Wood Elf
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): Dorondir was raised in the elven capital of Leumalin. During his childhood, he was continually warned against leaving the safety of his homeland. However, Dorondir was curious. One night, he fled from Leumalin on an "adventure."

    He had not gone far, however, when monsters began to appear. Dorondir was young and foolish. "Come and get me!" he shouted, provoking the monsters. He stood no chance. Within seconds, Dorondir was overpowered and rendered unconscious.

   After many years, Dorondir awoke. He had been rescued. A long time had passed since his "adventure," and he had been sleeping in the Cloud Temple. From that moment on, Dorondir swore to do right by his people and earn their trust again.
Ambitions for the Future: Regain the trust of his kin.
Personality: Impulsive, curious, brave, friendly
Skills: Archery, exploration, combat
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Hooded green robe, dark skin, brown eyes
Any other details you wish to share about your character: N/A

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of older elves are mocking a small elven child. How do you react?[/b]

Answer: My impulsive nature kicks in almost instantly. "Leave him alone!" I shout, hand on the tip of my bow, which is hanging over my shoulder. The older elves turn around and beam at me with unnecessary confidence.

             I march towards the young elf; "Where are your parents?" I ask, never turning my back on the mob. "I don't want any trouble, brothers," I say, turning to the elves. Then, I grab the young elf by the shoulder, and lead him away. If the boys pursue me, I pick up the young elf and sprint away with him on my back.

[b]2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?[/b]

Answer: I check if the man is able to communicate with me. If he is, I reassure him that I will bring him to a hospital. If not, I set him aside for the moment. Next, I gather up all the coins and sew back up the coin pouch with my emergency supply kit (in my pocket).

            I then slip the pouch back into the old man's pocket and lift him up. I call for help, while gently guiding the old man towards the nearest city. Once at the gates, I tell the guards that the old man has collapsed, and allow them to escort me to the hospital.

[b]3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion involved).

Answer: The first ware that catches my eye is a large quiver of fine arrows. I lift it up and turn it over in my hands, inspecting the quality. By now, I have become an expert on all things related to bows. "What is the best price you can offer?" I ask.

"35 Minas," is my reply.

I sigh. "Oh... I was really excited about purchasing this quiver, but I can only spend 25 Minas."

"I suppose I can stretch to thirty..." replies the salesman.

" I guess I could stretch my budget too," I reply. "27.50 Minas."

"29," answers the man.

"27.50 Minas," I repeat.

"Fine, fine," the man says. "27.50 Minas it is. Would you like it to be wrapped up for you?"

    I smile wryly, my skill at haggling remaining intact.

[everblue2er101 906]

Your application has been...



Need to post your application on this Minecraft Forums topic before you can be accepted.

20 is very young for an Elf, still considered a child. You may want to make him older.

The bio could use more details about his life.

Explain in the bio how he learned his skills.

Please provide a skin screenshot. See THIS GUIDE as a reference.

Add dialogue to the second Open Response Question.


A good first attempt that mostly needs more details.

Wait at least 24 hours after this post to reapply. Send me a PM if you have any questions.

[everblue2er101 906]

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