[Denied][Dwarf] Wilsonssfc1998

[WilsonsSFC 0]

[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name:WilsonsSFC1998
How old are you?:14
Time-Zone: (UTC) Dublin, Edinburgh, Lisbon, London
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?:I have role-played on the Elder Scrolls games and on the Fallout series
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?:I heard about ages, when potatoorgy played on it. I just never had the time submit a application.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):
Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes I have

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Role-playing is when you create a certain character and roleplay their  actions, feelings and thoughts
Meta-gaming: Meta-gaming is when you use OOC information from the internet (or something else) and use it to your advantage. An example would be you know the exact location of a specific treasure, or something, because you read it on the internet. You then go know where the treasure is and this influences your characters actions
Power-emoting: Power-emoting is when you roleplay to your advantage. Example, I'm using a bow and say that an arrow pierced who I'm fighting in the heart therefore he is dead without a fight

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Thorbar Thunderbeard
Current Age: 18
Sub-race (if any):Cavern Dwarf
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):[/b]

When Thorbar was young he lived with his mum and dad on a small house near Kal'Azgoth. His father was a miner and used to sell his ores to merchants passing by. His mother, she was a farmer, and supplied Thorbar and his father with food. While living with his parents he learn how to mine and to a certain extent, farm. One day he thought to impress his father he should go to the mine by himself and mine a diamond. After a long day Thorbar finally came out the mine feeling sad that he never got a diamond, but everything wasn't what it used to be up above. His house brunt down, arrows impaled into the front door, blood on the floor. His house had been raided by bandits. His parents gone, nowhere to be seen, he ran to the mountains to live with his fellow cavern dwarfs. Filled with angry and regret he wished he never left the house that day his parents died. He swore that from that day, that he was going to mine a diamond, then become the greatest miner that ever lived 
Ambitions for the Future: To become the best miner in all the lands
Personality:Angry, not very sociable, talks to himself. 
Skills: Can mine with good skill and can kind of farm
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/1810554/raitzer-dwarf-skin/
Any other details you wish to share about your character:

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?[/b]

Answer: I look at the bridge and think about the odds. "It doesn't matter" I said to myself. I steadily walk across the path way whilst looking straight ahead. A bit of the bridge crumbles. I turn around looking back wondering whether I should go back or keep going. The bridge becomes even more unstable as more pieces fall. Panicking I run back to the other side. The bridge collapses. I stare at the diamonds. "If only I could have...." I leave the ravine. 

[b]2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?[/b]

Answer: I look at the young dwarf and the two men. " Serves the wee'in right. Making noise while I'd be thinking" I say to myself. I then look away. I stop drinking and look back at the boy. I have memories of me when I was young and when I used to cry. And how my parents would take care of me. I stand up the stare at the two shady dwarves. "Put that dagger down you lowlife scum" I say with an intimidating tone. "What you go'in do, eh!" says the dwarf with the dagger. "I call the guard if you don't stop" I respond. The owner then burst in and shouts "ENOUGH! You two shady dwarfs get out my tavern. I'll be having no blood spilled here. NOW GO BE OF WE YA!" The two dwarfs storm of staring at me on the way out. I sit back down and think about what I did.

[b]3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?[/b]

Answer:"Me?" I say sounding confused. "Yea you, c'mere!" the barmen says. "I suppose I wouldn't mind a drink" I respond. "Aye that's it c'mere and share a drink with me" says the barman cheerfully. I sat there with the barman drinking. "Where'd you be go'in?" the barman asks. "Em, I'd just be wandering about" I said. "Aye, well you'd be careful going through these cavern, ok?" The barman said sounding very caring. "Aye, I will" I said. "Well I guess I'd better be off now" I said in a kind voice. "Just c'mere any time you'd be needing a drink" said the barmen. "Will do" I said back. I continued on my way through the caverns

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

I like that you've implemented our server lore into your biography but I feel you could put more effort into your character's life. You don't really describe him as thoroughly as you could. I'd like to see you add more detail to his personality, younger life, and appearance. Not just what his skin shows but maybe even the minor details pixels mix. This is what makes a character a character. Not the pixels on the screen but what you have chosen to give him.

 

You don't really say much about your character's skills. I'd like to see you expand on this section and add a few more weaknesses to level the character out.

 

Make sure you post your application on the Lord of the Craft Minecraft Forums thread as well as our forums here.

 

I'd like to see you expand on your ORQs and add more dialogue throughout the answers.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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