[Denied]Rpgman17's Application #2 Read This One Not My Other Try#2

[Herdonia678 0]

I MADE A MISSTAKE ON MY OTHER "TRY #2" I FORGOT TO LINK MY OLDER APPLICATION SORRY, HERE IT IS FIXED

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: RPGman17

How old are you?: 13

Time-Zone: EST

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: Some, a few servers and games (some were LOTR)

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: The Internet

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/91694-dwarf-rpgman17s-application/#entry812931

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes!

Have you read the Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Ofcourse!

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing: Where you take the role of a character and play a game etc. acting like that character using different personalities

Meta-gaming: The use of out of character knowledge to your advantage

Power-emoting: When you make an emote that effects everyone else

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Tebur "Great axe"

Current Age: 73

Sub-race (if any): Mountain Dwarf

Clan (if any): N/A

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

Tebur grew up living in the great mountain areas around Kal'Azgoth. During his childhood he mover around a lot with his father from mountain to mountain. He was taught many skills, how to fight, how to survive. When on the road Tebur would train for many hours with his father, and he soon came to be skillful with the axe. Teburs father also taught him how to hunt, track and identify plants of all different kinds. This made Tebur different from the other dwarfs of the mountians. Tebur loved his life, he was happy and love traveling and seeing the land. He grew very close to his father and enjoyed long hours of hunting and training with him.

One day when Tebur was older his father and him where on a trip home they where just on the outskirts of Anthos when a orc scouting party attacked them. Teburs father was slain by a group of orcs, Tebur barley escaped with his life, They where in the wrong place at the wrong time.

Now the only thing Tebur has left of his father is his axe, a beautiful axe hand made by his father. Tebur trained and trained and during his growing up years he swore that he would bring justice to the orcs. Tebur was given the nickname "Great axe" because he was know throughout his people as one of the best axe fighters in the mountains. He was also very strong.

We leave his story here as he now travels in look of revenge and adventure.

Ambitions for the Future: To have his revenge on the orcs

Personality: Calm, smart, fierce fighter

Skills: Fighting, survival, navigation

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): I did this application on mobile so I can't get an in game pic but here is the link (hope this is okay, details below)

http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/1859456/dwarf-2/

Any other details you wish to share about your character: Since Tebur is different then the other Dwarfs of the mountains he has a blondish/brown beard unlike the red ones of the mountain people. Although his skin tone (a light color) is the same.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

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1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?

Answer: Tebur studies the bridge, carefully, looking for faults. He first puts his right foot down on the bridge pushing, a few small stones break away and fall into the depths below. Tebur eyes a few vines to his left. He picks them up tugging on them. These particular vines feel sturdy, he collects some more tying them to him self then to a large rock behind him. He slowly shimmies across the

bridge. He almost makes it there when the bridge his way, the vines save his life and he is able to make it back safely but he leaves the diamonds to look elsewhere.

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf whom is clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?

Answer: Tebur quickly jumps up spilling some of his ale. He reaches for his axe holding it I front if him "If you want to touch this lad then you gotta' come through me first" the attackers look surprised. "Lower that knife, nobody wants to get hurt here now do they?" Tebur says. The attacker does not lower his knife. "I suggest you keep to yeer' self blondbeard!" the attacker replied. "I wouldn't talk to me like that if I where you!" Tebur answered. "Oh really? What you gunna' do?" the attacker asked in a mocking tone. "This!" yelled Tebur running at the dwarf smacking him into a table, the attackers friend was to stunned to retaliate. So the young dwarf thanks him and they leave the tavern together.

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded bar-owner looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?

Answer: Tebur looks at the dwarf in suspicion. He actually does not look like a dwarf, the beard looking fake Tubur raises his axe. Slowly walking forward. That voice sounded like an orcs. But he could be wrong, although why would a bar owner be running around in a cave handing out ale? "Tell me friend! How did you get here?" Tebur asked. The fake couldn't find an answer So Tebur quickly grabs the look alike putting him in a headlock. He is in fact an cave goblin with a fake beard. "Ale, hey?" Tebur said spilling a mug of water on the ground. Wondering how a cave goblin got a fake beard made him worried. Tebur quickly kills the fake and goes up top to warn the others and get him some real ale.

THERE YOU GO. I HOPE IT'S OK, I REALLY WANT TO PLAY ON THIS SERVER:)

[Princeton 396]

 

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- Unfortunately, I am going to have to deny this -

 

You didn't expand upon your definitions when the last application team member told you to do so. Add examples so we know you understand them.

 

Secondly, your biography was lacking some key components. I would like you to expand upon how your father trained you with axes and how you become renown with an axe. Also, it isn't suggested to make a powerful character without receiving training in-game. Having your father killed by an orc raiding party is pretty cliche and the most overused way of killing parents. I would advise coming up with a more interesting and unique way for your parents to die.

 

Lastly, your ORQ's striked me as power-gamey. Explain how you managed to knock over the combat ready dwarf with ease. Also, you may not just randomly kill a goblin just because he is a goblin without a villain application.

 

Please wait 24 hours after this denial to reapply. Feel free to PM me with any questions or concerns!

[Princeton 396]

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