[Denied][Human] Firetype01

[Firetype_The_Great 0]

b]Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account Name:firetype01

How old are you?:13

Time-Zone: Est

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes I have.

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I've played on a couple roleplay servers.

How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: You Tube videos.

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/93442-human-firetype01/

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes

Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes I have.

 

Definitions

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: To embody a character and to act as he does as if you were him. 

Meta-gaming: An action that makes another player know something that a real person shouldn't know about. For example when someone asks were someone is in occ and someone answers it and you use it to your advantage.

 Power-emoting:  To not let the other player roleplay according to what you say basicly makeing you invincible. An example of this is " Pablo kills Dorgon." it should be " Pablo swings his sword at Dorgons chest." then the player playing Dorgon could react.

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character: 

 

Full Name: Markus Aqula Legious

Current Age: 34

Sub-race (if any): 

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

Ambitions for the Future: Markus was born a year after his brother Cody in a small village that was on the coast of Anthos. Markus was born into a poor faimly his father, George was a farmer that sold food to the merchants who pass by every month. His mother, Elisha stayed at home with Markus and Cody and read them books about great heros and mythical creatures. At the age of 8 Markus went to help his dad on the farm ,but his brother Cody ran away from home. His dad soon became sick of typhoid and died when Markus was only 13. Markus and his mother had to sell his fathers farm to pay for the bills of his house. When he sold his house he trained with some friends with the sword to protect his mother from anyone trying to rob them. His mother died in a fire in there house grief strucken  he decided to become a apprentice of a blacksmith. He was tought by his fathers childhood friend Horious. Markus was an apprentice till he was 20 then he started a metal shop for himself.

 Markus made horse shoes and swords to sell to the passing merchants. One day a merchant told him a story about orcs and elves and great citys . Markus then decided since theres bound to be war there he may get more business and he may see his long lost brother. So he travals with the merchants down there selling swords and horse shoes at every town. He spent 7 years with the merchents. He finnaly reached a city called Abresi and made a new shop there and collected enough minas to hire some workers. He spent more minas getting the metal then he was earning .He became bankrupt withen 5 years and now he wonders looking for a place to settle. He also wonders what job he should do now that he lost his metal shop. He also wonders if his brother is still alive.

 

Personality: Strong and Brave ,but will only fight if the cause is right. desperate for a job. b] 

 

Skills: Adept Blacksmith , Novice Swordsman 

 

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):<a href="http://imgur.com/sdQqjXM"><img src="http://i.imgur.com/sdQqjXM.jpg" title="Hosted by imgur.com" /></a>

Any other details you wish to share about your character:

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

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1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

 

Answer: Markus sees a man dressed in black and he sees him about to slip by the guards. Markus notices hes withen shouting distance of the guards he decides to tell the guards at him. He yells " Hey guards theres a man dressed in black about to go inside the Palace." Markus notices that the guards were asleep and were jerked awake due to his yell. The figure turns around and Markus notices a bow and yells "He was a bow Help!!" He runs down the street being followed by the figure. He jumps into the local taravan in which he blended in and the figure was then arrested by the guards.

 

 

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

 

Answer: Markus thinks of a plan to save the man without geting hurt. Markus  desides that the best way to to seem to scare them off by acting like he was a army of guards behind him. He yells " Your surrounded lay down you arms and this will be over with". The bandits say " Weres your men? I don't see any." Markus replys " There in the trees and ready to shoot if you do anything rash. No lay down you arms and leave." The bandits decide that it wasn't woth being shot and maybe killed so they layed down there arms and left.

 

 

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

 

Answer: Markus notices a bar of rare metal that he needs to complete his latest task. He goes up an says "I'll give you 3 minas for that metal." The small man knowing how rare it is says " 6 minas and you have it." Markus know he's trying to get a few extra silvers says " I'll pay 4 minas." The small man decides since he's also knows how rare it is he takes up on that offer. Markus then takes that to his house and finishes the job.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

You didn't include very much lore into your biography. I'd like to see you expand on it with things such as town names, people, or notable events pertaining to your character's race. All of this information can be found on our extensive wiki page.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Expand on your ORQs and add a bit more dialogue throughout.

 

You have improved the grammar and spelling and I commend you for that, just a few quick fixes and your app will be much better.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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