[Denied]Kikiyami's 1St Application

[Kikiyami 24]

 

Out-Of-Character Information
 

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as
possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account Name: Kikiaymi

 

How old are you?: 17 (18 in October 2013)

 

Time-Zone: central standard time

 

Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: yes

 

What previous experience have you had in role-playing?:
mostly with friends

 

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: my best
friend

 

Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:
none

 

Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If
not, then please do so (link above): I have, but this is the newer one

 

Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make
use of it and follow it in your biography?: yes, I shall try my best

 

 

Definitions
 

In your own words define the following terms. Do not take
any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: making up a story with people where you are
the characters

Meta-gaming: using OOC knowledge to your advantage in game

Power-emoting: having superhero or unrealistic skills

 

In-Character Information:

Complete the following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Leyutayna

 

Current Age: 130

 

Sub-race (if any): Wood Elf

 

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+
paragraphs long):

     Born in a lone cabin in the woods a poor couple. They had prayed for a child and finally had conceived a baby girl. When she was born she had eyes green as fresh spring grass and golden brown hair. She was beautiful. They named her Leyutayna, beautiful life. Leyutayna grew up beautiful and sweet, she was generous and had a kind heart, but her luck was about to change on her.

 

     She was always close to her parents and it hurt her very much when her mother got sick and couldn't get better. Leyutayna's father never got over losing his wife. He slowly began to lose his mind. Leyutayna's heart was torn when she came home one day to find her father's note but not her father. She waited for days for him to return but he never did.

 

     Finally she packed her things, leftflowers on her mother’s grave, and left for the city. Now Leyutayna is a lonely traveler with no friends, no home, no parents, and no luck. Can she make it on
her own or is she going to die?

Ambitions for the Future: Hopes to explore, discover, and
maybe find true love

 

Personality: Very kind, can have an attitude, isn't racist,
adventurous, loves nature and animals, shy around new people, and can be very
protective

 

Skills: skilled archer, moderate with swords, good with
people,

 

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your
skin):

 

Any other details you wish to share about your character: a
bit short for an elf but still meets standards

 

Open-Response-Questions
 

Each question in this section must be answered with a
minimum of one paragraph, which must describe the event in full. Please be as
descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

____

 

1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the
sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of
older elves are mocking a small elven child. How do you react?

 

Answer:

            I watch for a moment before walking into the clearing and shouting “hey, leave her alone!” The little girl keeps crying but the older elves heard me and aren’t happy.
     “Who do you think-“ started one of the bigger men but I interrupt him.

 

     “ Who I am doesn’t matter, but who do you think you are to think you are good enough to pick on such an innocent little girl!” At this time the girl had stopped crying and had walked over to
my side and was watching me. I start to shout louder.

 

     “Now you either get out of here and leave her alone or things are going to get ugly!” As none of the older elves had weapons and didn’t appear to be fighters this threat was worth while. And
they began to step back and walk away grumbling.

 

     I notice the little girl was holding my hand and smiling. I ask her “are you alright Sweetie?” She smiles widely showing her dimples, “you saved me.”

 

2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come
across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you,
falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch
of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the
pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?

 

Answer:

 

     I gasp and jump to help the old man up and sit him up, he's all right just unconscious "sir? are you
alright?" He’s still breathing but is very still, I look at the coins and gather them up and put them all back in the pouch and place them next to him and then start a small fire.

 

     I try to be quiet as to not wake him. I pull some bread out of my bag and eat a little thinking what happened to the old man and if he'll be alright. Without thinking I mumble aloud "I really down want to burry another person."

 

     Then I hear a sound that sounds like a chuckle from the old man, "you better not burry me, 'cuz I ain't dead." The old man moves a bit and then smiles.

     I smile back a bit embarrassed "uh, sorry, I was just worried bout you."

     "I may be old but I'm stubborn as hell," the old man chuckles a bit as reaches forward and accepts the bread I offer him.

 

    "So you're alright? Can you walk?"

     "I'll be able to walk in the morning."

    I smile and lay back down with myhead on a bed of clover and drift off to sleep while I listen to the old man chatter on.

 

3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across
a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of
it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his
carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle
for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for
prices and the discussion involved).

 

Answer:

 

            I look at the trader and decide he's not shifty enough to be a thief.
     "Alright," I walk over and rummage carefully through the good and find a bow in good condition. I think to myself: “Hmmm I could use a new bow. Mine’s pretty worn out as it is.”

 

     The trader’s eyes look over the bow, as he leans on his cart, "you like the bow? I bought it off an old man he said its lucky, never misses."

     I think: “lucky huh? I could use some luck.” "Alright how much?" I ask.

    The trader chuckles a little and he replied “350 gold pieces" I gape at the price,"350? I don’t have that much! How bout 150 and some leather?"

    The trader laughs loudly and shakes his head, "350."

    I think and as I form a deal in my head, "200 some leather and some wool?"

    The trader scratched his chin and looked over my wool and leather then looked at the bow, finally he shouts "deal!"

 

    I grab the bow and leave the traded goods behind as I leave the trader and his cart. I pull out one of my arrows and notch it on my new bow.

 

    "Time to test it," I mumble to myself. I pull back and aim carefully at a cow seven trees away. Slowly, carefully I release the arrow, and it flew straight for the cow. It never had a chance, the
cow fell to the ground. I run over to it to find more meat and leather than I ever have from one cow before! I looked at the bow and think just lucky, or something else?

[IrishPerson 693]

~Under Review~

 

 

 

Sadly I have had to deny this application. the reasons are as follows, 

 

• You need to expand on your definitions and you should add some examples.
• Your biography is too short. Go into detail about your characters past and how he acts and was raised, things like that. So that your character is more fleshed out.
• You also didn't have any lore in your biography again. Thus I think you need to go and read it once again. 
• All three of your ORQs are too short and need to be expanded on greatly with dialogue.

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (seen below) before posting your next attempt. If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. Good luck with your next application.

Edited August 6, 2013 by MrGreene

[IrishPerson 693]

Moved to Denied Forum