[Denied][Human] Fafnir Ravenhood

[Raven8768 16]

          Out-Of-Character Information



The simplest section of the application! Simply answer these questions so we can get to know you a bit better.



What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: - corbeldl


How old are you?: - 9


What time-zone do you live in?: - unknown




Have you ever roleplayed before - if you have, how?: - yes many rp servers and in mmo like wow


Have you been on any other roleplaying servers?: - yes




How did you hear about us?: -my cousin


What do you think the server will be like? - fun rp with my friends


Have you read and agreed to the rules?: - yes


What’s your favourite rule / the rule you agree with the most?: - always being in character




Definitions



This is simply so that we can get an understanding of how much you know

about roleplaying. Feel free to Google the answers, but make sure that

you write the reply in your own words, not Google’s.



What is roleplaying?: - Roleplaying is the act of stepping into a characters shoes or playing as a role other than yourself. You begin to know or feel what the character feels such as if you know someones name and your character doesnt, you remain as the role in not knowing his or her name.



What’s metagaming?: - knowing info such as names of random strangers that your character would not otherwise know



What’s powergaming?: - giving yourself maximum power
to be too strong and also acting with a power such as *casts power that
nobody will live through and everyone will die* instead of *attempts to
cast magic* in other words it is doing something without giving the other character time to react or try to defend themselves



In-Character Information



Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable!

Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with

a character that you actually want to play.



What’s your character called?: - Fafnir Ravenclaw



What race are they (and sub-race)?: - Human



What sex are they?: - male



How old are they?: - 27



Give us a brief description of their life

- their story, childhood, family: - Fafnir was born in a town calledSalvus. His father was Fafrin Ravenhood. His mother was named Gerty Ravenhood. He was the youngest of five children and he was constantly picked on by his older brother. At the age of 10 he began to work with his father at their family shop in Salvus. He worked everyday from 7am to 7pm. As a young boy in Salvus he longed for adventure and it wasnt long until he found some. He chose one day to go with his friends and play with wood swords in the forest. When there he met an Elf named Frost. He ran home to tell his father of the Elf adventurer and his father didnt believe him. Fafnir made the choice never to go back to the forest because his father didnt believe him. He was 15 when he trained to be a archer in Salvus and he was great at it. He was skilled with a bow but not to good with a sword. At the age of 23 he became an adventurer and he is that now today. He learned a lot about the Holy Oren Empire and the Kingdom of Renatus in school. He stood about 5'5" from the ground with a rather skinny build. He had some muscular build in his arms from arhcery training. He is skilled at climbing and archery. At the age of 27 he is still an archer/ranger. He has traveled across Elven and Human lands but has yet to explore any of the Dwarvish or Orcish settlements. (NOW IN CURRENT TIME)



What are they like (personality)?: - kind trustworhty and hardy



What are their ambitions?: - to become a great ranger/warrior and to be able to work for his people as a soldier/guard



Do they have any special skills?: - arhcer and parkour/climbing



What are their weaknesses?: - swords and sneak attacks



What do they look like?: - 5'5" with white armor



Anything else you want to say about them?: - no





Please give us a screenshot of your character’s skin: -





Fantastic, there you go. No need to write any more - simply post this on

our forums (and on MinecraftForum like it says above) and wait!  

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

I have to say, I was a little on the fence with this one, but in the end I chose denial as there are a few things that I feel have to be fixed.

• While you did include a bit of lore, I feel that your story could use some more polish as it seems to be fairly generic. For example, what happened with the Elf he met that made him so excited? What were his motivations for not going back just because his father didn't believe him?
• Likewise, your skills and weaknesses could use some polish. Try explaining them a bit instead of just stating skills.

Do that and I'm certain that you'll be accepted next time.

 

You may reapply after a full twenty four hours have passed as of this post's edit which is seem below. If you have any questions then please feel free to send me a private message. Good luck with your next application.

Edited August 21, 2013 by Roxforbraynz

[Roxforbraynz 251]

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