[Denied]My Application

[connor2861 0]

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: - colinmacphie

How old are you?: - 18

What time-zone do you live in?: - uk

Have you ever roleplayed before - if you have, how?: -yes. I play d&d. It's fun

Have you been on any other roleplaying servers?: - no but it looks exiting

Have you applied to this server before?(Please link past applications): - yes. http://www.lordofthe...hie-aplication/

How did you hear about us?: -a friend told me about you and it looked fun

What do you think the server will be like? - well. You never do the same things twice and it looks so good

Have you read and agreed to the rules?: - of coarse

What’s your favourite rule / the rule you agree with the most?: - my favorite rule is that we have to stay in character.

Definitions

This is simply so that we can get an understanding of how much you know about roleplaying. Feel free to Google the answers, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not another website / person's!

What is roleplaying?: - I think roleplaying is choosing a character and acting as that character in the entire game

What’s metagaming?: - I think metagaming is when someone does something that doesn't reflect the characters information

What’s powergaming?: - I think I heard about power gaming as when someone is doing something that they can't do in normal life. E.g flying, speed, high jump,hacks

In-Character Information

Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable! Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with a character that you actually want to play.

What’s your character called?: - yolerio

What race are they (and sub-race)?: - my character is a wood elf

What sex are they?: - they are male

How old are they?: - they are 21

Give us a brief description of their life - their story, childhood, family: - my characters story is... He was hunting in the forest when suddenly, he found another elf with a message. His parents had been killed by the current antagonist in anthos, he slowly got over this. But that scarred him for the rest of his life. His family.he has a lovely wood elf girlfriend and he was lucky to have her. Her name is alhoara. She has blond hair and blue eyes. They are to be married but not yet for the war is too much. Childhood. His childhood is quite normal. He had friends and he played with them. When he first got a bow he was extatic and learned how to use it. As his friends got older they went to war and some died, but the ones who lived are injured.

What are they like (personality)?: - he is friendly, funny and kind. He would be couragouse against orcs. But against a dragon, he would try and get out. People like him unless he ran away from war.

What are their ambitions?: - his wants to kill the antagonist who killed his parents, but he knew that wouldn't go well. He also would like to make friends with other races. He likes hobbits and thinks that they would be a good choice

Do they have any special skills?: - well of coarse there is archery. He is strong and is good at throwing. But other than that he has no talent

What are their weaknesses?: - his weakness (if any) would be the element of surprise, an ambush or close combat

Give us a description of how they look (not a screenshot yet!)?: - yelerio is tall dark haired brown eyes and always has good looks. He wears leather armour of the kill that he gets. (He is also not a vegetarian). Other than that he is basically the same as any other elf

Anything else you want to say about them?: - he will eat meat from a hunt but he won't be happy about it. He is slightly taller than other elves.

Please give us a screenshot of your character’s skin: -

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

• You don't seem to fully understand meta-gaming and power-gaming. I'd like for you to improve upon your definitions and show us that you really know what both of those acts are.
• From your biography, it seems that your character lacks substance. He seems to be a hollow shell with no real history. Given, he's only twenty one so his backstory couldn't be that expansive, but you need something there that gives us an idea of his life up until this point. It might be worthwhile to go through Implemented Applications to get an idea of how your backstory should be written, but do not copy anyone's story.
• Your biography lacks lore. We need to be sure that you read the lore for our server so it's generally good to include a decent amount. In this attempt and those previous, you've only given ambiguous lore terms. Adding locations, events or famous names specific to our server lore can greatly improve this. You can find a plethora of lore on the wiki as well as around the forums.
• The "Skin Screenshot" you have provided is simply a raw skin file. This is really hard to see and hard to get an idea of what your character looks like. It is recommended that you provide either a render of your skin (easily made at a site such as Novaskin) or an in-game screenshot using the third person camera (F5).
• Your description of your character's looks does not line up with your skin. You state he has dark hair, but on the skin he has a bright blonde hair. I'd also note that bright hair is not a trait of the Wood Elves.

 

Since you have been denied, you must now wait another twenty four hours (As of this post's edit, which is seen below) before you may submit another application. It is recommended that you use this time to your advantage and work on your application for a while rather than just waiting until the last minute and only making small edits. If you have any questions then feel free to contact me through a private message. Good luck with your next attempt.

Edited September 4, 2013 by Roxforbraynz

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