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[holdensteel 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: - holdensteel
How old are you?: - 13
What time-zone do you live in?: - eastern pacific


Have you ever roleplayed before - if you have, how?: - no
Have you been on any other roleplaying servers?: - no
Have you applied to this server before?(Please link past applications): - yes: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/topic/102808-app/#entry946368


How did you hear about us?: -my little bro
What do you think the server will be like? - a relaxed rp server
Have you read and agreed to the rules?: - yes
What’s your favorite rule / the rule you agree with the most?: - no hacking, i hate hackers


Definitions

What is roleplaying?: - when you take the role of a player

What’s metagaming?: - when you use outside resources to gain an advantage

What’s powergaming?: - forcing people to do actions

In-Character Information

What’s your character called?: - Holton Smith

What race are they (and sub-race)?: - Human ,Southerner

What sex are they?: - Male

How old are they?: - 24

Give us a brief description of their life - their story, childhood, family (Include server lore when writing): - Holton was born in the city of Abresi. His parents were very abusive too him, but he never fought back; he loved them. Around the time he was 1 his parents died protecting him from zombies.He grew up very lonely  Holton consumed is time by reading. He grew deeply fascinated by his ancestors. He learned that he was the long lost brother of Grey Terdovea  (GOGREYGO {Owner of the character Grey} HAS GIVEN ME PERMISSION TO USE HIS CHARACTER AND LORE). That set his quest to find his brother. Along the way he learned from reading to become a pretty decent swordsmen. By the time he was 21 he became attracted to girls; he wanted to find his soul-mate. He was constantly trying to impress girls in Abresi. He never was really success-full. 

What are they like (personality)?: - Absent minded, hot headed

What are their ambitions?: - To be above every one, the best of the best

Do they have any special skills?: - amazing swordsmen

What are their weaknesses?: - social award moments

Give us a description of how they look (not a screenshot yet!)?: - brown hair,small beard green eyes about 6'1"

Anything else you want to say about them?: - nope



Please give us a screenshot of your character’s skin: - http://mcss.me/holdensteel Attached File download.png 10.15K 0 downloads

[Quavinir_Twiceborn 1050]

Your application has been...

 

 

-Your definitions are much to short, and need expanding. Possibly use a example?

 

-Your biography is short, and incoherent, making little sense. If his parents died while he was 1 a 1-year-old how did he survive? Where were his parents protecting his from zombies? how did he survive? Why didn't they run from these random zombies?

 

-Your special skill is being an amazing swordsman...Yet in your biography you note him being a DECENT swordsman. So...how come his special skill is being an amazing swordsman?

 

-Your weakness literally makes no sense.

 

-You may re-apply in 24 hours.

 

-If you have any questions, feel free to send me a PM (Personal Message)

 

[Quavinir_Twiceborn 1050]

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