[Denied]The Bio Of Sevran Bowstring

[Legoface1 12]

oday, 07:44 AM

What’s your character called?: -  Sevran Bowstring 

What race are they (and sub-race)?: -   Human , northerner

What sex are they?: -  Male

How old are they?: -  23
 

Give us a brief description of their life - their story, childhood, family (Include server lore when writing):   Sevran never really knew where he came From. His father always said that he was found as a baby on the streets of Arethor. his father who was called Greylum  lived on the edge of Hanseti.He  was a hunter and  his mother was a weaver. Sevran  had 2 brothers   one went missing when  Sevran was seven, and his other brother who was called  Malex was a soldier and died fighting the undead . That meant Sevran was alone with his mother and father most all the time. When Sevran was 8 his father tought him to hunt and climb and when he was ten his father would let him go hunt with him. Sevran was a natural with a bow and arrow and could take down big and small animals. The Undead attacked when Sevran was 16  and Sevran left in hope to find a better life somewhere else.

What are they like (personality)?: -  Happy, brave, determined, daring. 

What are their ambitions?: - To find fortune and a better life in a different city
Do they have any special skills?: -  Natural with a bow and arrow and a great climber

What are their weaknesses?: -  has many flashbacks of the plague hates undead  

Give us a description of how they look (not a screenshot yet!)?: - Normal human size has brown hair, white skin and  brown eyes (he looks the same as my skin)

 

[Gwonam_Blaze 385]

Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

 

- You must use the full official application format in order to be accepted; Half of it is not enough. Please fill out the entire application and post it next time.

 

- While your biography was good and contained a fair bit of server lore, a lot of the lore is incorrect and inaccurate; Arethor and Hanseti were cities in Asulon, so the Undead couldn't have attacked there since they never existed in Asulon, only Aegis. Also, your character is far too young to have been 16 in Asulon at any point, since we moved away from Asulon over 20 years ago in-game; Either change your character's current age or use cities from Anthos (The realm we currently live in).

 

- Your character's weaknesses aren't really weaknesses. To be a weakness, it must be something that puts your character at a disadvantage or makes them 'flawed' when compared to another character.

 

You're doing alright so far, just need to fix a lot of the flaws in your application (Mostly using the full application format). You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me.

[Gwonam_Blaze 385]

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