[Denied]Razi Senseio

[RzSenseio 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

 

The simplest section of the application! Simply answer these questions so we can get to know you a bit better.

 

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: - 

Razi_Senseio

 

How old are you?: - 

14

 

What time-zone do you live in?: - 

SEA, South East Asia UTC/GMT +7 hours

 

 

Have you ever roleplayed before - if you have, how?: - 

yep, just different game. not minecraft. its GTA San Andreas, if you know SAMP (San Andreas Multiplayer) it allows you to connect to servers which has different gamemodes. i played the roleplay server alot.

 

Have you been on any other roleplaying servers?: - 

Not in minecraft. but yes literally.

 

Have you applied to this server before?(Please link past applications): - 

nope

 

 

How did you hear about us?: -

Friend, called CaptainSheepy

 

What do you think the server will be like? - 

well, i've played roleplaying game (as stated) before, so i know how this server will look like. But its minecraft! you know, you can build, you can do amazing stuff. in gta, limited stuff.

 

Have you read and agreed to the rules?: - 

yeah sure. i know how to fully roleplay anyway, im experienced.

 

What’s your favourite rule / the rule you agree with the most?: - 

the mining stuff, where you must make a stand so the mine wont collapse. its funny :p

 

 

Definitions

 

This is simply so that we can get an understanding of how much you know about roleplaying. Feel free to Google the answers, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not another website / person's!

 

(Answering without google, experiences)

 

What is roleplaying?: -

Roleplay is where you are required to follow the way of the real world, playing as an actor/actress. And everything you do, must be done by roleplaying.

 

What’s metagaming?: - 

Using out of character information for in character, mixing.

 

What’s powergaming?: - 

Doing something (while roleplaying) that can't be done in real life - impossible move. Sometimes used to 'force' other player to follow his rule. 'Can't let the others do anything'

 

In-Character Information

 

Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable! Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with a character that you actually want to play.

 

What’s your character called?: - 

Razi Senseio

 

What race are they (and sub-race)?: - 

Human - The Northerner

 

What sex are they?: - 

Male

 

How old are they?: - 

21

 

Give us a brief description of their life - their story, childhood, family (Include server lore when writing): - 

14th of January - 1432. A boy named Razi bornt. He was born in a small town of Asulon. Since he was born, he was treated by two stepparents. Razi's father died from long ago. Razi never saw his father's face. His mother died when Razi was taken out from the womb of his mother, because his mother possess a quite rare diseases, ie diseases 'die giving birth', which was never founded before.

 

Razi is now 9. His stepfather introduced Razi to the outside world. Razi learnt alot from his stepfather.

 

When Razi reached the age of 14, Razi went to Anthos to seek knowledge for its future. However, Razi replace his mind. Razi met a friend for the first time. His name is Jake. In addition to studying, Jake also of practices sword with his father's. His father was a knight. So he(Jake's father) thought that he could give lessons to his son. Jake asked if Razi would train with him to swing the sword. Razi accepted it. Razi stopped his school, concentrating on sword skill.

 

" I wonder if my father was a swordsman? "

 

One day - Razi is training with Jake. His father is waiting at the jungle near Abreasi - for both of them.

4:50 am, RazI and Jake arrived. The training started.

 

Jake's father thought both of them the basics of swinging a sword.

"Remember not to swing a sword too hard, especially the big one. You can hurt yourself."

"Razi, thats not how you hold a sword, you hold it using your two hands, and hold it with your best. Different if you are using a shield, too."

"Chest up, position ready."

 

Now, Razi is now adequate at swords. While his skill is not much, he still kept practicing and practicing.

 

What are they like (personality)?: - 

Kind, romantic. But a loner. And sometimes annoying, likes to annoy people. Easily angry.

 

What are their ambitions?: - 

To be the finest swordsman

 

Do they have any special skills?: - 

Yes - good at wolves. Razi had a dog at his childhood

 

What are their weaknesses?: - 

Light - by light i mean the brightest light. He likes shadow tho. you know, the darkness.

 

Give us a description of how they look (not a screenshot yet!)?: - 

Brown haired, Medium sized height, Untidy (due to laziness). The hair, the shirt, everything is untidy. He likes dark stuff, he always wears dark stuff.

 

Anything else you want to say about them?: - 

This character won't go out at noon, A big threat for him.

 

Please give us a screenshot of your character’s skin: - 

Here: (3d preview)

 

http://mcskinsearch.com/skin/Razi_Senseio

Edited February 24, 2014 by RzSenseio

[Gwonam_Blaze 385]

Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

 

- Your biography doesn't make much sense and lacks a lot of details. What was this seemingly random illness that killed your character's mother? Even if it hasn't been discovered in-character, it should have an identification. Also, your character just 'quit' school when he was 14 and started learning swordsmanship instead? Didn't his parents have anything to say or do about this? Please add more detail to the events in your biography so that it makes more sense and is more interesting.

 

- You haven't included enough lore in your biography. Please add a bit more server lore, such as a couple of cities and mention of a couple of the other races. Also, the lore you included was not only extremely vague, but inaccurate; We left Asulon over 30 in-game years ago, meaning your character couldn't have been born there if he is 21 today. He would've been born in Anthos or Elysium. If you need help finding server lore, use our official wiki here: http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/

 

- Your ambitions are much too short; literally 5 words. Please expand on your character's ambitions; What does he hope to achieve? What will he do once he reaches his goals?

 

- Your skills and weaknesses don't make much sense. What do you mean by 'good at wolves'? Good at training them? Riding them? How and why is your character 'weak' to light? You can't just use something your character dislikes as a weakness; It has to be something that could put your character at a disadvantage when compared to another. Simply disliking light and preferring darkness wouldn't be enough to make him 'flawed'.

 

- Your skin does not suit the setting of the server (It's too modern). Hoodies and sunshades are not appropriate medieval attire. I would suggest finding a medieval themed skin before trying to apply again.

 

- Your entire application is full of grammar and spelling errors. If English is not your native language then there's no need to try and get it perfect, but please try your best to fix as many errors as possible; the fewer there are, the more it will help you get accepted.

 

It's a nice first attempt, but your application needs a lot of work. Spend a lot of time and care making sure your application doesn't run in to any of the same problems that I've listed. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

[Gwonam_Blaze 385]

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