[Denied] Fire's Application (Fixed)

[Fire Emporer 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: FireKingThe1st
How old are you?: 14
Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13):Yes
Have you applied to this server before? (Please link all past applications):No
Have you read and agreed to the rules?:Yes
What’s the rule you agree with the most?: The things that aren't allowed in RP like, Trolling, Abusing Glitches, etc. 
Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules):No not confused about rules
How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? On YouTube 


Definitions
What is roleplaying?: Roleplaying is someone acting out the role of a character. 
What is metagaming?: I'd say, when someone mixes OOC info with IC info and/or giving information that they aren't supposed to.
What is powergaming?: I'd say its forcing actions on another player. Ex:
*Tom is in fighting stance* 
*Steve is in fighting stance*
*Tom swings his sword, slicing Steve's heavy armor in half along with Steve* 

In-Character Information
Character’s name: Ryfon Nym Theodwin (Goes by Nym)
Character’s gender: Male
Character’s race: Wood Elf
Character’s age: 23
Bio: At a very distinct moment in Ryfon's life, Nym's mother and father had dumped him in the forest. You see, His mother and father were adventurers. They had stumbled into a horde of flesh-ripping orcs on their way to retrieve a special artifact. They had to get Ryfon to safety since the orcs were catching up by the second. The parents had to take split paths. The mother took Ryfon and hid him. While the father had to draw their attention away. When the mother had hid the baby just in time, orcs had gotten to her. The orcs didn't see where she left Ryfon so they fled. The orange hue of the sky was fading into a dark abyss with beautiful glimmers in the sky. Thats when Ryfon was taken up by some wood elves. And he was raised by them ever since. At age 10 Ryfon liked his middle name more than his first. So everyone knew him as Nym. Nym was home schooled, taught the ways of combat by his brother and was taught other things like math and history. At the age of 16 he was sent on a journey to retrieve a special gift that his brother had set up. It was supposed to test his skills that he had learned. Nym was half way there until he saw a girl. This girl was being chased by deadly ogres. He went to go save her, his mind was now focused on killing these ogres and saving the girl. It was however childish and he knew it too. He killed the ogres in a close fight. He was exhausted, grateful to achieve his goal. But moments later they were surrounded by bandits that had seen the ogres to go check it out. Both of them, Nym and the girl, had been dragged off unconscious by the bandits. Soon Nym had woken up, and they were held prisoners. The girl was beaten pretty bad and Nym was furious. He struggled to get out of his chains and he couldn't break loose. He had a moment of giving up until one of the bandit scouts shouted that there was an army heading their way and prepared for battle....The battle was over with bandits dead and wounded. The army released them, but the girl next to Nym was shot by an arrow. It was pierced through her heart and she died. Nym was shocked, angry and sad at the same time. Nym didn't know what to do by then. At age 23 Nym had gotten over that year and decided to go adventuring again. He wants to find out the mystery in the world. So he moved to Cerulin, Athera. And his journey continues...               

Personality Traits: Adventuress, Very calm, Friendly, Brave, Clever, and shy around girls his age. 
Ambitions: He wants to be like his father. He strives to be the greatest he can be. 
Strengths/Talents: He can assess situations and cleverly know how to deal with them. Talents: Skilled with weaponry and is very agile.
Weaknesses/Inabilities: Going into something without a plan, Fighting with his bear hands. 
Appearance: Brunette, Hazel eyes, wears a hood sometimes to conceal his ears. 
Appearance: http://imageshack.com/a/img540/8541/SyvFRN.png

•  
•  

[Lvke 1000]

-You still didn't add any more server lore.

-You didn't fix the conflicting issues with your personality traits and character abilities.

-Your server biography, despite being expanded, was expanded with less server lore and more cringe worthy clichés. Please try and avoid clichés such as orcs killing your parents, being raised as an orphan. Other things to avoid are things such as a single young elf taking on a group of ogres and defeating them, as such seems rather powergamey.

 

Please read the server lore and peruse the wiki for a while, and work on some more original stories before applying again. You may apply in 24 hours. PM me with any questions.

[Lvke 1000]

Moved to Denied Application Forum.