[Denied] [Pending] My Whitelist App.

[ESMJ 0]

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: SoloSwag3r
How old are you?: 12 
Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13): Yes I am.
Have you applied to this server before? (Please link all past applications): Yes but i lost the applications, cause i havent applied in awhile.
Have you read and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What’s the rule you agree with the most?: Not to hack, hacking just ruins the roleplay experience, and the gaming experience in general. 
Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules): Nope.
How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? A friend told me about it

Definitions
Feel free to Google the answers or browse our forums, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not those of another website or person!

What is roleplaying?: When you play as a person that isn't your self, in a sense acting.
What is metagaming?: When you mix Out of Character(OOC) with in Character (IC) for your own benefit, or advantage.
What is powergaming?: When you force an unreal action on a player, like if you were to kill a player by ripping out their eyes , but they have a helmet on that doesn't allow you to get to there eyes.

In-Character Information

Character’s name: Erak Falcon
Character’s gender: Male
Character’s race: Human
Character’s age: 19
Biography (Please make it a decent two paragraphs long. Remember to add server lore, and events that happened to your character so that they don’t contradict history.): Hello my name is Erak Falcon. I grew up in Vanderfell, Athera. As a child I never knew what I should become, until I murdered my parents, thats when I knew I wanted to be a Bounty hunter. I lived in a small, what you would call shack, but to me it was a house and home. I was about 8 when I had to try to earn minas for my parents, and since then until about 16 I had to try to work harder and harder to make more minas per day. My dad was a butcher, and he brought home a pig to eat nearly every day, and my mom didn't have a job, so instead she prepared dishes and kept the home clean.
I was an only child, so I had to do a lot of work, and at 12 started hunting to make some extra money. I think at 12 was when I, in the back of my mind, knew that I should be a hunter, but it wasn't until 16 when I murdered my parents that I knew for sure I didn't love hunting, but I loved killing.
As I walk down the forest i see a tavern... it could hold my enemies or my allies. I may never know the truth or the lies of the people. Everything I know is about hunting... I live to kill. I live for the satisfaction of the death of my enemies. I'm a 19 year old bounty hunter. Well not yet but I do try. I will become the ultimate hunter. I killed my parents at the age of 16 and that's when I realised I loved to see blood on my hands. I know it was wrong to kill them... But I feel the guilt every damned day of my life.
As I approach the sign stating the name "Golden Cloud Tavern". Wonderful name, though I've never seen a golden cloud. Must be a figure of speech or something? As I enter I see the bar and ask for a drink. I don't think that the bartender trusts me but I don't care all I want is a drink. He hands me some ale but I don't have any money on me so I ask for a tab. He says praise the sky gods so I do and 20 minas rain upon me. Strange how this world works. I hand him 10 minas and he leaves me to my drink. I drink it up and see a person come in. He sees my blade and hunting items, so he sits by me and whispers
"Hey, I see you're a hunter I got a job for you. There's a man I have some "problems" with, I want him dead in 2 days meet back here and I will give you 50 minas. Deal?" I think about the deal and say yes. He nods his head then leaves. I think about then I just realised something! He never gave me a description! I look around the bar and see that he left a picture... It's a man named Tom Strange. Never heard of him but it says here that he lives in Petrus. The trading town. Oh well. Easy picking hopefully... (time skip)
Okay I arrived at Petrus, and see he's fishing. This should be easy. I think about the way I should kill him. I could go for the neck crack or the silent knife stab to the neck. I see no people around so I use the neck crack and he lays limp. I throw his body into the river, but first I check his pockets for anything of significance and I find a journal. I take it to the bar but realise he won't be there for two days. As I go in I see he is still there. I go to the bar and sit beside him and whisper
"Here's the journal, now where is the minas?" He hands me them and I place them in the bag. 500!! That's enough to buy me more materials. I guess it is time for me to better my equipment anyways. I ask the bartender if he has any rooms and he says no but I leave before because thats what I thought. Oh well. It's time I leave and continue my journey to become the ultimate hunter.
Personality Traits: Loves blood, Is a talented hunter and killer, always is alone, and at times is regretful 
Ambitions: To become the Ultimate Hunter, thats the only thing he wants in life.
Strengths/Talents: An expert killer and hunter, so he can get what he needs, because he is a hunter he knows how to sneak up on people which is good for killing. He is also really good at defending himself.
Weaknesses/Inabilities: He relies on other people too much, so without them he couldn't do much. He can get arrested because of bounty hunting. Lazy and arrogant
Appearance (List the extra details of your characters appearance, IE; height & weight): He is 6'1, weighs 210lbs, And is muscular.
Appearance, please provide us a screenshot of your character’s skin (If you need help, see our screenshot guidehere): Go to: http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/5568240/vanir-the-elf/

[Mephistophelian 977]

This Application is put on:

 

 

For the following reasons:

 

-Your biography gives no reason for your character killing his parents.

 

-Please rewrite the entire biography. It is mostly in story format (stories aren't what we are looking for) and the part that isn't doesn't give any reasoning (i.e. the killing of parents).

 

-Edit the rest of your application accordingly.

 

You have 24 hours to make the change.

If you have any questions or comments, please feel free to PM me!

 

This Application is:

 

 

For the following reasons:

 

-Changes not made.

 

You have 24 hours to wait until you can reapply.

If you have any questions or comments, please feel free to PM me!

Edited June 25, 2015 by hugothechamp
Denied.

[Mephistophelian 977]

Moved to Denied Application Forum.