[Denied] [Pending] my application redo

[UyTheo 0]

 What’s your Minecraft Account Name?:UyTheo
How old are you?:12
Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13):yes
Have you read and agreed to the rules?:yes
What’s the rule you agree with the most?:no cyber bullying
Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules):
How did you find out about Lord of the Craft?by YouTube videos
What is roleplaying?:where you act like someone ur not and pretend ur someone Elese in a fantasy/made up world 
What is metagaming?:using information that ur roleplay character would not know
What is powergaming?:a player that presumes/declares his/her own action is successful without the other player freedom to act on his own.
Character’s sex:Female
Character’s race:Elf
Character’s age:50
Biography (Please make it a decent two paragraphs long. Remember to add server lore, and events that happened to your character so that they don’t contradict history.):Haeronien was born to a farmer elf and breeder elf,Haeronien also had a "overprotective brother".Many days when Haeronien was little her parents would be to busy to spend time with her,so she would go out and explore with her brother and they would clime trees overlooking the village and they would play tag and hide n' seek.One day Haeronien and her brother were exploring and saw a wanted killer and he spotted them.The killer quickly drew his sword to hurt them.Haeronien's brother always had a sword in him and quickly battle began.ThunderWing(her brother) fought long and hard with the killer.When he was thrown to the ground,but suddenly he got back up and captured the killer.The killer in a "Bag"was taken to the jail house and locked away.
A few years had gone by and Haeronien and her family grew closer,her brother went off to Guard Camp and Haeronien stayed in the village.While she remained in the village Haeronien began to care about animals,but she wanted to take and become a guard like her brother,but only Males could be a guard,so Haeronien helped on the farm especially with the Animals.When Haeronien was 45 her parents were old and could not work on the farm anymore.So it was either Haeronien take over or sell it Haeronien didn't like farming,but she loved working with the animals.So Haeronien toke over the farm.She mainly worked with the animals but also farmed.One day Haeronien was working with the animals and a messenger had came and delivered news about Her parents,Haeronien's parents H....h..h..had died.Haeronien upset didn't believe it and she quickly packed to go to the village in which her parents moved to.To find it was true her parents had died.A  few later when she was 50 and an adult a war had broke out,and Haeroien wanted to take part and so she did along with her Brother they fought in the war.Three years had past and the elves won.Haeroien and her brother went home and celebrated toghter.Later they went to the Elven city of Haelun'or to celbrate with the other Warriors.Haeroien was one of the only girls elfs that fought but she acted like one of the guys.
Personality Traits:shy,Kind,Curious
Ambitions:she wants to be friends with anyone and everyone 
Strengths/Talents:her talent is art and she tries to put it in everything she does
Weaknesses/Inabilities:She is weak to fighting(but she will fight when needed).
Appearance (List the extra details of your characters appearance, IE; height & weight):She is tall,and has brown long hair with a blonde strength down her hair with bright green eyes
Appearance, please provide us a screenshot of your character’s skin (If you need help, see our screenshot guide here):

Edited October 13, 2015 by UyTheo

[AGP 3169]

Greetings applicant, after reviewing your application I have placed you on Pending for reason(s) pointed out below, message me if you have any questions or concerns. You have 24 hours to make these changes. Failing to do so will result in this application being denied and thus, having to wait 24 hours before re-applying.

 

-Your definition of Powergaming is incorrect, please refer to the link here for guidance.

-"StarCross" isn't really a valid elven name.

-Please include Server Lore into your application. Your racial Sub-Wiki can be found on the Wiki. It will help you get started in incorporating Server Lore such as certain places, wars or even significant events to state just a few examples!

-Please go through your application and ensure that all grammar and punctuation is correct.

 

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to send me a PM! As a reminder you have 24 hours to respond to me in a PM and fix your application based off the information and request above. If you do not Private Message me I will review it on my own time around 24 hours from this post. In addition to what was stated above I reserve the right to add or remove requested edits needed for the application. Good luck applicant!

 

Greetings applicant, after reviewing your application I have placed you on Pending for reason(s) pointed out below, message me if you have any questions or concerns. You have 24 hours to make these changes. Failing to do so will result in this application being denied and thus, having to wait 24 hours before re-applying.

 

-Please include Server Lore into your application. Your racial Sub-Wiki can be found on the Wiki. It will help you get started in incorporating Server Lore such as certain places, wars or even significant events to state just a few examples!

 

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to send me a PM! As a reminder you have 24 hours to respond to me in a PM and fix your application based off the information and request above. If you do not Private Message me I will review it on my own time around 24 hours from this post. In addition to what was stated above I reserve the right to add or remove requested edits needed for the application. Good luck applicant!

You have been denied for reason(s) pointed out below, message me if you have any questions or concerns. You may re-apply after 24 hours have passed.

 

-Applicant failed to make all requested edit(s) to the application within the given 24 hour period.

 

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to send me a PM! I will be more than willing to help point you in the correct direction and I highly recommend taking into consideration the advise and issue(s) with your application that I have stated above. 

[AGP 3169]

Moved to Denied Application Forum.