[Denied] IamCrazy13's Re-Application

[IamCrazy13 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please do your best to correct spelling and grammatical errors, this is an RP server and writing is the main form of communication!

 

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?:IamCrazy13

How old are you?:13

Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13): Yas

Have you read and agreed to the rules?: Yep

What’s the rule you agree with the most?: No Trolling

Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules):

How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? Not one

 

Definitions

Feel free to Google the answers or browse our forums, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not those of another website or person!

 

What is roleplaying?: Its a role you play in a game or real life.

What is metagaming?: Its information a character would not know normally in RP.

What is powergaming?: Powergaming is using emotions that do not give the other person any time to react or respond.

 

In-Character Information

Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable! Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with a character that you actually want to play.

 

Character’s name: Yuno Gasai

Character’s sex: Female

Character’s race: Elven (Hates Orcs)

Character’s age: 19

Biography  (Please make it a decent two paragraphs long. Remember to add server lore, and events that happened to your character so that they don’t contradict history.): Yuno is an ambiguous one. For the most part she is a sweet, feminine and sometimes shy girl when around her Senpai. But, this masks her dark and sanguinary side—a ruthless, cold and calculating psychopath who has little, if any, problem in using others for her ends- her an survival. She will resort to cruel and usually violent methods, most of the time coming out of nowhere, that generally end in bloody deaths, of any respective follower, effectively making her a Yandere. She is also an amazing stalker hehe.

Personality Traits: Creepy, Psychopathic, Stalkerish 

Ambitions: To impress her Senpai-Chan

Strengths/Talents: Brutal, Swift and Deception 

Weaknesses/Inabilities: Seeing her Senpai get hurt

Appearance (List the extra details of your characters appearance, IE; height & weight): Blue long hair, 7 and a half stone, 5'4

Appearance, please provide us a screenshot of your character’s skin (If you need help, see our screenshot guide here):  

 without the leak and the screenshot wasn't working.

[Lego XBOX 915]

You have been denied for reason(s) pointed out below, message me if you have any questions or concerns. You may re-apply after 24 hours have passed.

Please lengthen your Biography out to a longer length. I am looking for around the size of two paragraphs. As an idea incorporate some of the causes of your strengths or weaknesses in their with detail or branch off on more information about your character’s development to their current standpoint.

Adding onto this; I was truly amused by the bio -- however, it just doesn't fit into the Lord of the Craft world. Sometime back, we disallowed having characters that started out as criminals. Your character appears to be what could be considered a special snowflake. Unfortunately, if you were to enter the server as this character -- she'd be killed on sight pretty much everywhere.

Now, onto the problems with the character.

Please include Server Lore into your application. Your racial Sub-Wiki for elves can be found on the Wiki here! It will help you get started in incorporating Server Lore into your Biography such as certain places, wars or even significant event.

To be frank, the bio doesn't contain much more than the description of her personality. It should be her story, how she came to be.

The 'senpai' and related Japanese things do not fit with the Lord of the Craft world at all.

Your bio doesn't explain a reason why your elf hates orcs. The further problem is that hating orcs is extremely cliche and you should avoid that in your next application.

Finally, the appearance of your character is completely off. Elves do not have the unnatural cyan-blue hair you claim to have -- even dyed. Dyeing hair is also something elves currently frown upon. The clothes your character wears are too modern for a fantasy - high medieval server.

If you have any questions or concerns feel free to send me a PM! As a reminder you have 24 hours to respond to me in a PM and fix your application based off the information and request given above. If you do not Private Message me I will review it on my own time around the time of 24 hours from this post. In addition to what was stated above I reserve the right to add or remove requested edits needed for the application. Good luck applicant!

[Lego XBOX 915]

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