[Denied]SoloKill's Application

[SoloKill 0]

Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name: SoloKill

-How old are you?: 15

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence: -EST (United States of America)

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: I believe so, but I may have the occasional slip up.

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: My name is Jonah, and I suppose I’m an average teenager. I do play quite a lot of minecraft (a bit more than I like to admit to others) and I think that I have a fairly good grasp of all skills in minecraft, excluding redstone, much to my disdain. I think I get along with others well, but people may just be humoring me.

-How much time could you be on the server long weekly?: At least 5 hours, but most likely 10.

-How long have you played minecraft?: I’ve been playing minecraft… well, for a while. A few months before the Nether was added (the Halloween update). I’m not really sure when…

-What do you know about roleplaying?: I know that it’s kind of like interactive storytelling, with many others participating, and that you have to go off of others’ ideas. I do have a decent amount of experience, but I’ve never had to put it to words, so pardon my bad explanation.

-What do you expect this server will be like?: I expect it to be fantastic. I’ve been on many servers, but none as complex as this.

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: Mordrum: It fell to ruin and eventually was shut down. HeroCraft: I’m still on it, just not vary active. If I’m accepted, I will probably quit permanently.

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Definitely.

-Name the 4 races on this server: Elves, Orcs, Dwarves, and Humans.

-How did you hear about us?: My friend, who was applying.

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?: SoloKill

In-Character:

-Character Name: Edren (pronounced ee-dren)

-What is your Race?: Elf.

-Biography: Edren was lost at birth, thought to be killed in raid by the undead. He escaped, and wandered to an orc settlement. While staying with the orcs, their warlike traits rubbed off onto him. However, after having witnessed his host family being brutally murdered by the king, he fled, taking only the supplies that he deemed necessary. These supplies included a wooden sword, which was hastily crafted, and a handful of bread, which he baked himself. Finally, after his sword had been chipped out and bread been eaten, he managed to drag himself to the Cloud Temple of Aegis.

-Character Age: 39

-Character Appearance:Edren has odd purple hair, with moss colored highlights. He still wears the worn shirt that his host mother made before his death.

-Character Personality: Edren is outspoken and hotheaded, and quick to become violent, though appreciates the arts. He is very biased towards orcs, regardless of the fact that they raised him.

-Your ambitions: Edren pushes on through each day with the vow that he will make the orcs crumble, and he will not stop until he has killed every last one.

-Can your character read or write?: Yes, but his handwriting is atrocious.

-Can your character mine?: Yes, but not very well. He mines usually only for work in hard times.

-Are you a capable builder?: He isn’t a builder in the slightest. His idea of a nice home is a hut scrapped together from wood and dirt, with a bit of cobblestone.

-Can you wield a sword?: He has a mastery of the sword, and polishes his skills as often as possible, as he needs to slay orcs.

-Enjoy Farming?: He is an awful farmer, and his crops usually end up trampled by his own feet, having become distracted and started practicing his swordplay.

-Does your character have any special skills?: His skills are perseverance and being able to overpower others, with only words. However, he doesn’t often use his skills and usually quits and resorts to violence.

-A screenshot of your skin: http://tinyurl.com/448dsbb

Additional info: I think this server is fantastic, and I really hope I get in. Thank you :)

[Jadles 85]

A good attempt, but:

Your answers are too short in places.

Your Character Biography is far too short.

There are errors in grammar and punctuation.

It is not neat / is ALL BOLD.

Look at some examples ((but don't copy from them)), re-read your application, take your time and try again.

Have a read of this also: Petyr's excellent guide - http://www.lordofthe...r-applications/

Common reasons people are denied:

-It has bad grammar or Punctuation.

-Your biography was too short.

-Your Biography didn't link to the lore of Aegis.

-You obviously didn't read the lore.

-Fix the layout: This could be from having bolds everywhere or simply being hard to read.

-It lacked effort.

-Your skin isn't RP.

-Needed an actual picture of your skin.

-You didn't include a skin link or it didn't work.

-Your application was too short.

These are just some of the reasons it could have been

I encourage you too check out the following link if you are struggling to write an application.

http://www.lordofthe...od-application/

[SoloKill 0]

Thank you. It was incomplete, but I'll take the 2 days to repost it :)

[Hunter (sckolar) 50]

Biography is also a bit short.

[SoloKill 0]

Thank you, but I thought my grammar in this app was flawless...