CosmicWhaleShark 2488 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Just. No. I'm sorry but this has zero-originality, nor does it have anything to offer to the playerbase. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ivran 137 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Please. explain to me the 'no originality' part. As this is a WIP, I feel that it is unfair to just say, "no". Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynx 158 Author Share Posted March 10, 2012 Just. No. I'm sorry but this has zero-originality, nor does it have anything to offer to the playerbase. Zero-originality? I spent this week writing this only talking on TS. Other then the physical description and the base of the Assecla the story for it came directly from me and Ivrans thoughts. And it will offer unique and fun RP. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaDelta 969 Share Posted March 10, 2012 I think you can add this con to the list: Slight Confusion for other players. ie. Physical and Mental Characteristics. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ivran 137 Share Posted March 10, 2012 I think you can add this con to the list: Slight Confusion for other players. ie. Physical and Mental Characteristics. Explain please. PS: The whole point of a WIP is the fact that we are editing and revising things, this isn't even close to being done. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zarsies 6795 Share Posted March 10, 2012 -Snip- Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaDelta 969 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Explain please. PS: The whole point of a WIP is the fact that we are editing and revising things, this isn't even close to being done. I am giving a possible con. And what i mean is what the situation with Ninja is. Just look at why he said and take it into account. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynx 158 Author Share Posted March 10, 2012 Added another con. I will look into what you said Karma and thank you for your feedback I will try to make more descriptive physical features and more cons. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaDelta 969 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Also remember that saying they drink blood to make them stronger is sort of powergamish. They can just say "You cant kill me i just drank blood a few minutes ago". So perhaps change it to something else? Like how about they never sleep and make it insomnia instead of stronger with blood? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
no longer active 734 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Maybe blood makes it do they don't have to sleep as much? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynx 158 Author Share Posted March 10, 2012 Thank you for helping. If anyone else wants to leave a suggestion feel free to, this is still a work in progress. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaDelta 969 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Yeah. Perhaps change this disease to where they need a VA [for cannibalism and psychopathy], you guys can make a guild [with good lore], ask a GM about approval on the wiki, and change it to where its just an insomnia thing where people just go crazy from it. Thats how i dont see this becoming one of those other vampire things where its just "suckign blood to stay immortal and beautiful". A different kind of way to make it like a drug addiction to blood. Would be pretty cool. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lynx 158 Author Share Posted March 10, 2012 So should I just re-write most of this so it just explains the disease then ask a Gm to look at it? Edit: I was planning on making The Cult of The Blood Moon a guild anyway :wink: . But I need this approved to make a VA for my character that would lead the guild. I think it would lead to fun RP Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ivran 137 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Thank you sooo much for the feedback and suggestions! What we mean when we say that we are 'stronger' when we drink blood, it's by a tiny margin. We could even remove that if need be, it's not important. The issue with making it 'Cannibal and Psychopathy' is the fact that there can only be around 3-5 insane people in Aegis at a time. Also, drinking blood doesn't improve the way we look, it just preserves the way we looked before we were cursed, whether you are ugly or beautiful. Thanks again for the help and feedback ;) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaDelta 969 Share Posted March 10, 2012 Im not telling you what to do, just giving my two sense in what can be done. Do whatever you deem acceptable. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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