[Denied]My 6th application

[Seal 17]

Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name: sealteam2

How old are you?: 13

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?: I may have a few errors or so.

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?: Yes I used to play on a roleplay server that went down.

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?: Yes I do.

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: On youtube

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft: It got deleted.

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here:

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is: Roleplaying is were you act like someone in a game. Like my charceter can be me in real life or different.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is: Meta-gaming is were you pick up something from OCC chat and use it for your charecter's advantage.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is: Power-Emoting is were Player 1: *Dodges Player 2's sword* Player 2: *Kills Player 1 in one hit.*

In-Character Details

Character Name: Talos Blade

Character Race: Dwarf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:

Talos was a young boy when his family died, he was about 7 years old when his home was raided by bandits. When a bandit was about to kill him an elf broke a window and pulled Talos out of harms way. The elf took Talos in to live with him. When Talos turned 20 he decided to buy his own home and move out. Talos often visited the Elf however after a few years the elf died from old age. Talos would hunt for food and he would chop wood to cook and heat his home. One day after he had killed a cow he heard someone jumping from tree to tree although he saw no one, once he returned to his cabin several orcs appered. This angered Talos pulled out his axe and put all of his rage into the swings, each hit took down the orcs. Talos was concerned that he could be attacked and he was always on guard. Talos was good at living off the land however he did not like the fact that his home could be raided and he could be killed.

Just before Talos's 38th birthday his house was attacked by bandits and after he killed all of them he knew that he had to move because it was too dangerous and other bandits would return for revenge. He took all his stuff and left his cabin and decieded to sail off to an island with no trees and no hills. Once he found a perfect place he built his house. After years of being lonely, he decided to become a travelor. Right now his age is 40 and he has overcome many life obstacles. To this day Talos does'nt talk about his family that he lost at an early age although he does think of them everyday. Talos's has meet many friends traveling although he has had his share of defeating thiefs and bandits during his travels.

What are your characters ambitions?: To hunt and explore the land and to get revenge on the bandits that killed his family.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:http://www.minecraftskins.info/dwarfrogue.html

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character: Talos learned different skills from the elf that saved his life and he will never forget what the elf has done for him.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?

"Let me see if I have any coins for ye......." says Talos while digging into his pocket for coins. "Ahhh....I dont have any coins for ye.....give me one minute I'll go get some coins." *Talos goes to his house and takes 200 coins* *Talos looks for the dwarf but he is no where to be found.* "Yes you need 40 coins if you want to keep your shop here!" A voice says behind Talos. "Please sir ye, gotta let me keep this shop its all I have!" Another voice says behind Talos. *He hears a gasp* "Do ye have de coins ye said ye had?" Asks the dwarf while running to his shop. "Yes here ye go......hope this is enough." Replies Talos. "Thank ye!" yells the dwarf while running away from his shop.

　

You’re in the Cloud Sanctuary late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. The only present monk is fast asleep, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?[/ "Stop it ye orc! I'll leave yer alone if ye stop messing with the dwarf!" Yells Talos. *Orc charges at Talos with anger and rage* "So ye want it to be like this?" Talos laughs *Talos pulls out his axe and starts swinging it at the orc* "Orc I think you shouldn't be messing with dwarfs, no you shouldn't" Says the monk right behind the orc. *Talos chuckles* "Now I think you should leave these grounds now, orc." Says the monk pointing torwards the woods. Talos looks around for the dwarf. but he was no where to be found

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?: "Are ye ok sir?" askes Talos while holding out a hand for the old man. "Y-Yes but I need some help with my cane......can you go get someone?" *Talos nods* "But I think if I'm correct der is a town near by with a shopkeeper selling canes for just 10 coins." *Talos picks up the old man's coins and puts them in the bag.* "I think ye'll need this coins. I'll buy the cane." *Old man nods* *Talos buys the cane and then give it to the old man.* "Thank you kind sir!" The old man says while walking away.

[Skippy 2466]

Denied.

• Role-Playing definition needs touching up.
  
• You need to implement real in-game locations in your biography.
  
• It's very overused to have your parents killed by bandits. You are not forced to kill off your parents!
  
• One dwarf can not take on a pack of orcs, nor bandits.
  
• Your skin is very overused. You may request one to be made here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/forum/32-graphics/
  
• The ORQ involving the orc and dwarf needs to be re-done. It is not well done currently.
  
• You need to improve your grammar, as it is needed so you can communicate well with the community.
  
• Please read this guide on the Dwarven Race: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/56452-dwarves/

If you wish to submit another application, you must wait 24 hours or face instant denial.

[Skippy 2466]

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