[Denied]my 5th app for Gherren

[thaddeus11 75]

Minecraft Account Name:Thaddeus12

How old are you?: I am currently 13

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:est,U.S

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:Yes I do.

Have you had any previous experience in role-playing?: Yes, I’ve played on skyrim world of War craft and some more major rp games

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?: Yes, I have

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: My friend also known as Akeinos_GoldHand (CentralGuard)

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/71275-my-application-for-my-dwarf-gherren/page__p__573748__fromsearch__1#entry573748 http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/71376-my-2nd-applacation-for-my-cave-dwarf-gherren/page__p__574975__fromsearch__1#entry574975 http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/71486-my-third-app-for-my-dwarf-gherren/page__p__576592__fromsearch__1#entry576592 http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/71630-my-4th-applaction-for-gherren/page__p__578318__fromsearch__1#entry578318

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here:http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/!: yes I have

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of role-playing is: Role-playing is when you and a friend act something out by making a charter of your own or using a charter you’ve all ready made Example would be a war or a friendly battle.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is: meta-gaming is when you start doing or saying something your charter does not know about. Example: I died, I run back to the person who killed me with a new charter and shouted out to everyone that he was a killer and then attack him.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is: Power-Gaming is when you do something forcefully by giving yourself power, like killing someone instantly.

In-Character Details

Character Name: Gherren

Character Race: Cave Dwarf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary: Gherren was born a little bit before the demise of aegis, His Mother died at birth, But he still had his father, yet they were very poor. At the age of 17 Gherren was expected to work in the mines as if he had been doing it all his life, as his father still had honor to wield. When Gherren turned the age of 18 his father and he were forced like so many others out of his homeland and into the new world of asulon where his father did not make it. When Gherren got to the new world he followed the dwarfs of Alras later becoming kal’alras. When Gherren found out that alras had finely been taken over he decided to leave for an adventure until the new hold of kal’alras had gotten order. On the road to the cloud temple he decided to take a short cut through the mountains and got lost, He made a quick shelter and then found some sheep to make bed he could not find any food so he almost died of hunger but was saved by the monks of the cloud temple, he now stands in the center of the cloud temple wondering what happened to him, and where he is.

What are your characters ambitions? His ambitions are to get back to kal’alras as soon as he can.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here: I could not get it to post an actual pic, but if you go to miners need cool shoes and search Gherren you’ll fin a full pic of it.

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character: nothing

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in role-play? These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response?*walks up to dwarf. Hello kind sir would you mind showing me your wares please.*looks at the thing the dwarf is selling. I’ll take the pick please, hay do you need a place to stay, there’s a inn over there here *hands the dwarf 100 minas for both the pick and enough for the dwarf to stay at the inn for 4 days. Thanks hope we meet again!

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?*walks up to the dwarf and orc. What’s going on here you two? Can you let the poor dwarf off this time? Thanks. I won’t be around next time to save you sir. What’s your name? If I were you I would get heading home before he comes back. Also if your home is far you could always follow me to kal’alras

whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenseless man. What does your character do?:*runs to man as fast as he can. Are you all right? Do you need a new walking stick? * carries man to the closest house and ask the woman inside for help. Can you help me I think he’s badly hurt! * patched man up. I’ll run out side and grab you a stick for you to walk on. Here you are. Next time please make sure you’re well protected and have a sturdier walking stick. Oh I’ll be back. *Runs out the door to get the minas that fell on the ground. Here you are.

[Taiga 764]

Your Application has been...

DENIED [ ]

Put on PENDING [ ]

Reason(s)Why Your Application Was Denied:

[[X's mark the parts you need to rectify.]]

Out of Character:

Missing Areas [ ]

Bad Information [ ]

Role Play:

Missing Biography [ ]

-Short Biography [ ]

Insufficient Information in OOC [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Metagaming Definition [ ]

-Insufficient Information in Powergaming Definition [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge on Role Play [ ]

Insufficient Knowledge of the World [ ]

Incorrect Lore / Other-Worldly Lore [ ]

-Fabricated Places/Large-Scale Events [ ]

-Unreal Scenarios [ ]

Bouts of Powergaming [ ]

Bouts of Metagaming [ ]

Conflicting Answers [ ]

Character is Cliche [ ]

Requires a Villain Application [ ]

Open Ended Responses Require Elaboration [X]

Form:

Bad Spelling/Grammar [ ]

Missing Areas [ ]

Breaking Rules [ ]

Cliche [ ]

Plagiarized [ ]

Skin:

Missing Skin [ ]

-Skin Doesn't Fit Character [ ]

-Incorrect Character Description [ ]

-Incorrect Skin Format [ ]

-Unloreful Skin [ ]

Other Comments:

I'm terribly sorry, but you have been denied due to poor Open Response Questions. They are lacking in character interaction and emotes. You don't only -say- what you would say, but a narrative for the opposing person is also required. I would try adding some character interaction emotes as well in attempts to make it a bit more realistic.

You cannot reply for 3 months, seeing as you cannot make more than 5 applications per three months. Take this time to hang around and get some tips from people of the community.

Good luck!

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If you have any Questions or concerns, feel free to send a Private Message to my account! <3

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Just because you play RPG's, doesn't mean you have RPed before.

Don't post another application in a period of two (2) days. It ruins our organisation methods.

Definition of Metagaming and Powergaming : http://sm-rp.forumotion.com/t32-powergaming-metagaming-ic-and-ooc

[Taiga 764]

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