EminentFate96s Third Application Corrected

[EminentFate96 7]

Out-Of-Character Details

Minecraft Account Name:EmenintFate96 (Yes I incorrectly spelt "Eminent" wrong when I made my MC account..

How old are you?:16

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Australia

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:Yes, grown up speaking english.

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:On a Star Wars Roleplaying site called "Star Wars Combine"

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:Yes

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?: I googled "Top Minecraft Servers" and a "Lets play LotC" youtube video came up and I checked it out.

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft: -

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-

the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! :

I do not want to sign up for the minecraft forums, so please let me in..

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is: To take control of a Character inside a game and to live out that characters life.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is: Meta Gaming is when a player uses information they have aquired outside of RP and uses it in

RP. for instance a player might be called "Bob Legendary Archer" and another player might say "Hey Bob!" but that player doesnt know the persons name in actual RP.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is: Where a player uses a third person perspective to explain something.

"Bob picks up his donut and hungrily eats it"

In-Character Details

Character Name:Enelya Telperiën

Character Race:Wood Elf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:

Enelya Telperiën, a beautiful 96 year old Female Wood Elf roughly 2.9 feet tall, which is far taller than the average height of a normal Wood Elf. With bright blonde

hair dyed to give the effect of the shining sun. When you look into Enelyas sparkling eyes you can see something special, like a certain kind of hope that you just

cant put your finger on..

Enelya grew up with her father and mother in The Elder Tree City of Normandor, but her mother died when Enelya was only 16 years old, Enelyas mother gave her a shining

cyan pendent for good luck, Enelya never parted from it. Enelyas father Egnasben was so heart broken from his wifes death that he moved to ArmaLuna, Enelya how ever

loved The Tall Trees and her life long friends in Normandor so much that she decided to stay behind. But every night Enelya would climb high up to the top on one of

the trees and look out across the world, wondering when she would visit her father and visit all the foreign lands..

What are your characters ambitions?: To become a part of one of the Elven kingdoms and to live life to the fullest, while helping others.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:Enelya plays a variety of keyed wood instruments, like the oak organ piano and she

is very good at hunting.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in

roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a

Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response? *Enelya hears the scrubby looking dwarf pleading to passer bys to purchase his

wares, Enelya takes pity on this poor dwarf* "Hi there Salesman, could I please purchase one of your items?" *The Poor Dwarf smiles and Enelya sees a glimmer of hope

in his eyes* "What would you like to purchase? I have this old rusty sword for 40 Minas, a Stale Loaf of Bread for 7 Minas and a Rotten Mushroom Stew for 15 Minas"

exclaimed the poor dwarf. "That sword is so expensive!" thought Enelya, "But I am not going to eat either of those meals.." *The poor dwarf can tell Enelya is

reconsidering her offer, the dwarf starts to look rather downcast. Enelya sees the hope in his eyes slowly wither away and does what is right* "I'll purchase your

sword thanks!" Enelya exclaimed with enthusiasm. "Thank you very much" said the poor dwarf while greedily exchanging his rusty sword for the 40 Minas. * Enelya

proceded to put the sword in her backpack, and even though she knows she was ripped off, the glimmer of hope she saw in the dwarfs eyes was worth the money*

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks

like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?

*Enelya is walking along the Oren Road late at night when she discovers two figures talking to each other in angry tones, as Enelya walks closer she realises it is an

Ork and a Dwarf* "Uh Oh" Enelya thinks, "This could mean trouble". "Give me the money or ill kill you!" Screams the Ork, "I need this money for my family, please have

mercy!" begs the Dwarf. *The Ork pulls his sword to the Dwarfs throat* "give it to me now or you die" exclaimed the Ork. *Enelya pulls her bow out and places her arrow

inside, as she lifts it back it makes a slight clicking sound, the Ork hears* "What do you want pretty elf?!" the Ork said angrily "Leave this dwarf alone or ill put

this through your skull" Said Enelya "He means no harm, leave him alone" *The Ork lets out a scream of anger as he runs off down the road*

"Thank you for saving me!" the scared dwarf panted, "What can I do to repay you?" "You can go, I require no payment" said Enelya, *The dwarf hurrily retreated along

the road* "Orks and Dwarfs" sighed Enelya, "It never gets old."

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask

something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins

spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:

"Please let me help you with that!" Enelya began, "Dont worry I wont steal your money" *The old man looked delighted to see that this young elf was not a theif*

"Thank you so kindly umm .. ?" "Enelya, my name is Enelya" she said cheerfully, "Thank you for your help Enelya" The old man replied, "I wont forget your help, and

here is a few Minas for helping me out." *The old man picked up a new stick from the side of the road and started to make his way home* "Have a great day" Enelya

grinned.

[Skippy 2466]

Your application has been...

Denied.

• Didn't post application on Minecraft Forum. It is a must.
  
• Power-Gaming definition is incorrect.
  
• Biography breaks lore:
  If your elf is 96, she'd be born in Aegis. When she was 16 years old and being raised by her mother in the Elven Capital in Asulon, we would've been in Aegis. ArmaLuna also didn't exist in Aegis. If your character was born in Aegis, you must also include the trip from Aegis to Asulon in your biography.
  
• Skin tone is too pale for a wood elf. They have tanish skin.
  
• In your second ORQ, you say the dwarf cowards, or something of the sort. Dwarves aren't cowards and they have pride. A dwarf would never let an orc push him around, even if the orc had armor and weapons.
  
• Bad grammar.
  
• Bad formatting.
  

Helpful links that may help you:

• http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/62680-so-youre-a-wandering-soul/
  
• http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/29962-advice-from-the-application-team/
  
• http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/66423-lotc-lore-guide/
  
• http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/71262-posting-your-application-on-the-minecraft-forums-for-dummies/
  
• http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/67199-how-to-get-your-application-accepted/
  

After changes have been made, you may reapply after 24 hours have passed. If you have any questions or concerns, send me a Private Message.

[Skippy 2466]

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