[Denied]Application For Imageaudio

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Out-Of-Character Details

I'm looking for a good strict rp server.

Minecraft Account Name:imageaudio

How old are you?:17

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:Central Time/America

Do you have a good grip on English grammar and the English language?:I was born in America and was born speaking english so yes.

Have you had any previous experience in roleplaying?:Yes

Have you read and understood and agree to the rules?:Yes

How did you hear about the Lord of the Craft?:I heard from Minecraft skin references.

Link any previous applications you have made to the Lord of the Craft:

Have you posted this application on Minecraft Forum? If not, post it here: http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r-100-unique-gameplay/! :Yes

Definitions

In your own words, define what the act of roleplaying is:Playing as a fiction character as if you were really them.

In your own words, define what the act of meta-gaming is: Using out of game information to make decisions in game.

In your own words, define what the act of power-emoting is: using characters that have unfair or unrealistic powers.

In-Character Details

Character Name:Alfonse Elenlond

Character Race:Elf

Character biography - Make this at least 2 paragraphs long, which must explain your character’s history, appearance, personality, age and any other details you deem necessary:

Alfonse Elenlond grew up as an orphan because his family was murdered by a bandit group of orcs at the age of 5. As he grew up his hate for orcs grew strong by the day because he suffered as a slave until the age of 16. He escaped slavery by stealing a bow and killing the slave guard, as well as, sneaking off during the night.

He is untrusting of everyone at first but becomes trusting once he gets to know someone. He improves as an archer day by day with the bow he stole from the bandit orcs. He has long blonde hair and pale white skin. He is currently at the age of 27.

What are your characters ambitions?: He has no ambitions in life except to survive.

Please provide an in-game screenshot of your skin here:http://www.planetmin...play-character/

Is there anything else you would like to say about your character:Not at this moment.

Open-Response-Questions

Each question here must be answered with a minimum of one full paragraph, and detail the scene you are given in the way it would happen in roleplay. These questions should be answered in first person. Be detailed, not short.

Upon entering the Mighty Human City of Arethor, you come across a shop-keeper calling out to sell his wares to passers-by. The shopkeeper is not a Human, he is a poor dwarf looking to make a living in a new city. What is your response? I'm sorry but I don't have enough money to purchase wares such as these but I will share what coin I have. I hope you succeed in your trials selling in Arethor. Farewell.

You’re wandering the Oren Road late at night, when a large Orc begins to threaten a nearby dwarf. There is no help nearby, and the situation looks like it will escalate into violence soon, what does your character do?I see one of those dirty orcs harassing a dwarf. I have to do something. (takes out his bow and aims it at the orc) He will regret picking on the weak. (fires arrow) (runs over to dwarf) I'm sorry are you ok? I sure took care of him huh? Please try to be more safe in the future and avoid this foul race. Farewell.

Whilst walking down the road to Malinor, you stumble upon an old man. His walking stick , looks weak and frail, and just as you are about to ask something, the stick breaks, and the man falls to the ground. As he falls down, a bag of Minas falls to the ground, and splits open. As you watch the multiple coins spill out, you peer down at the defenceless man. What does your character do?:[/color][/i] Are you ok old man? (picks all the coins up) Let me help you up. Looks like you need a new walking stick. (picks up a stick nearby on the ground) You shouldn't be traveling without help. Let me take you to the nearest city.

[Skippy 2466]

Denied.

I'm sorry to inform you that your application has been denied. If you can fix these things, you'll be ready to re-send your application after 24 hours have passed.

• Power-Gaming/Emoting definition needs to be reworked.
  
• The whole My parents were killed by orcish bandits and I was an orphan since I was 5 is very over-used. Please be original, and remember, your parents do not need to be subjected to death. Be a caring son and let them live.
  
• You show no experience of using any form of weapon in your application, and somehow you randomly get a bow, master how to use it, and manage to kill an ORCISH guard with it, who would most likely be wearing armor. Not to mention there are other guards.
  
• Elves do not have pale skin; their skin is brown if a wood elf, black/silver if a dark elf, and if your character is a high elf, you'd be a pale elf. You don't go into detail, so I don't know what subrace you are.
  
• Your ORQs are lacking major detail and dialog. You only tell us what your character does, and with that not that well. You need to explain what EACH character involved does, and what they say.
  
• Firing one shot at the orc in the second ORQ, killing it instantly? Power-Emoting.
  

[Skippy 2466]

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