[Denied][Dwarf] Dorbir Blackmane Application

[Rael 935]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the
following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details
are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account
Name: Raelplayer.

How old are you?: 15.

Time-Zone: Eastern
Standard Time.

Have you read,
understood and agreed to the rules?: I have read, understood, and agree to all
of the rules.

What previous
experience have you had in role-playing?: I have roleplayed frequently between
World of Warcraft, Everquest, and Runescape for over 5 years. On World of
Warcraft and Runescape I was the leader of several clans, and even played as a
King on Runescape and the current Prime Minister of another Kingdom.

How did you hear about
the the Lord of the Craft?: I was told by Sir_Niccum, a friend of mine from
Runescape.

Link any applications
that you have previously made for the server: N/A.

Have you posted this
application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): I
have. http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-the-lord-of-the-craft-enter-the-world-of-anthos-officially-t-h-e-1-roleplay-server/page__st__2580

Have you read the
Dwarven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your
biography?: I have read all the Dwarven Lore, beginning to end, and I checked
up on the current Dwarven Clans and Roleplays.

 

Definitions

In your own words
define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing:
Role-Playing is the process of playing as a person other than yourself, with
many different available roles, races, and personalities. The objective of
Role-Play is to add to a story, that is fun for all people involved in said
plot.

Meta-gaming:
Meta-gaming is the use of out-of-character or out-of-worldly knowledge to your
own advantage or personal gain, such as inventing items not currently
technologically available in lore to help yourself, like fire-arms.

Power-emoting:
Power-emoting is the process of doing something without proper permission or
acceptance of another,that may affect them directly or indirectly. For example,
a man in a fight cannot simply punch a man without allowing him to respond or
react in turn.

 

In-Character
Information:

Complete the
following biography on your character:

 

Full Name: Dorbir Blackmane

Current Age: Dorbir Blackmane is 4 seasons old.

Sub-race (if any): Mountain Dwarf.

Clan (if any): No
current clan.

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

        Dorbir Blackmane was born to a well
enough off trading family on Asalon, though it had long roots. They were a
close-knit clan, and Dorbir was very loving with his brothers and sisters. They
grew up with the prosperity of their father’s trade, usually getting enough
food and having sufficient enjoyment.

        At the age of 12, Dorbir’s father paid
for him to be apprenticed to the local blacksmith, as he had always enjoyed
heating up little bits of metal he’d find around. The man who trained him was
alright, if not strict and a small talker. Slowly but surely, Dorbir learned
the trade and delved more into his hobby.

        After six years of training, Dorbir was
nearly ready to begin his journey in the world, and perhaps open his own
smithy. But that was when the Storm began on Asalon. As it swept across the
continent, his family grew steadily more fearful. Preparations were soon
initiated.

        Dorbir’s parents purchased several rooms
on a vessel, as the sea seemed the only option as more and more of the
continent was devastated. After all their belongings were packed, the family trekked
off for the sea.

        Nearing the ocean, they were intercepted
by a group of desperate bandits, looking nervously for tickets on the boats.
Defending their livelihood, Dorbir’s parents chose to say no to the attackers,
and this spelled out their deaths. Dorbir and his brothers tried their best to
make a stand, as his sisters fled. As his brothers broke and fled, he had just
enough time to speak with his dying father, who instructed him to carry on and
make a life for himself, with or without his family. And so Dorbir ran with all
his might, continuing on the path to the sea.

        In a day or two he reached the sands,
many vessels lining them. With his own ticket clutched in his hand, he managed
to get onto the boat, hoping his siblings had also made it. As he made the
voyage across the sea, he found no siblings of his. This saddened him deeply,
and he spent the trip mostly by his lonesome.

        As he arrived in the new lands, he took
to travelling from town to town and doing whatever odd-jobs he could find,
always looking for the family he had lost so seemingly long ago. After several
years of this, he still searches for a place to settle in life. Where will his
adventures take him?

Ambitions for the Future: I hope to set up a nice smithy in a town, and perhaps gain a
wife and children later on in life.

Personality:

        Dorbir fits the personality of any
average dwarf, though he is a bit different due to his life with humans since
the age of 18. He loves beer just like any other dwarf, and is quite loud and
honorable. He enjoys helping his friends and strangers when they treat him with
respect, and would gladly die for his allies need be.

       

Skills:

        Dorbir is a notably well blacksmith, due
to his extensive training by his father. He is not bad with a hammer or axe in
battle either, though he wouldn’t be considered a master. Lastly, he’s very
fond of woodworking, such as carving lovely stories into a nice arch or even
just a block of wood.

        In terms of his blacksmithing ability,
Dorbir specializes in wooden and iron armor as well as the weapons of the same
material. After learning the trade for about 10 years of his life, Dorbir was
considered ready to branch off on his own.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):
Dorbir stands at a height of 3’9”, brown hair coating his scalp and face. He is
garbed in nice enough cloth, colored brown green and gold. He is seen with a
smile on his face regularly, and sweat dripping from his brow, frequently being
at the bellows.

Any other details you wish to share about your character: I hope it’s not derpy that my dwarf works for humans, as it
works into a plot Drazker has established, and he has included me within it.

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be
answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

____

 

1. Whilst mining deep in the undergrounds of Kalos you see a large deposit
of diamond ore at the other side of the ravine you are on. There is a very thin rock bridge
that looks precariously unstable, but it is the only way to access the deposit. What do you do?

 

Answer: In the event of such, Dorbir Blackmane would alert his closest
superior, to better grasp the situation. Diamond is a valuable thing, but it is
not worth losing one’s life over. With help, not only is there a higher chance
of in the end getting the ore, but less loss of life will most likely take
place. The miners are him being fellow dwarfs, which he was always looking to
befriend, Dorbir would trust his fellow miners completely to help him in the
situation and not try to take from his find. Besides that fact, Dorbir had just
turned four seasons old, which is a young but wizened age. He would never rush
across the unstable bridge just for some diamonds; life was more important than
material things.

 

2. You are sitting in the local tavern with a large pint of ale in your hand - sitting nearby you is a rather young dwarf
whom is
clearly going through a bad time. He is crying to himself, and clutching a small wooden hammer toy. In the other corner of the
room two shady dwarves are sitting whispering to each other and pointing occasionally
at the dwarf. They stand up, one with a small dagger in his hand and begin to approach the young dwarf. What do you do?

 

Answer: Dorbir would keep an eye on the two men, not trying to seem
obvious, and would wait for them to act. Should they attack the man, he would
spring up and move to try and aid him. His first objective would be to disarm
the daggerman, and then to get them away. After hopefully succeeding in getting
the men away, he’d speak to the crying man about what was wrong and if there
was anything he could do to help. If he succeeded with raising the man’s
spirits, he’d drink a beer with the man, talk a bit more, and probably head
home.

 

3. Whilst wandering through the Dwarven Caverns you hear a voice call out to you; “Oi, ye’! C’mere n’ get ye’rself an ale!”. You spin on your heel and see a heavily bearded
bar-owner
looking at you - a huge grin on his face, and a mug of ale in his hand. How do you react?

 

Answer: Dorbir would thank him graciously and take the mug, for most
are not so generous as this. Nodding, I’d take a sip in good manners, asking
him what possessed him to give me such a gift. Dorbir would then strike up some
more conversation and finish off his ale.

[ski_king3 0]

Under Review

 

 

Now before I go on, I would like to say this is quite a good application. Your bio was quite nice, and I really liked it. However, there are a few things I would like to address.

 

The biggest thing I saw was your ORQ's. For one, you should not say that if he succeeds or not in your bio. Perhaps flesh them out a little more, add some dialogue, and decide whether or not your character succeeds in their endeavors. In the fight, you don't need to say "after hopefully succeeding." Instead, give more details on what he'd do to do this.

 

Also, I feel like your character could be a little bit more dwarf-like. It's not wrong to have him interact more with humans, but perhaps you could flesh out the dwarf curses a little bit more to make them a bit more clear. I think you tried to do that in the personality section, but I feel you could make it a bit more prevalent.

 

Also, just so you know, living with humans as a dwarf might lead to a hard life. Just saying.

 

The last thing seems a little minor in context with the rest of your app, but for past roleplay experience, those seem like experiences in RPG's, not in RP.

 

Even though I'm denying you, this was quite a good app, I look forward to seeing your next one.

 

If you have any questions, feel free to send me a message. You may reapply in 24 hours.

[ski_king3 0]

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