[Denied][High Elf] Madeline12345's Application

[madeline12345 1]

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

 

1.  I'd like you to expand upon your roleplaying and metagaming definitions and add a metagaming example.

 

2.  Your character cannot be twenty-one and from Aegis as Aegis fell almost eighty years ago. Additionally, twenty-one is very young for an elf and still considered a child in their culture. A good starting age is one hundred.

 

3.  Please expand upon your first two Open Response Questions as they're very short at the moment. Make them read like short stories, similar to your third.

 

4.  Your third Open Response Question contained quite a bit of powergaming; You carried an orc to the forest easily when they are at the very least three hundred pounds to my knowledge in addition to killing him so easily when an orc could easily match, if not surpass an Elf in combat.

 

5.  You cannot murder someone (as demonstrated in your third Open Response Question) without a Villain Application unless killing them is the absolute only way to save yourself.

 

6.  Being orphaned by Orcs is unfathomably cliche. It's probably the most common thing you'll ever see in an application and it's extremely unoriginal.

 

 

Now to address some lore inconsistencies. These aren't full reasons of denial, but this is general information that will help your next attempt.

1.  Crimson Vale was not rebuilt into Oren, but in fact, Crimson Vale was a town within the Oren Empire itself. Additionally, Crimson Vale fell to an Undead siege, not Orcs. Afterwards, it became an Undead base, I believe.

 

2.  Your character doesn't match the High Elf demographic. Though there are exceptions such as my High Elf which is part of the Mages Order, most High Elves are condescending to all non-Elves and still slightly condescending to their kin. They'd only see other pure-bred High Elves as equals. Though there can be exceptions to this, some of their culture still lingers, such as my High Elf, though separated from her kin, is still slightly condescending and is vigilant to keep her purity. You can read more on High Elves on their Wiki page.

 

 

Please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (seen below) before posting your next application attempt. If you have any questions, please feel free to send me a message. I'd be happy to help. Good luck with your next application!

Edited April 16, 2013 by Roxforbraynz

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