[Denied]Gasolime's Submission Number 3

[GASOLIME 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the
following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details
are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account
Name:GASOLIME

How old are you?:18

Time-Zone:Central Us

Have you read, understood
and agreed to the rules?:Yes

What previous
experience have you had in role-playing: Garrys mod White list Rp server
Whitelisted RP minecraft servers

How did you hear about
the the Lord of the Craft?: From a Friend

Link any applications
that you have previously made for the server:

Have you posted this
application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):Yes
I have

Have you read the
Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your
biography?:Yes I will as close as possible

 

Definitions

In your own words
define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing: The Act
of impersonating a Fiction Character Either made up by you or by another and
you pose as that Figure as if it was yourself

Meta-gaming: Doing
what your character normally wouldn't be able to do or knowing something it wouldn't

 

Power-emoting: Making another person do something or doing something to another person that was Random like kill randomly or Rape with out proper RP
 

 

In-Character
Information:

Complete the
following biography on your character:

 

Full Name:Alvor
“Sparrow” Brabec

Current Age:19

Sub-race (if any):

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):Alvor Was nothing
but a farmers child , Yet instead of following his family’s footsteps he wanted
to Study the Depths of Knowledge Its self From Magic to Potions Anything that
Involved a book or a letter in Elvish or written By dwarves Alvor always found
the need to study something that seemed irrelevant to other people. No real
Major Events in Alvors Life besides the death of his father he was sad that he
lost a family member that he was undyingly attached to but he also had a
feeling of excitement because now with his father gone he could leave the farm
and see what’s really out there in the world Ambitions for the Future:To learn As much as
possible before he dies, May it be reading every book he finds Or perusing The
Ambitions of Learning the Art of Magic.

Personality: Very curious, Hardy , Adventurous, Avid Reader, hope-less
romantic

Skills: Past experiences with farming makes him a skilled Cultivator
harvester, Knows how to cook reasonably well because of all the time he spent
with his mother growing up, Athletic, Literate, Skilled writer.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Wears a teal Hooded Gown? Thin Average figure wears a Small pouch
on his Back for Storage of His belongings

Any other details you wish to share about your character:wears a teal robe because he feels it best suits his
personality, Curious, Hardy, Adventurous, knowledgeable.

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be
answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

____

 

1. Whilst in the mighty human
capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

 

Answer: Without causing a scene or drawing too much attention and
arousing amassed panic Alvor Moves in front of the mysterious figure and asks “Can
you help me with something? It’s Urgent!” and if aggression is shown he will
call for a guard

 

 

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you
come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable
old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

 

Answer: Figuring there’s two Heavily armed bandits I’d be at a
dis-advantage so I would accept the poor man as a casualty and move on sadly I’d
rather help myself rather than some old man who got himself in a bit of
trouble. Secondly I’d warn the people who are at my destination that there’s
Bandits around that vicinity and to be careful because they are seemingly
robbing or threatening people

 

 

3. You are standing within the
mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colorful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of
general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

 

 

 

Answer: Merchant: “hail Traveler”, Alvor: “Hail, what are these fine
goods at your stall priced at may I ask?” Merchant: “Well, there is no price
for my goods but I would be willing to trade coin or product!” Alvor: “Well
than, those books? What are they about?” Merchant: “Well I don’t actually know!
You will have to buy them to see what’s inside.” Alvor: *thinks in head* I don’t
know the books have a nice silk looking spine and a blue cover... what would
that be worth? If he did not read What the books were about, he Mustn’t be that
bright But, He also has his own stall so he knows what he’s doing…* “Can I set
a price sir?” Merchant: “Yes, and what might that price be?” Alvor: “Does 20
Minas seem about right?” Merchant: “How about 25?” Alvor: “ill pay 20 or I’m
going elsewhere” Merchant: “Fine, You have a deal” Alvor: “Thank you sir for
your time and thank you for this new book!” Merchant: “Pleasure doing business
with you umm- What is your name? I haven’t seen your face around here” Alvor: “Its
Alvor sir, I’m new around here.” Merchant: “Have you thought about living here?”
In our mighty capitol?” Alvor: “No sir I haven’t I wanted permissions to though”
Merchant: “well then, if that’s the case I suggest looking into joining the
shields they provide a place for you to rest your head.” Alvor: “Thank you sir”
Merchant: “No problem kid.” *Alvor takes his leave*

 

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Here are some things that need to be improved if you are wanting to reapply.

 

Your power-emoting definition still isn't entirely correct.

 

You didn't take Princeton's advice in adding much server lore to your biography. It really doesn't seem like you put much effort into it at all. I am definitely looking for more detail in your next application.

 

Describe your character in more detail as well. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

Expand on your ORQs and add more dialogue throughout them.

 

The grammar mistakes are getting better though it is still iffy at some points in the app.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

[cruzazul 2815]

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