blindmind

I don't mean this to bash you Burkester, but more like a critique, since this has been posted recently and the guild seems to be under construction, so to speak. I also wanted to start off saying this because the thread seems to have become a bit hostile, and I didn't want anyone to confuse this for flaming. I don't know if anyone is looking for feedback, but here are my two cents anyway. The first thing that caught my eye here are the seven deadly sins names. Assuming you're in charge of everything, I think you could come up with something more unique. I'm not saying this because it's been done before in fiction, but because it's been done on this server. I don't know if all of these people are still around, but certain characters related to the Undead took on secret identities as one of the seven deadly sins and collaborated to achieve evil ends in Aegis. This may only be confusing to a few people, but I did associate this club with those insidious characters until I read further. Regardless, I'm not sure if the concept of "Gentlemen" and the seven deadly sins match up well enough here. I can see how they relate, in terms of judgement, but, unless the guild requires a certain level of consciousness or humility, I don't see why the Gentlemen would place this judgement upon themselves. Consider thinking more along the lines of socialites, in terms of finding proper titles or names for a more united theme. The guild seems to want for vigilantes or anti-heroes, but the sins associate you with something more malicious and unkind. If you want something a bit badass, then I suggest digging around the histories of the real life Knights Templar. I see some interesting parallels between this guild and the Templar, but I'll expand on that if you want me to, later. Secondly, the general concept of the guild has been done before (though I don't believe any one guild ever stuck around for long). I'm not suggesting you abandon the whole thing, but that you continue to think about where this guild will go or what it could achieve. If I'm right, The Gentlemen's Club seeks to remove undesirables from the populace in defense of the people. A few orders have the same objective, like guardsman, Ascended, wayward do-gooders, etc. To this end, the Club is like a mannerly gang or secret police. However, if you added more of a personal take to the guild, you might find it more unique. As I understand it, your character used to be in the Teutonic Order? Well, maybe this is a way to relive old glories as a member of a military organization or family of like-minded individuals. Maybe it's a way to enforce your will upon the more criminal side of the world that the TO wouldn't touch, or refused to in the ways you wanted to. Maybe this guild is simply a collaborative effort to sate the more base desires of its members, since rich and powerful people can afford more "exotic" tastes. Lastly, it seems some people beat you to the name of the guild. However, that's no big deal. In fact, I bet you could get a better name! Gentlemen are cool and all, but you could change the name without changing the nature of the guild, and you could bring it closer to Aegis, to boot. Simply running the term "gentleman" through a thesaurus calls up some interesting results (and remember that gentlemen used to be knights, anyway). I won't put down any suggestions, since naming things is always a personal endeavor, but if you end up considering your options, I'd be happy to provide some. I hope all goes well in your adventures as a new guild in Aegis.

I think the biggest problem with this project is the subtlety of some Undead. Even if there were a wall, I doubt there is much that would stop them from simply passing and conspiring within its limits. They do this in Al'Khazar all the time. The Guard would have to be extremely prejudiced and skeptical of anyone on the other side of the gate. For proper security, you might have to treat the outside wilderness as a place of exile; anyone on the other side of the gate is either an undesirable or a guard. Nobody can pass into the outside, unless they are being exiled or a guard on patrol. On top of that, the Undead are already on everyone's doorstep, as you said, and Aegis would have to push them back, and hold them there, for the Wall to be built. Even then, like I said, I imagine the Undead could just slink in due to just one guard's mistake, and then they would hit up the nearest basement under a shady inn and plot. The only way for something like this to work is a full-on lock down of Inner-Aegis, and that might make a lot of people mad, unless Aegis has finally seen the tragedy of fevered dictators and curfews (even the RP wouldn't dull the sting the community would feel, I imagine).