[Denied][Pending] Jamo1997's Application

[jamo18716 0]

Out-Of-Character Information
What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: -  jamo1997
How old are you?: - 17
What time-zone do you live in?: -  (UTC+10:00) Canberra, Melbourne, Sydney

Have you ever roleplayed before - if you have, how?: -  not really i just want to give it a go and see how it is
Have you been on any other roleplaying servers?: -  no i have not 
Have you applied to this server before? (Please link past applications): -  not applicable

How did you hear about us?: - i just came across some people talking about it on another server
What do you think the server will be like? -  fun and full of adventure
Have you read and agreed to the rules?: -  yes
What’s your favourite rule / the rule you agree with the most?: - 

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  Player harassment, blackmailing or discrimination of any kind is forbidden.- this one becuase it means people wont be annoying brats

Definitions

What is roleplaying?: -  acting a particular way and having a particular personality depending on your charecture

What’s metagaming?: - it is using information that you, yourself know but your charecture in the game would not know of or have access to.

What’s powergaming?: -  it is when you don't give the other person a chance, you just make it that you instantly win, for instance "he cuts his head clean off" and the other person is not given a chance

In-Character Information

What’s your character called?: -  Lohi Teldron

What race are they (and sub-race)?: - half-human, half elf (born of human northerner and a dark elf

What sex are they?: - male

How old are they?: - 19

Give us a brief description of their life - their story, childhood, family (Include server lore when writing): - Lohi's farther was a Northerner adventurer and went all around the world and one day made it to a small quite dark elf village where he met a dark elf woman. they fell in love and moved to Abresi where they had a child called lohi. Lohi at a young age was made fun for his dark elf heritage and when he become older and made some friends of his own he became mean, he would pick on the other kids taking their stuff and telling his friends to bash them, he became some what of a leader of them after that he got into the ventures of the underworld where he mostly robbed houses and mugged people after a little while of this he was offered a job to kill a man for a large sum of money, he accepted it with no questions asked and completed the task successfully without getting caught, it was after that he got into the business of assassins and began his travels of the world.

What are they like (personality)?: - greedy, evil, smart, cocky and can be very kind to those he believes suffers worse than him 

What are their ambitions?: - to become rich and to see if he can actually have a chance to make a good friend

Do they have any special skills?: - he is sneaky and can worm his way into and out of many situations

What are their weaknesses?: - he can have a change of heart for a good sum of money or power and can be very cocky when he believes he has the upper hand

Give us a description of how they look (not a screenshot yet!)?: -  he wears a dark clock with Armour under neath it only reveling his eyes which are blood red under neath that he has blonde hair and has a dark completion. 

Please give us a screenshot of your character’s skin: - 

[Gwonam_Blaze 385]

Your application has been denied as you haven't made the following changes in the 24 pending hours:

 

- Your biography's not bad, but doesn't make sense in some parts. What is this 'Underworld'? How old was he when he started mugging people and robbing houses? Who offered him this 'job' to kill someone, and why? Please expand on your bio and include more detail on major events such as these.

 

- Your biography doesn't contain enough server lore. Please mention at least 2 locations in Anthos (preferably one being your character's birthplace). If you need help finding server lore, check out our official wiki here: wiki.lordofthecraft.net

 

- Your personality contradicts itself; He's 'evil', yet, he cares for others who suffer worse than him? These two traits completely conflict one another.

 

- While not necessary, I would recommend changing your character's eye color as red definitely does not suit Humans (even with Dark Elf heritage) and can lead to ridicule.

 

Your application's a good start so far, but it does need work. Please spend a fair amount of time ensuring all of the points I've made above are corrected. You may re-apply in 24 hours. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message/PM me!

[Gwonam_Blaze 385]

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