[Denied] thunderheart2000 [White List Application]

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Out-Of-Character Information

Please do your best to correct spelling and grammatical errors, this is an RP server and writing is the main form of communication!

 

What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: thunderheart2000

How old are you?: 15

Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13): Yes.

Have you read and agreed to the rules?: Yes.

What’s the rule you agree with the most?: All rules regarding respect towards admin and players.

Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules): I understand all of the rules.

How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? minecraftservers.org

 

Definitions (In my PoV)

 

What is roleplaying?: Playing the role of an individual that embarks on a story.

What is metagaming?: Knowing more than what should be available, such as knowing a conversation being had way beyond ear shot.

What is power gaming?: Being powerful beyond reason. Never dying, killing large groups at once, ect.

 

In-Character Information

 

Character’s name: Storm Winchester

Character’s sex: Male

Character’s race: Human

Character’s age: 22

Biography:

"I was less than a year old when a demon killed my mother and set my house on fire. My brother ran out of the house and my sister carried my while our dad remained inside. Soon after, he emerged from the smoke, with nothing. Before that, our family had no idea about the existence of anything paranormal. After however, our father would leave us alone at home to go kill demons. He was obsessed.";"Nowadays, my sister lives across the country while my brother search for our father who ran after a spirit but never returned, and other demons that could harm anyone."

Personality Traits: Kind, keen, adventurous, encouraging, trustworthy, agreeable

Ambitions: Wants to get revenge on the demon that killed his mother, and protect all of his loved ones.

Strengths/Talents: Sneaky, intelligent, quick, experienced.

Weaknesses/Inabilities: Loved ones, fear of the unknown, anger, too much pride.

Appearance: Almost 6 feet tall, slim, brown hair, brown eyes.
 

My skin is attached

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Under Review

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Your application has been put on pending for a few reasons. Do not fear though once the changes are made and they're right you will be accepted.

• Your definitions are somewhat correct but please elaborate more. Help for this matter can be found here http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying Good examples can be found here but remember do not plagiarize.
• Please expand you biography so you at least have two paragraphs.
• You need to add more lore into your application such as city names and events. Check this link for some more information http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Humans Remember we are currently in Vailor so keep that in mind when relating lore.
• Your biography is also very cliché along the lines of parents dying. Please fix this and try make your application more normal. Also please do not use demons in your biography as again its just too cliché. If you need any help in this matter please feel free to message me.
• Please also change your ambition from this avenging seeking belief to kill a demon

You have 24 hours to complete these changes or face denial. Message me once the changes are complete and if they still need adjusting I will guide you further. 

Sorry but you have been denied for several reasons! For once you failed to edit your application within the 24 hours given. Fear not this isn't the end in joining our wonderful server but for your next application improve on these areas. If you need any help please feel free to message me. 

• Your definitions are somewhat correct but please elaborate more. Help for this matter can be found here http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Roleplaying Good examples can be found here but remember do not plagiarize.
• Please expand you biography so you at least have two paragraphs.
• You need to add more lore into your application such as city names and events. Check this link for some more information http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Humans Remember we are currently in Vailor so keep that in mind when relating lore.
• Your biography is also very cliché along the lines of parents dying. Please fix this and try make your application more normal. Also please do not use demons in your biography as again its just too cliché. If you need any help in this matter please feel free to message me.
• Please also change your ambition from this avenging seeking belief to kill a demon

You may reapply to the server in 24 hours from the time of this denial

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Moved to Denied Application Forum.