perses 158 Share Posted February 26, 2016 War Never Ends. It was the final night, the sky was black. The troops were still, waiting for an attack. On top of the hill, with sword and shield. Their breath was hitched, looking across the field. From the distance, lights could be seen. Torches held by men, with a drive to win. Drums and marches, they loomed ahead. Through towns they passed, filling them with dead. The troops couldn't wait for this nightmare to be stopped. And that was when, the first stone was dropped. The air was filled with smoke, it worsened the night. The fires were shining, the sky was alight. Nothing nice, from the eye could be seen. Only blood and bone, only flesh and skin. Mangled corpses, stripped of their steel. They had no use for it, since they couldn't feel. From afar, cries of sadness and dread. Families on their knees, mourning their dead. For they knew deep inside, what would impend. War is like the times, it will never end. (Any feedback is appreciated) 10 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent™ 552 Share Posted February 27, 2016 Quite good indeed. Reminds me of one of the poems I wrote several years ago. 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
shortchangehero 4217 Share Posted February 27, 2016 This is fire. 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
AGP 3169 Share Posted February 27, 2016 A few of the rhymes are questionable but this was better than I was expecting. 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
perses 158 Author Share Posted February 27, 2016 6 hours ago, Silent™ said: Quite good indeed. Reminds me of one of the poems I wrote several years ago. I am glad you liked it. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
perses 158 Author Share Posted February 27, 2016 4 hours ago, The Combatant said: This is fire. Thank you very much! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
perses 158 Author Share Posted February 27, 2016 2 hours ago, AGiantPie said: A few of the rhymes are questionable but this was better than I was expecting. It was my first try making a poem. Thank you for the information. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
LPT 771 Share Posted February 27, 2016 War... War never changes 1 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
perses 158 Author Share Posted February 28, 2016 13 hours ago, JadenOfCanada said: War... War never changes Indeed it doesnt.... Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Milans 33 Share Posted February 29, 2016 Damn this is pretty good. Especially the ending is very powerful. Good job! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elad™ 560 Share Posted August 17, 2016 Moved to the Archive. It shall be sorted into the appropriate category shortly. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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