Fitermon's Application 5. Less choppy biography.

[Fitermon 668]

Out-Of-Character:

-Minecraft Account Name:fitermon

-How old are you?:13

-Time-Zone/Country of Residence: U.S. -5GTM

-Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes.

-Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I enjoy video games and minecraft alot. I can speak english well and a small amount of espanol. I wish to be a good part of this world and that I can help others. I also go to a great school. I enjoy helping those and seeing them happy. I wish to be respected and respect others.

-How much time could you be on the server weekly?: Only during weekends for my main part on this server. I will be on for about 3 hours a day on weekdays if possible. I have a lot of school work to do on the weekdays.

-How long have you played minecraft?: A year that I loved.

-What do you know about roleplaying? How long have you been doing it? What kind?: Roleplaying is a great thing for all games alike. Certian games need scertian roleplay. I heard this server is a ton of RP and almost no OOC if possible. I roleplayed for about a year on minecraft so far. I roleplayed on runescape when I played for three years. I now use roleplay to improve the feel of a game. Roleplaying is also basicially changing into someone else. You are them in a new body and world. You have to use them as you would yourself depending on what you’re doing. If you roleplay a a soldier you might salute others. As a medivel human, I would most likely hail kings and queens and speak like art thou happyith? (I know that was a bad example) You have to act as if you are a new guy or girl in a new world.

-What do you expect this server will be like?: A great adventure for me and my friends I meet. I expect a lot from the best RP server ever. I will expect great battles, factions, wars, adventures, cities to explore and much more! I made a rhyme in such little of a time. I wish to have a good time. I also wish to meet many new people and find out about the mysterious Ascended.

-What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I played on morphcraft but I quit for about 6 motnhs of boredom on minecraft. I rejoined last week and am enjoying the new updates for everyting from ravines to plugins like spells.

-Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules? What about the lore?: I have read and fully understood all of the rules and lore. Very accurate by the way.

-Name the 4 races on this server. Human orc elf dwarf

-How did you hear about us?: My friend Tyler

-Did you vote?: Yes

-What was your favourite Law?: I changed my mind to the law that there is no law outside of territory and you must fend for yourself. It sounds dangerous and fun.

-What was your least favourite Law?: The same as my most favorite. I would not like to be attacked with no help. I would like it more if I could guarantee a conversation and some RP before being killed and robbed. Bit I will make it a good law and enjoy it. Sorry if this contradicts with itself.

-What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name? fitermon

In-Character:

-Character Name:fitermon

-What is your Race?:Human

-Lordofthecraft.net/forum forum account: fitermon

-Biography: As a young boy, I was poor. My parents died when I was 12. I had to survive out in the wilds as a result of having no home anywhere. I became skilled at combat at a young age. I ate many thing like pigs and cow. I am great with a sword and bow, but am a bit shaky with fists. I can farm as well. When I was a kid, I always found melons grow in the same area every year. I learned how to farm them with practice. I learned to build well when I was trapped in the Arctic for some time. I built a home with a nice fireplace. I now have heard of this “Aegis” place and am venturing to find it. I wish to join the human army in Oren and fight for the best. I will try making a change on this world and stop the evil undead, that is, if I find the legendary Ascended… (I hope this is less choppy, I didn’t ralize how bad my last Bio was.)

-Character Age: 18

-Character Appearance: Blond, medium height, strong in arms and legs, a bit small framed in size.

-Character Personality: I am kind, care about others, can be sort of a potato sack brain at times. I enjoy adventure as long as food is supplied. The thought of magic interests me. I wish to become an ascended one day and fight the evil undead legion. I wish to free the humans from all undead control as I heard that undead are trying to take over human cities. I will attempt to make myself a living as a human soldier if I join the army.

-Your ambitions: I have only one ambition. I want to make a better place for all humans, elves, dwarves and orcs alike. We as a people have the right to freedom and a good life. The undead must be stopped. Don’t judge me but I just hate them. It just bugs me that undead people can live taking our lands.

-Can your character read or write?: Yes I can quite well.

-Can your character mine?: Yes with good supplies.

-Are you a capable builder? Yes with certain projects

-Can you wield a sword?: With much ease.

-Enjoy Farming?: Depends on the plantation given to farm and if people steal from it.

-Does your character have any special skills?: I usually can get into weird adventures easily. One time I was sent to protect a pig on a different server. He was named legendary pig of Minecraftia. My friend made a fake god after him when he died about 3 days later in the server. So yes I do have weird times.

-A screenshot of your skin:

http://www.wtcraft.com/forum/index.php?/topic/6691-montrer-votre-skin/

-Other Information: I hope to be accepted this time and have a great time with you all! Also let us hope that four time is a charm indeed. I also like the name fitermon. It was my first ever account on an online game. Also please accept I know this is begging but I can be impatient for video games. My hands are also tired.

[Jadles 85]

Check your spelling and grammar.

Your character biography is too short.

Don't rush it, take you're time and re-read it yourself.

Look at some examples ((but don't copy from them)), re-read your application, take your time and try again.

Have a read of this also: Petyr's excellent guide - http://www.lordofthe...r-applications/

Common reasons people are denied:

-It has bad grammar or Punctuation.

-Your biography was too short.

-Your Biography didn't link to the lore of Aegis.

-You obviously didn't read the lore.

-Fix the layout: This could be from having bolds everywhere or simply being hard to read.

-It lacked effort.

-Your skin isn't RP.

-Needed an actual picture of your skin.

-You didn't include a skin link or it didn't work.

-Your application was too short.

These are just some of the reasons it could have been

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