[Denied]Ponitz's Application [Edited]

[ponitz 1]

Out-Of-Character:

Minecraft Account Name: ponitz

Did you attend minecon and sign up at the LOTC booth?: I was nowhere near Minecon, so i'd say no

How old are you?: 15

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: Well I live in The United States, and my time zone is GMT -5

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: Yes, I would say so

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: My name is Ian, i'm in high school, and thoroughly enjoy video games. Most of the games I play are on Xbox, but i do enjoy PC games as well. I hope that i can join a Minecraft RP server that is actually good, so yeah, that's about it.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?: My time is cut by school, so i'd say about 7-15 hours a week.

What do you know about Roleplaying? What is it?: Roleplay is becoming a character, acting as if you are said character, making others believe that you are that person, or changing your own behavior to match the fictional character's behavior, and may be done in 1st-person dialog, and 3rd person narration of action.

In your own Words, describe what Metagaming and Powergaming are. Metagaming is mixing IC info with OOC info, (that's the usual meaning on SAMP) and Powergaming is giving your character unrealistic powers that would give an advantage over his/her peers.

What do you expect this server will be like?: I hope that this server will be a good RP experience for me, I truly enjoy RP'ing and I hope that everything is up to par.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: I've played on Sublimity Gaming, I was Admin for a while, but the replay value just kind of diminished, and I got bored.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: Yes, I feel as though i thoroughly understand the laws

How did you hear about us?: I have run across the server multiple times prior, my friends also play on the server, they say it's a fun time.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you? 298

What is your The Lord Of Craft forum account name?: ponitz

In-Character:

Character Name: Raynil

What is your Race?: Elf

Biography(This should include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

Raynil is an Elf from Aegis who grew up in a poor household, he has always been on his own, it's all he's ever known. Around the age of 15, he decided to stumble into the local mine. He was mesmerized about what he saw. The way the mine, so far underground, was able to hold up everything above it, the way it was filled with so many different things, rather than the typical stone. As he looked around the mine he happened to find something different than anything he's seen before, it was shiny and poking out of a rock. He took a closer look at the strange shiny object, he had no idea what in the world it could have been! He stashed it in his pocket and sprinted through the woods to town, he ran to the nearest vendor and asked what it was he even had. The vendor told Raynil that he found a perfect Diamond, one of the best he's ever seen! When Raynil asked him how much he could get for the diamond, the vendor responded with 500 Minas. That was more than Raynil or his family has ever had. From that point on, Raynil then understood that for the rest of his years, he would explore the mines, digging for more and more exotic ores

Thirty years pass and Raynil is still mining in the same old abandoned mine, he feels at peace there, he has a cozy little home built out of stone right outside of the mine as well. One day while he is working in the mine he hears a strange sound, he follows the sound around some corridors that he has come to known very well and turns one last corner. He looks around the corner and looks down, a giant hole that he had never seen before has been created, he peers down the hole and see's roughly four mining Dwarves. All these years, he hasn't even realized that Dwarves also live here! How could he have been this naive to think the mine belonged to just him. He runs faster than he's ever ran before back to his house, he packs all of his belongings and heads for Laurelin.

He finally reaches Laurelin and finds the nearest Inn, he rented a room for the night and planed out his next moves. He ruled out going back to the mine, it's too dangerous now, he decided to buy some land about a day's walk from Laurelin, he looked in his bag realizing that he should be able to get enoug money from his jewels to, buy the land and buy a few tools that are necessary for the job.He found an old human prospecter, selling off some of his land, and Raynil decided he'd buy it. The next few days were spent building a small home on the land. Once it is done, he began on the mine, he took his first few swings at the soft rock realizing that the terrain is very soft. A few days later Raynil has a good mining process going, he would mine all day, then at the end of the day, he would sort everything; one pile for things he would use for himself and his home, and the other pile for things that he could sell at the local market.

Seventy years pass and he has settled down at his nice home on his property, his mine is full of riches, Iron, Diamond, Lapis Lazuli, and countless other gems. By this point, Raynil is a healthy 115 year old, still in his prime, he is now about 6'7" and very muscular from working in the mines his whole life. Raynil was walking home one day from a long day's work, when out of no where came a group of bandits. Raynil tried to stop the attack from occurring by running away, but it didn't work, the bandits caught up to him and knocked him out cold. While he was knocked out, the bandits took his belongings, and dropped him off in a small town that Raynil had never heard of. Later that day, Raynil awoke, he stumbled around, confused of his surroundings, he couldn't remember anything except for his friend Neevos and the town he lived in, Elewyn kept popping up in his head. He figured Elewyn would be his best bet at trying to piece together his past.

Your characters ambitions: Raynil has his goals set on heading to Elewyn, finding his friend Neevos, and piecing together his past.

Out in the Wilds, your character comes across a small cottage. Outside, there appears to be an elf struggling combat with two bandits. What does your character do? Raynil would acknowledge that situation, he would then look around for other people in the surrounding area. If there isn't anyone else around, he would charge the bandits while yelling to let the elf go. Once he reaches the bandits he would attempt to punch one of the bandits, hopefully knocking him down, he would then team up with the elf to quickly dispatch the last one. After the skirmish, Raynil would help the elf back inside, and would begin to talk to him, asking what happened.

Your character walks up to a shop in the middle of Al'Khazar. "Hello, my good sir!" says the shop owner. "What may I help you with today?" How does your character answer? Raynil would acknowlege that the man is trying to talk to him. He would nod and begin to converse with the vendor, "Hello sir, what do you have for sale today?" they would begin to talk about what the vendor has for sale, and the prices of those items. After they are done discussing the prices, Raynil would ask for the items in which are needed for the day's work, the vendor would say the price, and Raynil would reach into his pocket retrieving the amount of Minas needed. He would pay and would take the items that he purchased.

A screenshot of your skin: http://img593.imageshack.us/img593/6330/skinsu.png

Other Information: Edited. Everything is the same except for the RP, which whoever denied my app, said it was incorrect

[DoubleDeetz (Fomsil) 237]

Please wait 48 hours between making new Applications.

[ponitz 1]

Is this the only reason? Or is something else wrong with it that i'll be denied the next time? Feedback would be nice

[DoubleDeetz (Fomsil) 237]

Still haven't done what I have asked.

[ponitz 1]

I feel like I have corrected my answer for the definition of Roleplay, I have seen other applications with similar answers which have been accepted.