Locust2000 Application

Locust · February 24, 2012

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:

Locust2000

How old are you?:

14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:

United States of America, MST Mountain Standard Time.

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:

Yes I do believe I have a good grip.

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:

I play minecraft almost every day, and sports are part of my life.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:

Almost every day 4-7 hours at most

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:

Roleplaying is when you make a character and play in a world made by people. You are someone you are not in the real world.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:

I have played on many role-playing servers, Hogwarts is one that comes to mind.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:

Using out side information for character’s benefit at witch the charter would not know other wise.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:

Not being very nice, being forceful. Giving no choice. EX: Bill punches Bob, should be, Bill attempts to punch Bob.

What do you expect this server will be like?:

A non-grefed server, with people that stick to the rules and give punishment to those you don’t. Nice roll playing server too. With great people. With some actual Role-Playing!

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:

Simply, all the servers I have been on have be grefed, or have admins that don’t, themselves, play by the rules. Neolain, Shadow Raze are some of these.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Yes.

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:

I promise.

How did you hear about us?:

My friend, he showed me this server. Looked like the most organized server out there.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?:

Yes, I think 3,604

In-Character:

Character Name:

Axar Getos

What Race are you?:

Elf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

As a child my father was a noble, My mother was a go-getter, and patient with me and my father. My father, when I was young, would tell me of distant lands, and the races living there, Orcs, Dwarves,and Humans. As I grew older I read more and more about them, and learned of things that would help me be successful later on. I stopped having the will for learning for about 2 years, until a met a lost human. When my father took the lost soul in for food and shelter, I loved talking and learning about his kind. Me and him would stay him long nights of me just asking questions about humans. He even taught me how to shoot the bow. This was nothing like the books I have read. I started to wonder what I could learn from the Dwarves, if they would tell me anything, and the Orcs.

Being really nice I am easy to talk to and curious. I would sneak in to the library at night witch gives me great skills in jumping and running. When going to the library I started to learn how the other races talked and socialized. At age of 22 my mother and father died. So, with my fathers cape, I decided that I would like to experience the company of real Dwarves and Orcs. I might even try to bring back manuscripts that my town does not have for the children like me. My orange eyes and red hair separate me from many of the other Elves, I am very tall and light completed.

What is your Character's ambitions?:

Learn, get better with Bow.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

Bow & Arrow

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

Archery, Agility

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character:

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?

Axar “ hey, what do you 2 fine men have there.” *The warriors turn to Axar* 1st Warrior “It be just a week little halfling, carry on sir.” Axar *as halfling sneaks off* Ha, would you two fine sirs like a dirink?” 2nd warrior “why sure” *walk away with the warriors*

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?

Axar “ sorry sir, just passing by.” Merchant “you know were to find me.”

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:

He would just stay out of the hut, no need to go in. It could as well be someones own business.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?

Axar “excuse me, could any body loan me some bread and milk?” Trader “Depends...... Do you have the coin?” Axar “ I have the coin.”

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:

Axar “ What assistance will be needed?” Head Guard “we need some archers,” *looks a bow on Axar’s back* “you know how to use that right?” *with a grin Axar nods his head* “were do you need me”...

James Undercroft · February 25, 2012

pYour application has been:

Denied

Do not worry though; this does not mean you cannot apply again, quite the contrary! After 24 hours you may apply again which gives you plenty of time to fix up your application, plan it out as well as use all of this advice which I have given you in this post to make your application one of the best. Please check the links at the bottom of this post, they will help you quite a bit.

Created

You have been denied because:

You need an example for metagaming.

While your definition is technically correct, I need you to write your own definition on the subject to prove that you did not just copy/paste from somewhere else, and that you really understand the definition you are giving.

Your biography needs work.

The main story of your character is alright, but you are missing quite a few details which you need to explain exactly who your character is and what he does/looks like. This is to show to us you have put a lot of effort into thinking about how your character will start out in the world of Asulon.

Please include the entire question when writing your biography such as your characters history, personality, description and age. With the description don’t just write He is tall and old and carries around a bow. There are a lot of tall, old people who carry around bows. Get descriptive; what is your hair colour? How long? Eye colour? Big eyes? Small eyes? Do you have wrinkles? How tall are you? Are you muscled or slim but agile?

You also need to add your characters strengths and weaknesses as well as reasons for such. For example, if your character is good at swordsmanship, bows or even farming you need to explain in your biography why your character is so good in what it does and how it developed these skills.

We would like you to include some lore from the world of Aegis and/or Asulon such as names of towns and people, or even events which have happened before and your characters connection to the event. You can find all about the lore of Lord of the Craft here: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki , or in the lore/history sections of the forum and website. The types of lore you can include can people places such as towns and kingdoms, or even people or events (such as the exodus from Aegis to Asulon which affected almost everyone).

The following questions need a lot more work put into them.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?

These are not just times where you write one or two words, you need to actually describe to us What your character's tool is, and why. Why does he perfer Bow combat over Sword combat, why does he have said skilled talents. Also instead of saying Agility, you can describe to us what sort of agility he has. Even if it is mentioned in your bio, you can give a quick recap, even add some extra details in.

Your skin may need some improvement.

At the moment your skin does not look "elfy" at all, and I really do not get what your character is wearing. If you could explain that to me, and how it fits into Lord of the Craft I would be glad to let the skin in, but right now I do not see it fitting into the world of Asulon.

Your Open response answers needs improvement.

While it is okay to write in the style of:

"Your characters text." *Your character's action.* *Other characters action* "Other characters text."

Etc. If you are to do so, you need to be very descriptive with your emotes. For example, see the difference between these two emotes:

Zolgash sneaks behind the guard, and attempts to stab him.

Zolgash, breath coming quickly as he recovers himself - sweat beading on his brow - steps slowly forwards attemtping to quitenen his breathing. He steps on a twig, making an audible, yet quite, cracking sound. Luckily the guard had not looked around, so he continues stepping forward one foot after the other until he is a mere meter away from the Guard. He strikes out with his dagger...

Needless to say, you do not have to put THAT MUCH detail into a single action, but the more you write the more detailed you get! And the more detailed you get, the more your actions become enjoyable to read. Just think upon that for a bit :)

Basically I would like to see a paragraph for each roleplay situation, even the shop question. Some tips with the shop question:

-Do not just make it a quicky "buy something and leave" situation, there is so much more to be written.

-You can turn the situation into something exciting, perhaps the shop keeper is trying to rip you off, so you get in a fight, or perhaps the city guard come over and check the stall for illegal items and he turns out to be an evil mage or something. This is your decision, as your RP situation :)

-If you do not wish to turn it into something exciting, be as descriptive as possible. Include a dragonfly buzzing lazily by, the rushing of water in a nearby river, the rain drizzling slowly onto your forehead, the colour of the stall keepers hair etc. etc.

Please wait 24 hours or your application will be instantly denied.

This gives you a chance to have a cup of tea and read all of which I have provided, then give you a break and a fresh mind to re-write your application in the required areas. This is also to prevent the spamming of applications, as if there was no limit we would be absolutely swamped with applications.

Please do send a PM my way if you are having any trouble understanding the application process or my feedback, I would be glad to help you. :)

Good luck for your next application!

Here is some further reading material that can help you get accepted:

To understand the questions being asked better look here:

(Please do note, some of these may not be updated as of now, and rest assured I am working on getting newer links  )

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/34777-in-depth-analysis-of-the-application-form/

The guide of a Game Master to accepted server applications:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/13144-petyrs-guide-to-accepted-server-applications/

Tips to definitely include on your application:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/19145-tips-to-include-on-your-application/

A must-read guide to the world of aegis:

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/9868-an-extensive-guide-to-the-world-of-aegis