Ventus2's 4 Application

[Ventai 291]

Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name: ventus2

How old are you?: 14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence: (GMT-05:00) Eastern Time (US & Canada)

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?: I have a fair grip on grammar and English

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself: I am fairly good at drawing and go to high school and I’m trying to pass my school.

How much time could you be on the server weekly? 20-30 hours

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you: Roleplaying is when a person makes a character and gives life to that character. The person make a story for the character and acts out situations like he was the character.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?: i have been on a minecraft rp server in which i was part of the forsaken that were having a war between the forces of light.

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:meta-gaming is when you do something OOC and use it when IC for example you see the name of someone above their head then you say to that person there name even though they didn’t tell you there name. I.e Things you have heard in forums or teamspeak and use it IC.

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is: power-gaming is when someone does something which is unrealistic for example bob says ''hey man come in my car'' while Jon says ''i will in a second'' then bob ties Jon up and throws him in to the car see Jon was not able to do anything but go in the car.

What do you expect this server will be like?: i think it will be a really good server where everyone actually roleplays.

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?: i was on a roleplay server and left because no one actually roleplayed and i was on a wasteland server and left because it shut down.

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?: yes I did

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Team speak set Rules: yes I do

How did you hear about us?: from a friend that was on your server and they said it was endless amounts of fun.

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?: not yet i want to see what its like before I vote.

In-Character:

Character Name: Fedas Brave-Heart

What Race are you?: Elf

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race): None

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):

when I was young it was a dark stormy night, I could hear the sounds of my mom and dad screaming from the sounds bandits, There bows made a sound that I never could forget. My mom and dad tripped on the puddles of the water, My mom dropped me when she fell and I rolled down a hill my legs were hurt and I could not move I tried to crawl away before the bandits could hear me. But only after a few seconds i heard the wind being cut by the arrow that killed my mom and dad. After i heard a scream, at that very moment I couldn’t even crawl my heart was paralyzed with fear. I heard the bandits with their foul mouths say "I think the kid went this way we have to stop him before he says what happened to anyone". I tried to forget what happened and I got up and limped my way to a bush that I could see. I could see the scum right before my eyes as they said "**** he got away we better warn the boss"!. When I saw no trace of them left I tried to walk to the city of Malinor.

When I arrived at the my home city of Malinor I went to the guards and said in a very weak voice "There are two bandits that are there near the forest they shot my parents and i think there part of i gang" the guards replied with "I’m sorry that those scum had to kill your parents we will deal with them immediately but first with should take you to the inn" I said back "Thank you kind sirs" after the guards took me to the inn where I took a rest. When I slept I had a dream in which I saw the guard’s die I woke up and saw the inn keeper said "are you all right"? I replied with "yes I’m ok it must have been a dream" after I was well they let me go. When I was in the streets i Thought to myself "curse those bandits now I don’t have a family and I don’t know where to go"!. On my way on the streets I saw a guard walking towards me he told me "I managed to kill the bandits for what they’ve done and they did seem to have a gang we will try and stop then when we can as for the meantime we can train you in combat and I take care of you it is the least that us guards can do". I replied with “Really!! Thank you I will try not to make a bother of you" the guard said "don’t worry you won’t now then we should begin are training shall we"?.

When they trained me they took my height one guard said " I can’t allow this child to take part in training he is too short" The guard that took me in said "Don’t worry if anything happens to him it will be my fault" the other guard said "alright but don’t tell the king that i allow this". With that i was given armor and a wooden blade in which they train my with for 10 years over the time I was trained and had to fight with the other elf’s with wooden blades in the evening I was with the guard eating supper and reading information about Malanor's History. After those 10 years I said my good byes to the guard and went off for an adventure to explore the other Cities around Asulon and meet other people.

What is your Character's ambitions?: To see what the other cities of Asulon are like to make other friends.

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc): Sword

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents? Blade to Blade combat for he had to train and spar with many other training elf’s like himself.

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format): http://imgur.com/dpfjY

Other Information about your Character: He is a purple eyed elf with black clothing

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small Halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond? I try to see if there is any place i can hide to scout the area then when there is an opening i shoot a arrow in the warriors legs paralyzing them in their tracks I then take the Halfling quickly and bring him to a inn in which he gets some rest.

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response? I look at the man and say "what are you selling"? the man repliys with "Just about everything you need". "In that case I will take a stack of arrows my good sir". I say the man hands me the arrows and i pay him the coin. Then I go back to my adventure.

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?: I see the chest and take the iron and make myself a iron chest plate then I leave the sword for the next person to find and I leave to my next destination.

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you in the common tongue, how do you respond? I say "hello sir do you have anything for me to do today"? the man says "yes I need some spider eyes to create some poison potions I will pay you with some money if you get me some". I say " I already have some spider eyes you can take these and keep the coin" the man says "Thanks you are surprisingly generous for a traveler" i say "no problem" then I go on my way.

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard has gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?: I say to guard "I will help just tell me when we will go" the guard replys with "Thank you we will go at 8:00" I wait until 8:00 then I went with the guards to the bandits and raid them with the guards we hid in the wilds and killed them with our bows after we went back to the town and the guard says to me "Thanks for your help here is the reward" the guard hands me the reward the i go off on my journey.

[Lego XBOX 915]

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You have been denied. I'm actually disappointed. The application was okay, other than for some important repeated mistakes.

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These are the reasons for why you were denied, take good note as it may be your last chance:

~You have not been honest in your server history, my random checks to see ban histories have shown that you were banned from a server before, this is the most important bit which is wrong about your application. You MUST tell us that you were banned and the reasons and if you can, justify the banning. Seriously, this just makes us take a bad view at you...

~You also, as said by another application team member, have bad grammar all throughout your application. There is something called 'proof-reading' manually or with the computer spell-check which you should do. This is even worse when you don't capitalize things properly. You must know that a 'Shift' key exists. Please capitalize your 'I'.

~Your Bio is pretty cliché, getting your parents killed by bandits... Its what happens to everyone on this server, you could at least be original. And the Bio is also difficult to understand with your grammar mistakes like 'my' instead of 'me'. You should know this if you are Canadian and 14, or are you lying for that too? Just to say, we don't care about age, but we care about people who lie.

~Also, I find some power-gaming (overpowering in this context) and realism problems. Example, 1 arrow doesn't kill 2 people at once. You shot an arrow at 2 warriors and it paralyzed them both, and when did you learn to shoot arrows so well? I thought you trained with the sword. In you RP situations, you scout the area, but, there is NO time to do that, the warriors would have already stolen from the halfling anyway, and the cloud temple is an open area.

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You can re-apply in 24 hours, but look over your application properly and clear out this ban issue with a GM [Game Moderator].

[Lego XBOX 915]

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