Demented77's App

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Out-Of-Character

Minecraft Account Name:Demented77

How old are you?:14

Time-Zone/Country of Residence:New Zealand Gmt +12

Do you have a good grip on the English language/good grammar?:yes

Small 2-3 Sentence Description of yourself:I am a 14 Year old boy that loves to play Roleplaying games and Soccer.

How much time could you be on the server weekly?:4+ a day

What do you know about Roleplaying? Give a definition of what it means to you:Roleplaying is when you act as a character and act as they would.

What experience have you had in Roleplaying, if any?:I have played on many roleplaying servers like Zombie run, Echo craft and i have played many rp games like the elder scrolls and Fable

In your own Words, define what the act of Meta-Gaming is:Meta gaming is taking OOC information and using it IC

In your own Words, define what the act of Power-Gaming is:Power gaming is When you dont give people time to respond or so somthing like *kills Example*

What do you expect this server will be like?:A epic adventure i can have with my friends as we rise to the top

What other server(s) have you played on and why did you leave them?:Echo craft, Zombie run and many Build servers. i left the rp ones because they didnt have many people to rp with as for the build server i just wanted top build some cool things

Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:

Do you promise to abide by said rules, and laws? This includes the Server, Forum, and Teamspeak set Rules:Yes

How did you hear about us?:Briton1 told me

Have you voted for the Lord of the Craft on Minestatus? Which vote number were you?:yes 4,178

Have you posted this application on our minecraft forum thread yet? If not, just finish it up on here and then copy + paste is over there. (http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/832121-%E2%96%91%E2%96%92%E2%96%93-the-lord-of-the-craft-%E2%96%93%E2%96%92%E2%96%91-enter-the-world-of-asulon-o-f-f-i-c-i-a-l-l-y-t-h-e-n-o-1-r-p-s-e-r-v-e-r/):

In-Character:

Character Name:Rashnak

What Race are you?:Orc

What Sub-Race are you? (note, you aren’t required to have a sub-race):Goblin

Biography (Please make this at least 2 paragraphs long. This must include the history of your character and his life as well as age, appearance and personality, etc.):Rashnak is a very brave goblin he may not be fast or strong but he has the heart of a lion at a early age his parents were killed by a bunch of dwarfs so it will come at no surprise that he hates all dwarfs. Rashnak Grew up alone when he walked to his tiny abandoned hut all the orcs would throw stones at him and try to start a fight Rashnak wouldn't back down from a fight even though most of the time it would always end in him with his hand on his ribs limping home.

Rashnak Was walking to his house when he met two orcs named Boldog and Tylarizard they all were sick of being pushed around so they decied to help one another and join together ((these people are friends of mine and we are going to make a somewhat Group)).

What is your Character's ambitions?:Rashnak is sick of being Pushed around he wants to rise to the top and be the most powerful person in Asulon

What is your character’s favorite tool? (sword, pickaxe, shovel, etc):Rashnak loves to use his fist

What is one of your Character's most skilled talents?Rashnak is good at Fixing things

A screenshot of your skin (must be in proper format):

Other Information about your Character:

Open-Response-Questions

Whilst traveling from the Cloud Temple you see a small halfling, being harassed by two armed warriors. They appear to be trying to steal money from him, how does your character respond?Rashnak would approach the Warriors saying "Latz leabe her alone or me will hab to klomp latz" they would then laughs at Rashnak he would Hit one and run in hope they would chase him then shout ot the halfling "Run!"

Your character wanders into Alras, and comes across a small stall, behind which a well dressed man is standing. He’s offering various wares, the merchant turns to you and says in a posh accent " 'ello there, what can I do you for today?" What is your character response?Rashnak Would say to the man "leabe me alone" if he keeped Bugging Rashnak he would Push the man saying "I Blahed Leabe me alone" then he would walk off

Whilst wandering in the wilds, your character comes across a small hut, which looks abandoned. Inside it you see a chest containing a few iron bars, and a golden sword. How would your character respond?:Rashnak Would look inside the hut then think about taking the Stuff then would leave the hut just to run back in garbing the iron

Hungry and lost in the wilderness, you stumble across a small trading camp nestled among the forest, they greet you you in the common tongue, how do you respond?Rashnak would say to them "Me nuud Fuud!" in hope of some food if they did not give him any he would run into the camp looking for some food and ounce he found some he would take it and run

You hear word that bandits occupy the road outside the town in which you have been staying. The town guard have gathered, and are asking for assistance to help eliminate them. The leader of the party is offering a reward for any who offer their support. How does your character act on this information?:Rashnak he would wait for the guards to go and assault them then try to sneak around to get some good hits in

[James Undercroft 129]

I am very sorry, but your application has been moved to the denied section of the forums. There are numerous reasons for this, all of which I have included in my feedback below this message. In the mean time there is an abundant source of information, stories, guides and other helpful tips to get you on your way to being accepted; all you need to do is look around. I would suggest the lord of the craft wiki and application submissions section of the forums to start off your little quest to make the best application. Good luck!

The reasons that I have denied you are:

Your definition of Roleplaying is not what we are after.

Your current definition of Roleplaying displays to me that you do not fully understand what Roleplaying is all about. Please go back and so some research as to what Roleplaying is. I needn’t remind you that this is a Roleplaying server, if you do not know how to role-play or do not show evidence that you are keen to learn how to role-play I suggest you find a Minecraft server better suited to your needs.

You did not give valid examples of RP, or you did not describe how your examples are RP.

You need to describe to us how the games or locations you have talked about pertain to an RP environment.

RPGs or Role-Playing Games are not RP’s.

Games such as World of Warcraft, Skyrim, Rift or similar do not count as Roleplaying as there is no person to person interaction within a Roleplaying scenario (unless of course you were on a Roleplaying server in which you need to explain where and how you role-played to show your understanding of the term).

Your definition for powergaming is a bit basic.

It does not go into depths as to the true meaning of powergaming and sort of skims the surface. Do some more research, look at our wiki or join in our Team Speak channel and ask around. I would also like you to include an example to display your understanding of the subject.

Your definition of metagaming is a bit basic.

See Above.

"Have you read, understood, and agreed to the rules?:"

You did not answer this question.

You need to have a character last name.

Unless you have a specific reason for why you do not have a last name of your character, you need to write a last name to show that you have put some in-depth thought processes into developing and creating your character.

Your biography has a lot of errors.

You have not included any lore from the world of Asulon/the lore you did include contradicts that of Asulon. I recommend that you do a lot of research as to what you race is and how they act, as well as towns and places that you could use in your biography. Do note this is not Skyrim or Lord of the Rings, we have our own universe with our own races. For ideas and lore you can look on the Lord of the Craft wiki (link on the main page), the Role-play or History sections of the forums or better yet; talk to the people themselves. Just join in our Team Speak channel and ask around! We welcome new people :)

More specifically read up on your Orcish stuff. No true orc would need to "band together" to avoid getting pushed around all the time, this is extremely un-orcish behaviour.

I will give you a single link, but it is up to you to do further research.

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/24133-orc-important-threads/

Your story does not make too much sense.

Your biography is less than two paragraphs long. You need to write a minimum of two paragraphs (which in themselves must contain at least five full sentences).

You need to complete the entire biography, detailing all your characters history, age, personality and description. We also like to see little role-play quirks such as habits like the constant brushing back of a fringe, or the scratching of an itchy palm.

Every single thing in your application must have a justification. For example:

John’s father taught him swordsman ship and the lay of the land. X BAD

John’s father was a retired swordsman in the Oren military, after the undead attacks and the moving to Asulon he decided it was time that he lay down the sword for more important matters, family. Now days John’s father teaches John the way of the sword, not so that he can join any particular military, but so that he can defend himself for future experiences to come. √GOOD

Your ambitions are underdeveloped.

You need to show some advanced thought processes. What would your character like to do in the near and distant futures? What is your character planning? You also need to justify your decisions. Why does your character want to do this? Things such as planning to kill all bandits, orcs, humans etc. are unacceptable ambitions as this would require a villainous activity.

Your answers to the favourite tool/best skill questions are underdeveloped.

You need to justify why you have chosen the choices you have. It is all well and good that your character can run really fast, or is light on their feet: but why?

Your answers to the Open Response questions need a lot of improvement.

Instead of describing what your character would do, you need to assume that your character is in the situation and acting as they would in that situation. You need to describe a scene of RP. This means that you cannot write “If this happens, then my character would do that.” As this shows that you are not Roleplaying, you are answering the question from what you think that your character might do. You need to show us that you know who your character is, you know what the situation is and you know how your character is going to react.

This also means that you need to write in full RP. For example:

Josh talks to the shopkeeper, buys a few apples, pays the shop keeper and leaves. X BAD

Josh walks up to the man standing behind the rough oaken market stand. The sounds of a busy market can be heard all around him. An annoying fly buzzes around his head, so he absent-mindedly begins to inefficiently swat it away. “Ah, greetings shopkeeper! I was just browsing your wares.” The shopkeeper nods at Josh and then turns towards another customer to attempt to assist them the way all market shopkeepers must. Suddenly Josh felt a slight tugging sensation on his belt. He was about to brush it off as nothing, perhaps just someone bumping into him until he realised his belt was slightly lighter. He noticed a man beginning to run off in the opposite direction of himself. He glanced down to see that his coin purse was missing. He put two and two together and then shouted at the top of his lungs. “STOP THEIF!”… √ GOOD!

We expect that you write in full RP and that you write a full paragraph or more for each question.

If you have any questions about my feedback, or would like to create some constructive criticism about the way I give feedback (I.E am I being TOO blunt, or am I coming across rude) then please send me a message! I take all questions, none are stupid! :)

[James Undercroft 129]

Moved to Denied Forum