Natheilan's 2Nd Mori App [Denied]

[chaotikal 2392]

Minecraft Account Name:

Darkjames

Character Name:

Natheilan Azure [Commoner house]

Gender:

Male

Age:

124 years old

Appearence:

Natheilan's hair is short, silver-white, his skin is pale and his eyes are crimson red. He usually wears commoner clothes, unless it is for a ceremony or important rite, he believes one's appearence defines other's opinions, and so he always keeps himself clean and fit. He upholds a smile in his face most of the times, hiding any weaknesses or emotions from the other's eyes.

Personality:

Natheilan is very fierce, he upholds a smirk almost all the time, showing no emotions with his body, but afar from feeling none, he likes to talk, but he will never let personal information out, having revealed his private name only once, to Volai'Doven. He struggles to achieve power within Menorcress, ahoping to obtain more and more power.

He dislikes following orders, but if he has to grovel when his life is threatened, he will do so. He hates the surface dwellers, deeming them as the enemies of the Immortal Mother, he thinks that they will vanish as the old dwellers did, and the Mori'Quessir will live on. He isnt one to go out into the surface often, and will only go out if it is an urgent matter or he's forced to.

Biography:

Chapter I - Natheilan zhah rosin -

Natheilan was born into house Azure, a commoner house. His mother died during his birth, and so his sister, of 130 years old, inherited the clan leadership. Troughout his childhood, Natheilan was mocked by his sister, he had to stand it, due to being in a lower tier than her, as soon as he started developing, he started growing hatred towards his late mother, who he blamed for dying and letting Nath in distress with his sister.

Chapter II - Ol zhah naurka ulu tlu natha dalhar -

Nathelian was now old enough for the magthere, and he was forcefully placed in. he was nervous and felt as if he was about to enter a swarm of enraged snakes. Undeterred, he went in, he noticed the other children were stranger than he expected, they would plot against their classmates, and soon, Nathelian was one of their targets. He would soon inmerse with his sorroundings, as he taught himself deception, placing blame onto others, arranging fights to walk out unharmed, he would soon manage a large amount of people within the magthere, holding them tightly with puppet strings, however, another Mori, Volai'Doven saw his oportunity and "Overthrew" Nath out of the Magthere throne, he turned his own "Friends" against Nathelian and Nathelian, with a wide smile, clapped at Volai. soon they were what would be the only "Friend" in his life.

Chapter III - Abbilen phuul ulu tlu chi'us -

Nathelian was now into his teenagehood, and his firm relationship with Volai kept them on a high station between the males of the magthere, they were both rich in wit and cunning, and they used these traits with defiance. However, his sister soon broke the truth to Nathelian, he would have to betray Volai in order to achieve one of the many rites onto adulthood. "The Sundering". He was slightly annoyed by this fact, but rejoyced he would not share the throne of the magthere no longer. He may have misunderstood the rite's assignment, but nothing was going to stop him from being rejected by the Mori, and rejecting this task would make him look weak, wich he definetly wasnt. He hired an assassin to kill Volai'Doven, even if it was with his life savings, Nath knew he could not fail this task. Soon he heard news of Volai's perish and as he resumed school, he now was in full command of the magthere.

Chapter IV -Tluin zhuanth-

Nathelian entered adulthood, he left schoo, wich was a relief for him, but soon something even worse would be just across the corner. Adulthood. He saw as his sister fell due to a scandal when she was enslaved by a high-up female, and due to her trying to run away, slain. He knew that house Azur was now an even poorer house, being compound by only males, him and his ignored father. Now he had to live his life as better as he could, trying to stay alive in the fuss that is the life of a Mori'Quessir.

Your characters ambitions:

To reach the better out of his station! to reach as much power a commoner can, and if possible to become a higher position.

===Roleplay Related Questions===

As your character wanders the back-streets of Menorcress, you sight a cloaked figure lurking in one of the shadowed nook behind the Brothel: a rustle of cloth is heard, and the figure ushers you in with a skeletal finger. The hooded figure imparts information involving a conspiracy to over-throw the House of Miiystra, and offers you a hefty sum of coin to partake in the planned attack. How does your character react?

Nathelian darts at the creature, eyes enraged. He claps his fingers as he says calmly "Streea dos phuul lac'nou, nindel zhah vel'bol dos orn ragar" He then staggers back slightly, smiling widely, letting go of a giggle, the creature seems to enter a wrath state, as Nathelian continues to smile in a mockingly way, he soon resumes his walk down the streets, knowing the creature wont be able to touch him as he now has melt with the crowd within the caverns.

Your character finds him/herself watching the Alure d'aphyon: the several fighters within the void maze wield only sticks as they prove their prowess as warriors by battling to the death. One of fighters happens to be a close companion of yours, and you witness him being strategically cornered by three of the other fighters and beaten to death. While the crowd cheers in celebration of the violence, and the death of your friend. How does your character react?

He smirks, as he sees the young Mori gruesomly beaten down with a stick, he twitches when the warriors stagger away, letting the full-on exposure of the late corpse, wich now has taken a red skin-tone, he smiles as he is relieved of the acquaintance bringing demise on his own, not upbringing any issues to Natheilan, he giggles as the dance continues developing.

A screenshot of your skin:

View Mori'Quessir Male

Nemiisae's touch.

[Amethain 25]

Natheilan is very fierce, he upholds a smirk almost all the time, showing no emotions with his body, but afar from feeling none, he likes to talk, but he will never let personal information out, having revealed his private name only once, to Volai'Doven. He struggles to achieve power within Menorcress, ahoping to obtain more and more power. He dislikes following orders, but if he has to grovel when his life is threatened, he will do so. He hates the surface dwellers, deeming them as the enemies of the Immortal Mother, he thinks that they will vanish as the old dwellers did, and the Mori'Quessir will live on. He isnt one to go out into the surface often, and will only go out if it is an urgent matter or he's forced to.

~~ He Deems Surfacers as enemies after the priestesses say they are to be treated 'non-violently'

You're a freaking commoner, you don't call anyone enemies of the mother...

~~ He thinks they will vanish like the old ones did, who died to Iblees Taint...

(Iblees is a defeated enemy, and there are NATIONS of surfacers now. They won't be dying out any time soon, Any sensible person can see that.)

~~ He told his private name to only one person

(He sucked up to the person who overthrew him that's what he did...)

Natheilan was born into house Azure, a commoner house. His mother died during his birth, and so his sister, of 130 years old, inherited the clan leadership. Troughout his childhood, Natheilan was mocked by his sister, he had to stand it, due to being in a lower tier than her, as soon as he started developing, he started growing hatred towards his late mother, who he blamed for dying and letting Nath in distress with his sister.

~~ He had to stand his sisters 'torment', so he came to hate his mother.

(It's a bad thing to be toughened up, so he hates the very one who brought him into existance, and is one of Nemiisae's daughters.)

~~ He was in distress with his sister.

(You said he would grovel to help himself, why did he not bow down to his sister and get in her 'good' graces?)

Nathelian was now old enough for the magthere, and he was forcefully placed in. he was nervous and felt as if he was about to enter a swarm of enraged snakes. Undeterred, he went in, he noticed the other children were stranger than he expected, they would plot against their classmates, and soon, Nathelian was one of their targets. He would soon inmerse with his sorroundings, as he taught himself deception, placing blame onto others, arranging fights to walk out unharmed, he would soon manage a large amount of people within the magthere, holding them tightly with puppet strings, however, another Mori, Volai'Doven saw his oportunity and "Overthrew" Nath out of the Magthere throne, he turned his own "Friends" against Nathelian and Nathelian, with a wide smile, clapped at Volai. soon they were what would be the only "Friend" in his life.

(This is horrid... Did you even read the lore on the Melee? Melee Magthere)

Nathelian was now into his teenagehood, and his firm relationship with Volai kept them on a high station between the males of the magthere, they were both rich in wit and cunning, and they used these traits with defiance. However, his sister soon broke the truth to Nathelian, he would have to betray Volai in order to achieve one of the many rites onto adulthood. "The Sundering". He was slightly annoyed by this fact, but rejoiced he would not share the throne of the magthere no longer. He may have misunderstood the rite's assignment, but nothing was going to stop him from being rejected by the Mori, and rejecting this task would make him look weak, wich he definetly wasnt. He hired an assassin to kill Volai'Doven, even if it was with his life savings, Nath knew he could not fail this task. Soon he heard news of Volai's perish and as he resumed school, he now was in full command of the magthere.

(Again Read the Melee's Lore... And the Sundering is something you take care of on your own. you don't hire someone to deal with the rite for you...)

Nathelian entered adulthood, he left schoo, wich was a relief for him, but soon something even worse would be just across the corner. Adulthood. He saw as his sister fell due to a scandal when she was enslaved by a high-up female, and due to her trying to run away, slain. He knew that house Azur was now an even poorer house, being compound by only males, him and his ignored father. Now he had to live his life as better as he could, trying to stay alive in the fuss that is the life of a Mori'Quessir.

~~ "Nathelian entered adulthood, he left schoo, wich was a relief for him"

(God Seriously, use a spellchecker Please...)

~~ His sister was enslaved then slain and Azure was destroyed.

(His name means nothing now. His family name is now non-existant.)

As your character wanders the back-streets of Menorcress, you sight a cloaked figure lurking in one of the shadowed nook behind the Brothel: a rustle of cloth is heard, and the figure ushers you in with a skeletal finger. The hooded figure imparts information involving a conspiracy to over-throw the House of Miiystra, and offers you a hefty sum of coin to partake in the planned attack. How does your character react?

Nathelian darts at the creature, eyes enraged. He claps his fingers as he says calmly "Streea dos phuul lac'nou, nindel zhah vel'bol dos orn ragar" He then staggers back slightly, smiling widely, letting go of a giggle, the creature seems to enter a wrath state, as Nathelian continues to smile in a mockingly way, he soon resumes his walk down the streets, Nathelian continues to smile in a mockingly way, he soon resumes his walk down the streets.

~~ "Nathelian continues to smile in a mockingly way, he soon resumes his walk down the streets"

(How Naive... He can recognize you and hunt you down possibly easily as he is daring enough to offer to overthrow Miisytra. Besides, a weak houseless commoner won't be noticed missing.)

You had it made, until I read the Bio section about the Melee. Fix it, I am not telling you what is wrong because you will only fix what I mentioned like you did this time... Learn the lore, take it to heart and try again in 24hrs.

[chaotikal 2392]

He did not enter the melee magthere, he just entered school, wich translated is Magthere.

To the other things, he groveled before Volai to later betray him, even though his plans were modified, The Sundering had little to no details, excuse me on that one.

He deems the new surfacers as a trial of his mother. I will fix the bio, but I did not know that houses were tornished after all females were slain. I will also fix the spelling, actually... I had fixed it, maybe I didn't save it...

I will fix all of the ORQ and the lore-related issues.

[Danny 2232]

Moved to the Great Library. It shall be sorted into appropriate category shortly.