[Denied]Jakesassy40's App [Human]

[Jake the Dog 290]

Out-Of-Character Information
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: jakesassy40
How old are you?:15
Time-Zone: London England GMT 0+
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: No I have always wanted to but never had the chance
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I had seen a youtube video about a year ago and then my friend's on skype started talking about it so I decided to try and sign up.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: I had made one about 1 year ago but I can't get the link to it.
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): Yes I will post it at the same time as this app.(I don't know how to link to the forum so ill link to my page where you can go down to post's http://www.minecraftforum.net/user/1020107-jakesassy40/ sorry i'm not used to forum's much)
Have you read the Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: Yes I went and read all the wiki page's on human lore.

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:

 

A chance to act as someone different then yourself and live a life that you never could 
Meta-gaming:

 

Using outside information that you have not gotten in game to help get an edge E.G I have someone tell me on Skype that I will be attacked by someone and then I go in game and run before they can get there

 

Power-emoting:

 

Using Emote's to win something with out any chance of the other player reacting "Jake stab's John and kill's him with ease." If I were to use this I would write "Jake tried to Stab John" Giving the other player a chance to counter it

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Jakir Axem
Current Age: 27
Sub-race (if any): Northerner

 

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):

 

Jakir Axem was born to Davir Axem and Alice Axem, he enjoyed a simple life and was taught simple rules. His mother and father owned a small lumber farm just outside the city of Arethor. Because of this Jakir was taught all about wood and the art of lumber jacking, being of northerner blood this skill came easy to him. He was home schooled and grew up to be nice, kind and always ready to help anyone in need. At the age of 15 Jakir was one day out doing his normal route of going to the capital and trying to sell the wood his family produced, till he gazed over to the south wall where he longed to go home and rest. And that’s when he noticed smoke rising from outside the wall. He raced past people in the street only thinking about what might of happened, why there is smoke, is his family ok, till he reached his home. He dropped to his knees at the sight of his home on fire and in the corner his mother and father's charred remains’. This changed something in Jakir, not insanity or depression but anger, an anger for those who did this, for the people who have done this to him. He slowly got up knowing he had nothing left to lose and looked over and a flash shined in his eyes. It was his fathers axe perfectly made hand crafted for him when he was young, and now it was Jakir's axe.

 

 

 

Jakir spent the next 5 years of his life trying to find the people who did this to him. At first it was just asking around, sitting in bar's just looking out for the smallest detail about what happened, One day Jakir heard about a small lumber farm that was attacked the man said "Heh, Them lumber jacks down by the south gate got raided". This made Jakir get a little closer he heard the next man say "Yea I Heard bout that. It was Ronak I think". This made Jakir he up slowly and walk to the bartender and ask "Hey im looking for a man named Ronak?" The bartender said "You mean girl mate, she's the leader of them bandit's just to the south of here", Jakir got up and headed south. After about an hour of walking Jakir found the base of the bandit's that attacked his home and kill his family. Jakir slowly walked up to the camp staying as low as he can holding his father's axe tight, He walked round the camp past the tent's till he found the main one with Ronak inside. A mix of rage and hate build up inside Jakir till it could not be contained anymore he opened the tent brought the axe up and killed the bandit before him. All the noise made the other bandit's wonder what was going on till a blood soaked Jakir can out of the tent. Only seeing red Jakir killed everyone in the camp not even noticing the hit's he was getting back till they were all gone. The horror of seeing all this made Jakir threw up knowing what he had done. What he had done to the people here. He vowed from this day he will do all he can to help people in there time of need and do what he can to stop this from ever happening to someone else again

 

 

 

Ambitions for the Future: Do what he can to help other's and one day maybe rebuild his father's lumber farm to is full glory
Personality: Thoughtful of his action's Kind and caring and Willing to help anyone in need
Skills: Good with an axe and handy with tool's He can also see the trait's of a person just by looking into there eye's

 

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): I don't know how you put an image here not to good with forum stuff so ill paste it at the bottom

 

Any other details you wish to share about your character:
He look's a bit older then his age because of all the thing's he has gone through.

 

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. Whilst in the mighty human capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

Answer: I followed him to an alleyway out of sigh he turned around and looked at me I said "You know you look a bit shady mate, any normal person would say you hiding something" He looked at me for a few second's then said "Look you don't know who I am so get out my way and you won't die" he had a high pitch voice I thought he can't be older then 17 I say "Kid you gunna get yourself killed, Just give it up", I can see the anger in his eye's something must of happened when he was young. "I know how you feel kid. Anger. Hate. I hade the same and revenge did not fix anything" He looked at me for awhile then burst into tear's. He was going on about how he left on his own but his crying made it hard to hear "its ok mate. Just take it slow and have a rest." He looked at me and smiled, got up and walked away


2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armor and an iron longsword, how do you react?

Answer:I get a bit closer to the men and one though crosses my mind, the old man look's like my father. This bring's back all the memory's of him and I hold my sword tighter. From what I can see the men are not used to this heavy armor they seem a bit sluggish using this I step out and say "Hello there gent's I see you are having fun." One of the men step forward "This is of no importance of you leave now". Taking a step back I say "Well I guess I should" and with that I rush past them and stab one in the back, The other one confused by what just happened swung his sword around his armor slowing him down and making the attack easy to dodge even for someone like me,  this miss caused the man to get angry and swing his sword closer to me each time he swung I jumped back till his sword hit a tree and jammed its self using this I said "Make a choice run or die". He did not run.

 

3. You are standing within the mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

Answer: I look down at his wear's they may not be the best but they will do. "I'm in the market for some tools." I say "well then you came to the right place my boy, I have everything you need right here." he lay's out all the tool's I need somehow knowing it's just what I needed. I check each one making it look like I’m checking for fault's but in truth I know there all well made "Ill have the lot.", I say "Great." he reply's "I may not have much in the way of money. But I do own a small lumber farm just outside the city" "I could set up trade Tool's for Wood." He look's at me for a second then hold's out his hand and smile's "You sir have got a deal."

 

 

 

 

 

I can make change's to the skin it's just that's the skin I have used for the last year hope to hear back for you and Tanks for reading (just noticed that I put the title the wrong way round sorry) 10/02/13 made post request for a custom skin.11/02/13 Made a new skin it come's with a hood and without.

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

Your application has been...

 

 

 

Your application has been denied for the following reasons:

 

 

Whilst your biography is excellent, I wish for you to add some more lore to it. You have only described one city in it, which isn't as much lore as I had liked. You can find some on the forums and/or wiki. Here is a link to the wiki to help you!  

 

http://www.lordofthecraft.net/wiki/wikka.php?wakka=HomePage

 

Slight metagaming in your biography. You said you killed the bandit named Ronak, but you had no idea that it would be her inside the tent. It could be someone else.

 

Powergaming in your biography. You murdered everyone inside the camp, on your own. This is severe powergaming, please fix this.

 

Just a personal preference, and you don't need to fix this, but it would make it better to read for me or any other Application Team Member; you don't always make something plural by adding " 's " to something. For example, "bring's" isn't the plural of bring. It means "bring his" or "bring is". Just so you know!

 

 

Please re-apply in 24 hours from this post or face instant denial. If you have any questions, feel free to pop me a PM!

[MonkeyCoffee 516]

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