[Denied]Whitelist Application For Lotc [Elf] 2Ed Try

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[b]Out-Of-Character Information[/b]

Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name:Darkhoneydew
How old are you?:27
Time-Zone:GMT-5
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?:Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?:Yes I have done alot of fourm roleplays
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?:Google Mainly
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/81532-whitelist-application-for-lotc-elf/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):Yes
Have you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:Yes

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:The act of playing your char has if you where in his or her shoes. like say if you were joe a elf mage you whould have to give him a personality,likes dislikes,strenghths ect.
Meta-gaming:The use of OOC info IC for a advantage.Like if you hear about a camp you cant raid it becase you cant know about it but you do so anyways
Power-emoting:Overpowered use of Emotes I.E Joey stabs and kills mono.

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name:Yenama Casapa
Current Age:25
Sub-race (if any):Wood Elf
Past / History:Yenama Is a wood elf from the tavern village ShadowVale on a Black Moon becase of this odd time of birth she had a Crimson eye (Left) and a purple eye(Right) but she was arachnaphobic and is was born great with a bow and in the act of stealth.While Yenama was growing up she was taught archery,brewing,swordsmanship,and stealth.She was told about how the world was created and about the Anguls and Deamons she became intrested but dabble into it no longer becase every year her mother whould bring her to join her in the Great Hunt Yenama learned the vital points of most Fauna of the area.

 

When Yenama left home at age 17 she got a package before she left. It was from her mom it was a bow,12 arrows,and 10 Minas after she left she found a human in a forest she said her name was Yenama and he told her his name was Maxwell they departed and left she made a tree house in a forest near by ShadowVale and spent her times learning  more how to brew and perfected her archery she left to adventure and to become a great archer when she was 25.
Ambitions for the Future:To become a great archer and adventure the unknown areas of Asulon.
Personality:Kind,careing,unselfish,and bold
Skills:Archery,stealth,and brewing
Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin):  2013-02-08_22.41.52.png   878.99K   4 downloads
Any other details you wish to share about your character:None

[b]Open-Response-Questions[/b]
[i]Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.[/i]
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[b]1. As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of High Elves are mocking a small Wood Elf child. How do you react?[/b]

Answer:Yenama heard wispering and investigated only to see  some high elves mocking a small wood elf girl "Stop that!" she said to the High Elves "You dont have the right to do that and just becase you are 'royal' dosen't mean you have the right to mock her!"When the high elves leave she walks up to the child and asks "Where are your parents?"The child responds with "I don't know i got lost they were heading to ShadowVale I think."Yemana walk the chiled to ShadowVale to be greated by her parents all rewards she was offered she refused from Minas to a vase she did not want them becase she saw they were poor.

[b]2. Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there, defenseless - what do you do?[/b]

Answer:Yemana saw a man fallover walking stick broken and Minas on the floor she  stops and grabs the Minas of the ground and put it in a pouch "come on do you know where the closest city is sir?"She said to the man picking him up."to the north east there is a town I was heading to."She quickly walked the man there at first sight of a place that sold walking sticks."Hello? I want to buy a walking stick."She said entering"Ahh yes I was about to close down this shop anyways that will cost you 20 Minas."Yemana took out her pouch and got 10 Minas from it "Here you go"She said to the owner of the place has she was handed the walking stick she went to the old man and gave him the walking stick and his Minas before she walked away.

[b]3. Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in which a colored carriage sits. A tradoster stands outside of it and calls you over, telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion involved).

Answer:Yemana heard a man call her over "Welcome Welcome! we sell everything you could want."The man said "Do you sell a Eenchanted bow?" She Said "Why yes! we have one that imbues your arrows with fire setting them ablaze!" "Well I will sell this sword and this enchanted pendent for 200 Minas and I will give you 100 minas for 300 Minas for that bow." "No no no I require a better payment 500 Minas!" "No way! I will buy it for 355 Minas."She said taking out a potion." "Fine. here take it!" Yemana grabed the bow  and walked away back to the Elven Forest

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I have decided to deny you for the following reasons:

 

 

1.  Your biography was a little short. If you could expand it a little more, that would be much better. I find that adding more lore generally helps lengthen the biography. Also, I'd like to note a few things; Heterochromia (Different colored eyes.) is not affected by the phase of the moon (You can still have it, but moon phase doesn't cause it. It's a genetic disorder. In Lord of the Craft, the most common cause is crossbreeding.) and both red and purple eye colors are rather rare, if not impossible for a wood elf. (The most common colors are blue and green. Brown is also acceptable.) Also, you can't be "born great with a bow". Your character can be talented at using a bow, however. Though you can't be born great with it as it's an acquired skill, much like cooking or hunting.

 

2.  Please go into more detail with your power-emoting definition and example. Make it at least as long as your other definitions.

 

3.  Your Open Response Questions could use a little more work. You're on the right track though. Simply add more detailed actions.

 

 

A good second attempt. You're almost there! However, please be sure to wait at least a full twenty four hours before posting your next attempt. This will give you time to think and to improve upon your application. If you have any questions or would like some help with your application, feel free to send me a message. I'd be happy to help!

Good luck with your next application!

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