[Denied][Elf] Guenther's App

[Rayna Star 167]

 

Out-Of-Character
Information

Please
fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the
essential details are accurate.

[Elf]

Minecraft
Account Name: guenther

How
old are you?: 13 (14 in a few weeks)

Time-Zone:
Central

Have
you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: Yes

What
previous experience have you had in role-playing?: I have had trouble finding a
Minecraft server that does serious role-play, and I have never done it in real
life. I do write stories in my notebooks though in which I’m a character, so I
think I’ll be good at role-playing.

How
did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I was searching the web for a
minecraft server that does serious role-play.

Link
any applications that you have previously made for the server: I have made
none.

Have
you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so
(link above): Yes

Have
you read the Elven lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it
in your biography?: Yes

 

Definitions

In
your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from
elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing:
A group of people pretending to be someone they are not (most of the time it’s
fantasy based characters) and making a story to go with their characters.

Meta-gaming:
Saying things in character that your character would normally have no way of knowing.

Power-emoting:
When you say something in the game that prevents another person from changing
it. ( ex: Guenther takes out a knife and kills you)

 

In-Character
Information:

Complete
the following biography on your character:

 

Full
Name: Hiylu Celia Thillnibar

Current
Age: appears to be 18 (That’d be about 70 in elf years right?)

Sub-race
(if any): Considered a wood-elf (See history for more)

Past
/ History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): During
her childhood, it was hard for Hiylu to make friends because she stood out a
lot. This was because while her father was a High Elf, her mother was a Wood
Elf. Hiylu has golden skin, but she has brown hair. She is quite tall, but she
is also kind. These differences were a perfect target for the High Elves’
bullying. Hiylu tried to be strong and never let it get her down. She would often tease back or just walk away. On the inside though, these mean comments hurt her a lot. Hiylu never had that many friends because of this teasing. About twice every year, a traveling merchant caravan would come and stay in the forest where Hiylu lived. Traveling with this caravan were three human girls. They became good friends with Hiylu, despite her bloodline. This intrigued Hiylu, starting her curiosity with the human race. She likes human so much because they don't seem to care much about her bloodline and have always accepted her. Because these human girls were her only friends, Hiylu often struggled with talking to boys her age. She has never had a relationship before and she doesn't know how exactly to have one. When she was about 7 in human years, her father passed away. He died in the front lines of a war. This added on to the weight of the bullying. Hiylu was always smiling though, and no one thought she could ever be sad. Hiylu didn't want to worry her mother because she already had enough worry to deal with. Her
mother tried to take care of her, but Hiylu felt guilty because she knew there
wasn’t enough money. She would often try to go and find odd jobs to do for people so she could help her mother pay the rent. She decided to leave home at the age of 18(The point in
time where I’ll start in the game). She promised her mother that she would send money home to help. Hiylu often thinks about her father because
he was always very kind to her. Her mother said that he used to tease her when
they were young, but they eventually fell in love with her and something changed
inside of him. Hiylu always loved to hear her mother’s stories. She would often
sit in her mother’s lap while she told her stories of her youth. Hiylu plans to
one day return to her mother, but not before she has as many stories to tell
her mother as her mother has to tell her.

 

Ambitions
for the Future: Wants to see the world and study the human culture.

Personality:
Kind, mildly outgoing (except when it comes to talking to High Elves), curious(especially about humans), and friendly.

Skills:
Not especially good at anything. She does odd jobs a lot for people, so she never knows if she'll be doing. (Loves taking care of animals and decorating houses with plants though).

Appearance
(this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Brown hair (I know it’s
supposed to be rare, but I’m special okay? ;) ), golden skin, and blue eyes. She
is about 6’ 7” currently and weighs about 130 pounds.

http://imgur.com/a/3idy8

 

 

Any
other details you wish to share about your character: Sometimes can be a bit of
a rebel (ex: she sometimes sneaks out at night to sit in the forest or hangs
out with humans).

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each
question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which
must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not
break character or lore at any point.

____

 

1.
As you walk through the deep forests you hear the sound of whispering and
snickering. Upon inspection you realize that a group of High Elves are mocking
a small Wood Elf child. How do you react?

 

Answer:
I walk over to the High Elves. “And what do you think you’re doing?” I say
accusingly. “Nothing that requires your approval,” one of the High Elves
retaliates. “Well maybe it doesn’t, but that doesn’t make it right,” I say. “Come
on, let’s go find somewhere else to go,” Another High Elf says. As they leave,
I turn to the Wood Elf child. “Are you okay?” I ask. The Wood Elf child nods
pitifully. “Alright then,” I say, “Let’s go find your parents.”

 

2.
Whilst wandering through the Elven forests you come across a frail old man with
a walking stick. He collapses in front of you, falling to the ground with a
sharp thud. Out of his pocket falls a small pouch of gold coins, which hits the
ground and splits open spreading coins across the pathway. The man lies there,
defenseless - what do you do?

 

Answer:
I bend down to pick up the old man. “Are you alright, sir?” I ask. “I think so,”
he says, “These bones aren’t what they used to be though.” I help the man to a
nearby tree where he sits down in the shade. “Let me help you pick up those
coins,” I say. I walk over to where the coins were scattered on the ground and
picked them up. “Here you are,” I say as I give the coins and the pouch back to
him. “Thank you, miss,” he says. “Now, this may sound odd, but… are you a
human?” I ask with curiosity.

 

3.
Whilst traversing the Elven Woodlands, you come across a small clearing in
which a colored carriage sits. A trader stands outside of it and calls you over,
telling you of his wares. He points out that his carriage sells just about
everything, and that he's willing for you to haggle for a price. What does your
character do? (Please include:- item, haggling for prices and the discussion
involved).

 

Answer:
“How much for that small fox cub in the cage?” I ask cautiously. “One-hundred
gold pieces,” He replies with a smile. One-hundred
gold pieces! I only have 30 with me, I think to myself. “How about twenty?”
I say sheepishly. “I could drop it down to 80,” He says. “What if I gave you 25
with this loaf of bread and this bag of apples,” I say, pulling out my lunch. “Make
it thirty and you’ve got a deal!” he exclaims, eyeing the steaming wheat bread.
“Thirty it is,” I say. We shook hands, and -giving him the food and money- I
took the fox cub from the carriage. You
cost me a lot little one, I thought to myself –referring to the fox cub- , but I’m sure it was well worth it.

Thanks for reading my application! :D

[Roxforbraynz 251]

 

 

A very good first application, but I decided to deny you for the following reasons:

 

 

1.  I'd like to see a little more lore in your biography. I'll point you to this page of the WIki. There you can read up on a few elven cities, and if you wish, you can also check out a few human cities on this page.

 

2.  I'd like you to expand upon your definitions. Your meta-gaming definition is mostly incorrect as well; please fix that. Also, add a meta-gaming example.

 

3.  I'd like for you to expand upon your Open Response Questions. You're on the right track, but I'd like to see them longer with more detailed actions and a little more dialogue.

 

 

I think you have the potential to be a good roleplayer. I'm sure you'll get accepted if you try a little harder. For now though, please wait at least a full twenty four hours as of this post's edit (Seen below) before you post your next attempt. This will give you time to think and to improve upon your application. If you have any questions or would like some help with your application, feel free to send me a message. I'd be happy to help!

Good luck with your next application!

Edited February 15, 2013 by ๖ۣۜElwen ๖ۣۜEvaglno (Rox)

[Roxforbraynz 251]

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