[Denied]Gasolime's Submission

[GASOLIME 0]

Out-Of-Character Information

Please fill out the
following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details
are accurate.

 

Minecraft Account
Name:GASOLIME

How old are you?:18

Time-Zone:Central Us

Have you read,
understood and agreed to the rules?:Yes

What previous
experience have you had in role-playing: Garrys mod White list Rp server
Whitelisted RP minecraft servers

How did you hear about
the the Lord of the Craft?:Been waiting to Apply for 2 years But didn’t have a
Strong enough PC now I have a 20,000 USD pc L

Link any applications
that you have previously made for the server:Do you keep denied applications I
supposovly plagorized Meta-gaming definition On wiki L because I really had
no Idea of It Besides from My other sources

Have you posted this
application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):Yes
I have

Have you read the
Human lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your
biography?:Yes I will as close as possible

 

Definitions

In your own words
define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

 

Role-playing:The Act
of impersonating a Fiction Charoctor Either made up by you or by another And you
pose as that Figure as if it was Yourself

Meta-gaming:Doing what
your character normally wouldent be alble to do Like swim in armour

Power-emoting: Making
yourself stronger than you really are or Meta-gaming to win

 

In-Character
Information:

Complete the
following biography on your character:

 

Full Name:Alvor “Sparrow”
Brabec

Current Age:19

Sub-race (if any):

Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long):Alvor Was nothing
but a Farmers Child until His farm was Pillaged By bandits and his father was
killed trying to defend His life’s Work and Alvor and his mother were captured
and sold into Slavery By the bandit Chief To a Group of Orcs in the South. From
there his mother cleaned and Alvor Did chores such as Chop wood and Go on
errands to town for food and supplies Out of Curiosity he wandered off from his
master and got lost. Eventually he found his way home to Find His mother
skinned and burned with her Entrails Hanging all over the Sand, Fearing Punishment
from his master He ran, And still Today all he Does Is Run. More So perusing knowledge
Because of the Fascination of Knowledge And books growing up he was poor and
Never seen A book or even Paper but his Mother taught him how to Read and Such
And Now Alvor Is seemingly Trying Get into a Elven Castle So he can Study The
depths of Knowledge itself all the way to Magic By far the Deepest Of all knowledge
Resents in those who are powerful With Magic

Ambitions for the Future:To learn As much as possible before he dies, May it be reading
every book he finds Or perusing The Ambitions of Learning the Art of Magic.

Personality: Very curious, Hardy , Adventurous, Avid Reader, Intellectual
Hoarder who needs to Know everything about everything , and Afraid of His past
and continues to Run from it so he shuts out the world with books.

Skills: Past experiences with farming makes him a skilled Cultivator harvester,
Knows how to cook reasonably well because of all the time he spent with his
mother growing up, Athletic, Literate, Skilled writer.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Wears a teal Hooded Gown? Thin Average figure Wears a Small pouch
on his Back for Storage of His belongings

Any other details you wish to share about your character:Pulled his Entire Outfit off A dead Person on the side of the
road because it was better than his Raggy tunic and Fading tattered pants

 

Open-Response-Questions

Each question in this section must be
answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.

____

 

1. Whilst in the mighty human
capital you notice a dark-clothed figure stealthily making his way towards the Emperor’s palace - he is clearly up to no good. There are guards within shouting distance - what do you do?

 

Answer: Approach the Man asking If he can help me with something
urgent And needs his/hers help If any aggression is shown to me I will call the
Gaurds

 

 

2. Whilst wandering in the deep oak forest you
come across a large clearing, in which sits a small cobbled cottage. Outside it stands an unstable
old man armed with a small iron blade, surrounded by two heavily armed bandits - they appear to be threatening him. You are armed with leather armour and an iron longsword, how do you react?

 

Answer: Accept him as a Casualty And move on Alvor Doesn’t Care for
Others Unless there Known to him But Will Warn other travelers of bandits in
the Area.

 

 

3. You are standing within the
mighty human capital when you notice a small man standing behind a colourful stall. You approach the stall and notice that the man is selling a variety of
general goods - he says that he is selling just about anything and that he has no set prices. He is willing to allow you to haggle and choose prices. What do you do? (Explain: your haggling, items of choice and the discussion that happens).

 

Answer: Man: hail Traveler, Alvor: Hail, what are these fine goods at
stall priced at may I ask? Man: well I like that there Shiny Button on your
shirt… Is it silver or Platinum Alvor: *lies* Um... it’s Silver... (Not knowing
because he took his outfit off a dead Elf in the woods. Man: Can I sell you
this bushel of Arrows Straight from the Wood City Itself! Alvor: yeah no but
Ill pay good coin for those boots man: sure 20 Minas. Alvor: 15 and it’s a deal.
Man: 17. Alvor; Now that seems Like a Fine trade *Exchanges Currency for
product* Man: *greedily grabs coins*  Pleasure doing Business with you Alvor: yes
Indeed, you seem very professional *Being nice but doesn’t believe*  

 

 

 

[Princeton 396]

 

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-Unfortunately, I am going to have to deny this -

 

Firstly, I am going to say you have some serious grammar and spelling mistakes that need correcting. Minor mistakes here and there are acceptable, but your application is littered with them

 

Secondly, it appears the both of your definitions are incorrect. I suggest searching the internet and finding the correct definitions without plagiarizing. 

 

Thirdly, your biography lacks any LoTC lore and is extremely cliche. The bandit/orc raiding party that kills both of your parents is extremely overused and plain unoriginal. I advise taking more time to develop a unique character that combines LoTC lore and individuality to create a truly interesting application.

 

Lastly, your ORQ's lacked effort and did not have enough dialogue or detailed actions. It is important to incorporate detailed actions and descriptions along with dialgoue to approve your ability to role-play. For your last ORQ, I suggest refraining from the generic [Man 1] Sentence here [Man 2] Sentence here because it doesn't prove you can paint a situation. Please refer to an implemented application for a proper example.

 

Please wait 24 hours after this post to reapply. Feel free to PM me with questions or concerns!

[Princeton 396]

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