[Denied][Orc!] Ogrin Stonebreaker

[z3m0s 1957]

Out-Of-Character Information
Please fill out the following questions as accurately as possible, and ensure the essential details are accurate.

Minecraft Account Name: Crusher32
How old are you?:14
Time-Zone: UTC
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?: yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: many many roleplay servers and small fantasy/medieval books for school projects.
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I stumbled across it when searching for an RP server to play.
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server:
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above):
Have you read the Orcish lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?:yes
 

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:playing a made up character as if it was your own life following all rules and family traditions.
Meta-gaming:Using knowledge your character would not no to find someone or convict them of something.
Power-emoting: forcing and emote onto someone without giving them a chance to counter to react for instance *kills bob* which is force emoting so u would have to say *try's to stab bob* for example
 

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:

Full Name: Ogrin stonebreaker
Current Age:76
Past / History: I was raised by An elder from my the lur clan from birth, from what i am told my father died in a war-band raid on a village that turned out to be more then they expected and my mother killed an orc who supposedly could have but didn't save my father which resulted in her banishment from the tribe and i was raised by an elder, learning all the same fighting Technics but alot of knowledge that most Orcs did not have. At the age of 50 i was trialed by my elder/father figure, he challenged me to a fight to the death for reasons i did not no.

 

i did not wish to fight him,and of course beat him but out of respect i let him live which some said was weak others saying it was extremely honorable never the less a short time after he took his own life i guess the shame of being beaten was to much for him...

 

Ambitions for the Future:I want to learn about all the races and taking the best of them and return to my Orc brothers and sisters to create an impenetrable strong community with little to no weakness's. 

Personality: Ogrin is as most orcs, short tempered but he has unteachable respect for those who stand up to him and fight rather then cower in fear,they are still no match, but there courage earns them life, respect and eternal friendship.

Skills: Ogrin is quite good at climbing very very good at sharpening weapons but only basic weapon crafting he can also read and write which he is quite proud of for not many Orcs can he is able to hold large amounts of liquor as usual for Orcs, he can skin animals making basic clothing and meals even make shift bone weapons.

Appearance: 7 foot 2 280 lbs no head or facial hair, very muscular build, lite green skin,to the larger side ears a massive jaw, blood red eyes only usually wearing hes favorite torn leather shorts.

(sorry but i couldn't get the skin to show up but here's a link to it hope its okay) http://minecraft.novaskin.me/skin/9897025/Orc-Berserker

 

Any other details you wish to share about your character: no

 

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. You are roaming the mighty capital of the War Nation Of Uruks, as you near the Arena you spot an Orc, wearing what seems to be human garbs as he looks at you he smiles and say out loud in common not in blah “Come friend let me teach you of civilization and break your mind from this orcish savagery!”, how do you react?

Answer:*approach orc* "what say you Orc how did you come to be?" "I do not wish to be civilized but i would be for ever in your favor to learn the knowledge of the people you live with" "and i would spare your life"

2. As you are watching an Arena fight between two Orcs, the Goj of Krug walks towards the Arena, and shouts “Mi brudderz da Feztivel ob Krug iz coummeh! We needz zacrifizez tu zummun da Zpirit ob Krug un diz uzg, go gadder da Warbandz nd raid da landz nd bring mi buck zacrifizez, twiggy nd pinky dat we kan zlauhater upun da alter ob Krug nuw go mi Brudderz!” How do you react to this?

Answer: *let out great yell* "yub,yuuubbb, kill twiggies bring dem back err, kill erm allllll, grab ur lusks nd zults nd we go nd burn doen da twiggies bobhosh blarg's ntil day all flat!!!!!

3. As you are travelling in the barren Orcish deserts you come across a quiet oasis. Beside it sits a small tent where a young orc is preparing a meal of roasted halfling. He calls you over, offering you to join in with his meal. What does your character do?

Answer:*walk over and punch orc firmly to show dominance but respect* "ahaha UG! brudda rulg fer asken mi te joine ya *make friendly conversation and finish off the meal* "aarrrr rulg agin brudda yur kindnas is murch welcarm" *but heads and head off on my way*.

[ski_king3 0]

 

You must post your application to the Minecraft Forum Post. Please do so next time.

 

Your roleplay definition is a bit off, as it's a bit more specific than it really ought to be, and your meta-gaming definition could use some work. Read this wiki page, it should help a lot.

 

I would also advise you change your name to something a bit more orcish. Although not necessary, it would make your character much more appealing to other orcs.

 

Your bio could use a lot of work as well. Please expand upon it, and if you can, try to improve the grammar a bit. It was a little bit hard to follow, but more importantly, it needs significantly more details.

 

In the personality section, it seems you say that nobody he fights are ever a match for him. Your character should not start out as some unbeatable, master fighter. Any significant skill with fighting should be achieved through roleplay, and while he may be skilled, he simply cannot defeat everybody.

 

Each of your ORQ's are far too short, and could use significant expansion as well. Your first ORQ was also incredibly hard to follow, as I don't understand who is saying what or really what is going on at all. Also, your third ORQ contained cannibalism, a villainous action which your character cannot act upon until you have filled out a villain application to do so. As such, you cannot do this in your application.

 

If you have any questions, feel free to PM me. You may reapply 24 hours after the time on the post below this one.

[ski_king3 0]

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