[Denied]Kellen115's Application [Orc]

[kellen115 1]

Race: orc

Minecraft Account Name: Kellen115
How old are you?: 13
Time-Zone: GMT
Have you read, understood and agreed to the rules?:Yes
What previous experience have you had in role-playing?: yes but not much i played on an rp wow server before
How did you hear about the the Lord of the Craft?: I saw a trailer for it on youtube
Link any applications that you have previously made for the server: http://www.lordofthecraft.net/forum/index.php?/topic/16878-my-form/
Have you posted this application on the Minecraft Forum? If not, then please do so (link above): I am unable to do so.
Have you read the Orcish lore, and shall you ensure you make use of it and follow it in your biography?: I have read the lore, and agree to follow the lore.

Definitions
In your own words define the following terms. Do not take any definitions from elsewhere!:

Role-playing:he character he is playing i the game. Role playing is where a person is in character with t

In-Character Information:
Complete the following biography on your character:
Full Name: Fungo
Current Age: 20
Past / History (include childhood, major-events, etc. 2+ paragraphs long): Fungo was born to a family of 3 kids. He got bullied by his 3 brother for because of being the youngest. When he got to his 15th birthday his parents brought him fist axe so he could fight along side his father. He was still getting made fun of by his brother that he slaughtered them in the night an went on the run.When going on the run he met people who helped him train and teached him..

Fungo came across a battle arena in a town he travelled into and joined the competion going on there. He won every fight and was nick named 'The Brutal Fungo'. So Fungo travelled everywhere helping out fellow orc and destroying anyone who messed with him..




Ambitions: To gain his respect back with his father.

Personality: A Bloodthirsty Orc who kills anyone who trys to fight him

Skills:Trained at surviving on his own and master with an axe.

Appearance (this must include an in-game screenshot of your skin): Fungo is Very strong and Has an overbite

Any other details you wish to share about your character:

Open-Response-Questions
Each question in this section must be answered with a minimum of one paragraph which must describe the event in full. Please be as descriptive as possible and do not break character or lore at any point.
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1. You are roaming the mighty capital of the War Nation Of Uruks, as you near the Arena you spot an Orc, wearing what seems to be human garbs as he looks at you he smiles and say out loud in common not in blah “Come friend let me teach you of civilization and break your mind from this orcish savagery!”, how do you react?

Answer: Fungo would walk up to the orc and act taller then him and look down on him . Fungo then would hold his left fist in the air and start to beat him if anyone tries to stop it he would kepp beating him until he has learnt his lesson. the punishment is a knockout blow to the face.

2. As you are watching an Arena fight between two Orcs, the Goj of Krug walks towards the Arena, and shouts “Mi brudderz da Feztivel ob Krug iz coummeh! We needz zacrifizez tu zummun da Zpirit ob Krug un diz uzg, go gadder da Warbandz nd raid da landz nd bring mi buck zacrifizez, twiggy nd pinky dat we kan zlauhater upun da alter ob Krug nuw go mi Brudderz!” How do you react to this?

Answer: Fungo would pick up his axe and find the rest of the orcs waiting for the hunt but while waiting searching for his dad but he would always have no luck and when the hunt starts he would raise he axe and would get his bloodthirsty look in his eyes and charge.

3. As you are travelling in the barren Orcish deserts you come across a quiet oasis. Beside it sits a small tent where a young orc is preparing a meal of roasted halfling. He calls you over, offering you to join in with his meal. What does your character do?

Answer: Fungo walks over while surveying the area if there is any ambush then goes in the tent and asks "Y r U owt ere ohn yor ownah?" the man would tell him and offer a plate but Fungo would refuse the plate and eat it raw.

[cruzazul 2815]

 

Unfortunately your application has been denied. Below are suggestions I have listed that you should implement into your application before reapplying.

 

Make sure you post your application on the Lord of the Craft Minecraft Forums thread found here as well as our forums here.

 

Having your character slaughter his brothers is considered a villainous act and you will need a VA (Villain Application) for it which can be acquired once you are accepted onto the server.

 

You do not have much lore in your app. Try to implement more town names, people, or notable events pertaining to your character's race. All of this information can be found on our extensive wiki page.

 

Describe your character in more detail. With what you have said I do not really get a good picture of how he looks, thinks, and acts. Add onto that and explain even the minor details. They can help a lot when describing your character in general. Painting the reader a picture when listing the tenancies and personality as well as look of your character can be an enormous help when trying to understand what your character is.

 

You did not fill out the meta-gaming or power-emoting definitions. These need to be answered correctly before you can be accepted.

 

Your first and second ORQs show a good amount of power-emoting and villainous actions. There is a difference between an orc being angry and just going on a killing spree.

 

Expand on all three of your ORQs and add more dialogue throughout.

 

Please wait 24 hours from this denial post before reapplying. If you have any questions don't be afraid to send me a message.

 

 

[cruzazul 2815]

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