[Denied] 3rd application

[Otters2001 0]

My account name is Otters2001

I am 14.

I am aware that this server is PG-13

I have read and agreed to all the rules.

I agree with hacking rule. I have been hacked against before and it is not fun at all and it ruins the role playing experience so knowing I have protection from the server is good.

None of the rules confuse me.

I looked up role playing servers and your website came up and when I saw #1 mine craft role playing server I went for it.

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Role playing is when you make a character and act like that character to make the server more enjoyable.

Meta gaming is when you do something your character has no clue about in the game or in real life.

Power gaming is when you do something unreal and the other player can't react.

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My characters name is Fierro.

I am a male.

I am a High Elf.

I am 321 years old.

Biography:

I am a high elf and me and my family ran a potion shop. I was told never to go to the brewing stands because if I mixed the wrong ingredients I was told bad things would happen but I never believed. I thought it was an excuse to not waste ingredients because they cost a lot of money. Well I learned the hard way..... I was never trained for the potion making so I didn't know one thing. As I was watching my father put ingredients in I got wise and put extra red stone and when he saw me do that he knew right away we needed to get out. He had the whole family out but as he was coming out with my sister the explosion happened and my dad and sister were buried under the wood of the house. My mom and I were terrified and didn't know what to do. My mom and I tried to save them but we couldn't. We ran and ran until finally a path was reach and a sign read, "Haelun'or" and we went. We finally arrived. We made a nice living. We opened yet another potion shop with my mom making the potions and me selling them. Soon after my mom died of age and it was just me but there was one problem. I didn't know how to make potions.

Sadly I dropped the potion dream and left the shop. I bought a new house and made my living by renting the shop out. That was until a few days later when Haelun'or decided to declare war against Laureh'lin and it hit me. I joined the army and we fought. I fought long and I fought hard and I did make it out alive with one scar. Shockingly, that scar was shaped like a potion bottle and I knew it was my dad telling me to start my dream and finish his. After the war ended I went back but once again, didn't know one thing about potion making. I left Haelun'or for peace and went off and built a settlement. I tried training myself but it ended badly. Let's just say I had to rebuild at least five times. After that I went off looking for a trainer and a nation/ town to join and here I am now.....
 

Personality Traits:

Kind

Honest

Sometimes Greedy

Determined

 

Ambitions: To follow my dream and to be trained to be a potion maker and then to run a successful potion shop.

Strengths: Alchemy, farming, enchanting, Fighting

Weakness:Mining, Fishing, Hunting

Appearance: I am five-foot nine inches and I weigh 146 pounds. I have pale skin and piercing green eyes.

Screenshot:

http://i.imgur.com/zAv792g.png

 

-I just wanted to say thank you for taking the time to read all my applications! I am sorry it took so many. Your application team is great!

 

[Quavinir_Twiceborn 1050]

-You... need to include the format. You seemed to include it near the end yet dont have any of it up top.

-Your meta-gaming definition is incorrect, and your power-gaming definition is incorrect.

-Your character's biography is written poorly, and is rather hard to understand when written in first-person.

-Your character's biography isnt really a biography. Where was he born? How did he grow up? Was the the only eventful thing to happen in his life?

-Elves cant die of old age, or atleast none that I've ever heard of. Yet, elves go infertile at 500 years of age, and I've seen elves well live into there 1000s. So even by that logic your character's elven mother could not have died of old age, as by your current character's age she'd only be 831, and thats saying that she had the child at 500 exactly.

-The lore you include in your character's biography is... rather confusing. What realm did he live in? Where did he live before Haelun'or? Is there a reason that they simply by chance ended up in the specifically high elf city? Likewise, if your character is 341 he'd have been born in the realm of Aegis.

-You dont explain how your character got their skills, even directly contradicting your character's biography by saying he is skilled at alchemy.

-Your character's weaknesses need to be actually weaknesses, not just things he is not skilled at.

-You may re-apply in 24 hours.

-Feel free to send me a PM if you have any questions.

 

Edited September 3, 2015 by Quavinir_Tinuvial

[Quavinir_Twiceborn 1050]

Moved to Denied Application Forum.