[Denied] zGuksels Application

[Guksels 0]

Out-Of-Character Information
Please do your best to correct spelling and grammatical errors, this is an RP server and writing is the main form of communication!
 
What’s your Minecraft Account Name?:zGuksels
How old are you?:16
Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13):yes
Have you read and agreed to the rules?:yes
What’s the rule you agree with the most?:Keeping in-character at all times 
Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules):Everyting makes sence 

How did you find out about Lord of the Craft?: Google
 
Definitions
Feel free to Google the answers or browse our forums, but make sure that you write the reply in your own words, not those of another website or person! Plagiarizing will result in the automatic denial  of your application, and a warning point!
 
What is roleplaying?:Roleplaying is when you play as another person, charector, that you,or someone else created or that already existed
What is metagaming?: Metagaming is action make by the person playing the role of a charecter and that thhe charector wold not have knowledge about or could not do.For example knowing about somting that he has no knowlidge or he hasnt encountered.
What is powergaming?:Powergaming is declaring thhat his(or her) action upon someone else is succesful without giving other persona way to react. 
 
In-Character Information
Now you actually make your character - be creative but stay reasonable! Make sure they make sense and that they follow lore. Try to come up with a character that you actually want to play.
 
Character’s name:Vivian (Vi for short) 
Character’s sex:Male 
Character’s race:Adunian 
Character’s age:29
Biography :Vivian is a son of a farmer and an exiled High elf. He spends most of his time working on the fields, and helping his father to hunt. By the age of 15 he was a great hunter who was great in stealth and was available to hunt on his own. When he reached the age of 22 his father passed away. He and his mother were taken in the care of some Northeners who were passing by to Winterfell. Not being strong enough to survive in the snowy climate his mother passed away from sickness. At the age of 26 Vivian moved to the city of Kal'Urguan. were he used is tricks of stealth to survive and steal from other residents of Kal'Urguan. Met 3 other thefs and formed organization with a blue flower as a logo. In a later accident his colleges got viped out by undead. 

Personality Traits: moody, pasive, reliable, reserved
Ambitions: Becoming the best at stealth. Finding out more about undead.
Strengths/Talents: Stealth , Tracking 
Weaknesses/Inabilities: Communication , Combat  
Appearance (List the extra details of your characters appearance, IE; height & weight): 5'7'' 150lbs
Appearance, please provide us a screenshot of your character’s skin:

[Crowbill 493]

Under review.

[Crowbill 493]

Unfortunately, you have been denied for following reasons:

• Please fix your grammar mistakes as your app is full of them.
• Please work more on your definitions!
• Your biography has few cliche elements in it, such as dead parents and a rogue-like group that gets slaughtered. Please improve your biography!
• The lore in your app is outdated. All of the threats and places you mention are from Aegis, but we are currently in Vailor! Consult with our wiki for more info! http://wiki.lordofthecraft.net/Vailor
• Your app does not seem long enough. Please add more about your journeys and the people you met!
• Your strengths and weaknesses don't even out. Please add more to them!

Fear not, as you may re-apply in 24 hours. For any additional help, feel free to contact me or any other AT via forums or Teamspeak!

[Crowbill 493]

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