[Denied] StRaFe_thisguy23's application

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What’s your Minecraft Account Name?: StRaFe_thisguy23

How old are you?:15

Are you aware the server is PG-13 (You won’t be denied for being under 13):yes

Have you read and agreed to the rules?:yes

What’s the rule you agree with the most?: That both parties have to agree to pvp.

Are there any rule(s) that confuse you or don’t make sense?(If so we can help clear it up! You will not be denied for having a question on the rules): nope

How did you find out about Lord of the Craft? Internet

 

Definitions

What is roleplaying?: To "play" as a character for the sake of lore or story

What is metagaming?: to surpass the limits or environment set for the game

What is powergaming?: To make a character become as powerful as possible while ignoring story or atmosphere

 

In-Character Information

 

Character’s name: Desmond Damnizz

Character’s sex: male

Character’s race:  1/2 orc, 1/2 human

Character’s age:20

Biography : Desmond grew up on a small little shack near Urguan. His parents a male orc and a human woman. He was a disgrace to both races. His father doubly so as he had the ability of shade. A curse that allows the user to manipulate their aura. Slowly turning into a thief, Desmond had thrills and spills spending days in the brigand. He began to become more and more efficient at stealing. Because of his "curse" his parents were hung. A curse he didn't even know he had at the time. He was thrown in prison. He escaped the brigand after using well oiled skills as a thief. Living the life of a criminal and slowly dyeing inside due to the loss of his parents. However he began to master his trade, sneaking into houses stealing entire chests of gold and valuables. All without being seen. He was becoming richer as a promise to his father that he would be the greatest thief known to the world.

Personality Traits: silent, calm, and intense

Ambitions: To be the greatest thief/assassin ever!

Strengths/Talents: Near silent movement, the ability to detect body movement, well skilled in hiding, parkour, curse of shade(unknown to character)

Weaknesses/Inabilities: Poor combat skills.

Appearance: around 5'8, lightweight, very pale, pale silver hair, lavender eyes

Appearance: http://imgur.com/lcEYKmT

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Your application has sadly been denied due to the some things that need to be changed. Don't worry though! You may reapply after the next 24 hours and within that time you may redo your application. Please I ask, don't reapply before the requested time or you will be denied by default since this is our policy. Message me if you have any concerns! These changes need to be made in your next application: 

~Since some changes are to be made concerning my next point, I ask you find more lore on the server. Your shade comprehension was pretty good (it needs to be removed however) but that only leaves a city being your only piece of server lore. I would search through the wiki for this. This could include anything from major events, religion, or major cities in your biography in order to show you grasp server lore well.

~No character is allowed to be made having been taught magic in the first place being the shade curse you included. This element needs to be removed from your whole application. Your list of weaknesses needs to be clarified upon as to why they are poor in combat too.

~Your list of strengths is rather unreal. No one is able to move fluidly with practically silent movement. Maybe he is decent at sneaking around, slinking behind walls and tip toeing through halls. I suggest this be said rather that than. I ask for this to be edited as well as the ability to detect body movement. Also, your personality traits contradict one another: he is calm yet intense at the same time.

~Your skin seems to be overused from how many others I have seen like it. I ask you find another more suitable skin that is still relevant to this roleplay fantasy server.

~Considering your description of strengths and weaknesses and your skin, I am going to request you change your race to a human rather than a mixed breed between orc and human. Your skin doesn't reflect any trace of orcish descent (a mixed breed usually has minuscule tusks and hint of green or grey skin) and your traits stated in personality, strengths, and weaknesses don't properly mimic what an orc has to deal with (easy to anger, bloodlust, heavy so harder to sneak by, etc). Unless you can properly do this in your next application, I ask you change it for your benefit. 

~Lastly, your metagaming definition is rather vague. I ask you elaborate on it so it makes more sense next time.

 

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