[✗] [Magic Lore] - Empathic Resonance [Repost]

[Metamancy 1767]

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So here's a repost because the previous one broke ;;

 

I'm not expecting this to get accepted, but I think it would be really cool and add a lot of character development to the server if it did! Please consider it :D

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https://pixabay.com/illustrations/face-to-think-thought-79654/

In the quiet of the village night, the man was jolted from his sleep by chaos outside. He rushed out of his quarters to find his wife being dragged out of the house by a man clothed in black. She cried out for him, her voice filled with terror.

The man drew a dagger, but it was too late. He watched in horror as the murderer split his wife's throat open.

Blood gushed from her neck, a fountain of death and despair for the man. In panic and rage, he threw the dagger at the murderer, who simply caught the dagger in midair.

He had loved his wife more than anything else in the world.

The murderer turned to leave, paying no attention whatsoever to the despairing man on the floor. A primordial rage boiled inside him, a lust for revenge, but he was powerless; completely powerless against the injustice of the universe. He wanted more than anything for his wife's murderer to die, to feel pain, to be tortured, even more than he wanted his wife back.

Then, a voice spoke:

"Feel Rage."

And the man did. He allowed the rage to manifest within himself, to take over his heart.

With inhuman speed, he lunged on the man, slowly strangling him to death. 

"Feel Fury."

 

 

For countless ages, the Empathic Monarchs have woven their influence through the intricate tapestry of the Descendants' minds. Each of the Four Monarchs, embodying their unique Domain, bestowed their gifts upon every Descendant, enabling them to experience and understand emotions in profound ways. Their powers granted the Descendants the ability to feel deeply, to connect with the vast spectrum of emotions.

However, this benevolent gifting came with its own set of complications. The Monarchs, each proud and resolute in their own Domain, could not agree on the supremacy of their gifts. Their once harmonious purpose became a battleground of conflicting ideals and rivalries. They debated fiercely, each asserting that their particular Domain—be it Elation, Melancholy, Dread, or Fury—was the most essential and influential. This discord among the Monarchs led to a perpetual struggle for dominance within the minds of the Descendants.

As each Monarch sought to establish their authority, the minds of the Descendants became arenas for these celestial conflicts. The Monarchs' influence clashed and intertwined, creating a dynamic and often tumultuous emotional landscape within each individual. They fought not just for control, but for the soul and essence of the Descendants themselves, each seeking to imprint their own emotional signature most deeply.

In this constant struggle, the Descendants were caught in a whirlwind of emotions, each Monarch vying for their attention and devotion. The gift of Empathic Resonance, a rare and potent gift, became the ultimate prize in this cosmic game. To achieve it, a Descendant had to allow one Monarch’s influence to dominate their mind to such an extent that the other Monarchs’ powers were suppressed or banished. This was no simple feat, for the balance of emotions was delicate, and the struggle to align with a single Monarch’s Domain required not only extraordinary focus and strength but an incredibly stimulating event.

Those who succeeded in this arduous challenge were granted the gift of Empathic Resonance—a rare and extraordinary power that enabled them to channel and harness the purest essence of the Monarch’s Domain. This Resonance was not merely a tool but a profound transformation, allowing the individual to manifest and control the deepest aspects of their chosen emotion. It granted them not only enhanced emotional perception but also the ability to exert that emotion's influence upon the world around them, reshaping their reality according to the power of the Monarch they had embraced.

The gift of Empathic Resonance came with its own responsibilities and challenges. The Descendant, now a conduit for their chosen Monarch’s Domain, was entrusted with a power that could alter the very fabric of emotional experience. They became a living embodiment of their Monarch’s influence, capable of profound acts of emotional impact, yet also vulnerable to the fluctuations and trials of their chosen emotion.

Thus, the struggle between the Empathic Monarchs continues, with each Descendant's journey becoming a new chapter in the ongoing saga of emotional dominance and celestial contention. The legacy of the Monarchs and the quest for Empathic Resonance persist, shaping the lives of those who seek to master the profound and transformative powers of their own emotions.

 

Seraphis The Elation

Seraphis, the Monarch of Elation, is the very embodiment of boundless joy and exuberance. They are often depicted as a celestial being bathed in golden light, with an aura that radiates warmth and positivity. Their appearance is both ethereal and vibrant, featuring flowing robes adorned with intricate patterns of light that seem to dance and shimmer. Seraphis is surrounded by an aura of luminescence that symbolizes the uplifting and transformative power of happiness. Their realm is a landscape of perpetual daylight, where every corner is filled with vibrant colors and harmonious sounds.

Seraphis is the epitome of exuberance and charm. They exude an infectious enthusiasm that elevates the spirits of all who encounter them. Known for their radiant smile and contagious laughter, Seraphis has a gift for making even the bleakest situations seem bright and hopeful. Their presence is both reassuring and invigorating, providing a sense of comfort and inspiration. They are deeply empathetic, always attuned to the joys and sorrows of others. Seraphis encourages growth and positivity, fostering an environment where happiness can thrive. They are a steadfast supporter of any endeavor that brings joy and celebration, and they find fulfillment in spreading cheer and creating moments of shared bliss.

 

Events such as a cure from a born disease or reunion with a loved one thought to be dead can lead to Empathic Resonance with Seraphis.

Eldara the Melancholy

Eldara, the Monarch of Melancholy, governs the profound depths of sadness and reflection. They are often depicted as a figure cloaked in mist, their form partially obscured by an ever-present veil of sorrowful fog. Their eyes, when visible, reflect the depth of their understanding and compassion, revealing the quiet strength found in the midst of grief. Eldara’s realm is a landscape of muted tones and soft light, where the ambiance is one of calm introspection. The environment is marked by serene, melancholic beauty, with gentle rain and still waters symbolizing the process of emotional healing. Eldara is deeply empathetic and contemplative, possessing a wisdom that comes from a profound understanding of grief and loss. They have a serene, comforting presence that provides solace to those who are mourning or experiencing emotional pain. Eldara’s demeanor is gentle and patient, offering a space where individuals can process their sorrow and find inner peace. They are a guide through the shadows of the heart, helping others to navigate their emotional landscape with grace and understanding. Eldara values the process of reflection and healing, seeing the beauty and strength that can emerge from even the darkest moments of sadness. They are a source of quiet strength and encouragement, supporting others as they confront and work through their grief.

 

Events such as a natural, enduring tragedy or the death of someone very, very close can lead to Empathic Resonance with Eldara.

Noctis the Dread

Noctis, the Monarch of Dread, rules over the realm of fear and anxiety. They are often depicted as a shadowy, enigmatic figure whose presence is marked by swirling darkness and fleeting glimpses of their true form. Noctis is surrounded by a shifting veil of shadows and mist, which can take on various shapes and forms, reflecting the unpredictable and often unnerving nature of fear. Their realm is a place of uncertainty and suspense, filled with dark forests, winding paths, and eerie echoes that evoke the feeling of being on the edge of the unknown. Noctis is intense, elusive, and profoundly perceptive. They embody the complex emotions of fear and apprehension with a presence that is both captivating and unsettling. While Noctis can be intimidating, they also offer a deep understanding of the anxieties and insecurities that plague individuals. They are a force that both challenges and protects, urging people to confront their fears and explore the hidden aspects of their psyche. Noctis provides insight and awareness, helping others navigate the darkness and find their way through the shadows. They are a paradoxical figure, embodying both the terror of the unknown and the wisdom gained from facing it.

 

Events such as the survival of a crisis or the overcoming of a deep-rooted fear can lead to Empathic Resonance with Noctis.

Ravak the Fury

Ravak, the Monarch of Fury, represents the raw and powerful energy of anger and intensity. They are depicted as a formidable, tempestuous figure, often surrounded by swirling storms, crackling lightning, and roaring flames. Ravak’s presence is marked by an overwhelming force, with an aura that exudes both strength and volatility. Their realm is a dynamic and tumultuous landscape, characterized by constant upheaval and dramatic changes, reflecting the explosive nature of anger and passion.R avak is passionate, assertive, and unyielding. They possess a commanding presence that can be both inspiring and intimidating. Ravak embodies the primal energy of anger, channeling it into a force for change and action. While their temperament can be fierce and overwhelming, they also provide strength and determination, helping individuals harness their anger in constructive ways. Ravak is a catalyst for transformation, encouraging people to confront injustice and drive action. They value the power of emotional intensity and see anger as a powerful motivator for overcoming obstacles and achieving goals. Ravak is a relentless force, urging others to channel their fury into impactful outcomes.

 

Events such as the desperate need for vengeance or a major conflict can lead to Empathic Resonance with Ravak.

 

Redlines:

 

- No character can have Empathic Resonance with more than one Monarch, ever.

- Empathic Resonance isn't easy. You can't just make an MA for Empathic Resonance because your character got a gift they really wanted or failed a task they really wanted to succeed in. It has to be an emotion so strong it's life-changing.

- A detailed RP transcription of the event that caused the character to gain Empathic Resonance is required to make an MA.

- Your character cannot force this emotion or seek an event that may induce such a strong emotion; it must happen naturally.

- Takes up 1 magic slot. 

- You cannot teach Empathic Resonance. 

 

Tiers

Tier 1 - A character has just had the event that has caused the emotion to take dominance within their mind, but the other Monarchs are still vying for power. During this stage, the Empathic Resonator may face intense emotional conflict, with their chosen emotion fighting for power over the other ones. The Empathic Resonator does not yet have access to any of the gifts of their Monarch. Lasts for 1 OOC week.

Tier 2 - The monarch of choice has finally won the conflict in the character's mind, making that respective emotion and its sub-emotions the ONLY emotions the character is able to feel. However, the character has limited control over these emotions and may find themselves doing impulsive things led my their heart more than their mind. They have access to a few of their Monarch's gifts at this stage. Lasts for 2 OOC weeks. 

Tier 3 - The Empathic Resonator is now experienced in the ways of their Monarch, having access to an expansive list of gifts and being able to control with relative ease how they feel. They still internally struggle with only being able to feel one emotion, however, and the emotion comes out quite strong most of the time. Lasts for 5 OOC weeks. 

Tier 4 - Now nearly a master at controlling their emotions, the Empathic Resonator can now hide their emotions if necessary, but still cannot fake other emotions. Their gifts are powerful and are used to enact the will of their respective Monarch upon the world. Lasts for 4 OOC weeks.

Tier 5 - Now a Master of their craft after twelve long years of walking the path of their Monarch, the Empathic Resonator appears on the outside like any other normal Descendant, but inside harbors the strongest of emotions. At needed times, they can unleash the full force of their chosen Empathic Gift, performing feats normal Descendants would wholly be incapable of. 

 

Abilities 

 

Elation 

Illumination - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Create a small, handheld ball of light that can light up the dark within a radius of 3 blocks. Those in this radius would find themselves more cheerful than usual. 

- No blinding people with light, ever.

- Does not dispel any negative emotions immediately; just a very slight improvement of mood.

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Euphoria Touch - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. At Tier 3, channelling is reduced to 1 emote, at Tier 4, channelling is removed. Touch someone within a 1 block radius to energize them with a very short (1 action) burst of euphoria. After this 1 action, both the caster and the target becomes greatly fatigued.

- Cannot be used in combat.

 

 

Heartfelt Laughter - Tier 3 - Non-Combat

Laugh. Anyone feeling currently neutral or positive emotions will be compelled to laugh as well. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

- Cannot be used to debilitate anyone. 

- If everyone else is laughing without reason and you are in a bad mood, you'd get annoyed, no? Anyone feeling negative emotions in a large crowd will be aggravated by this spell. 

 

 

Dispel Discord - Tier 3 - Non-Combat/Combat

Requires 2 channelling emotes and 1 casting emote. At Tier 4, channelling is reduced to 1 emote. Those with a thirst for blood within a 5 block radius will find their willingness to fight decrease sharply. 

- Cannot be used against someone fighting the caster.

- Cannot be targeted; everyone involved in the fight will lose their willingness to fight. 

- The caster cannot use this to gain the upper hand in a fight. 

 

 

Foster Joy - Tier 4 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. All negative emotions within a 20-block radius are made neutral.

- Does NOT make happy individuals happier.

- Cannot be used manipulatively in any way. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

 

Festival - Tier 4 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. A more advanced version of Illumination, create a festive display of colorful lights and fireworks that makes everyone within a 20 block radius cheer up a good bit!

- No blinding people with light, ever.

- No hurting people with fireworks. 

- Does not magically dispel any negative emotions immediately; simply cheers people up a considerable amount. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

 

Joyful Compulsion - Tier 5 - Non-Combat

Requires 1 emote of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Compels everyone in a 10 block radius to commit themselves to selfless, kind acts. 

- No specifying what these acts are.

- Cannot be used to force characters to do things they are heavily against. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Seraphic Blessing - Tier 5 - Non-Combat

Requires 3 emotes of channeling and 2 emotes of casting. Grant a single individual the gift of Seraphis, curing them of any current non-magic illness or injury and making them unable to feel strong negative emotions for 1 OOC day. 

- 1 OOC week cooldown. 

- Does close major wounds, cannot be used to reattach body parts. 

- Use common sense. It's good, but can't, like, completely change a human being. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Melancholy 

Illumination - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Create a small, handheld ball of light that can light up the dark within a radius of 3 blocks. Those in this radius would find themselves more introspective than usual. 

- No blinding people with light, ever.

- Does not dispel any emotions immediately; just a very slight change of mood.

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Melancholy Touch - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. At Tier 3, channelling is reduced to 1 emote, at Tier 4, channelling is removed. Touch someone within a 1 block radius to infuse them with a very short (1 action) burst of sadness and introspection. After this 1 action, both the caster and the target becomes greatly fatigued.

- Cannot be used as a weapon.

- Cannot be used in combat.

 

Heartfelt Tears - Tier 3 - Non-Combat

Cry. Anyone feeling currently neutral or negative emotions will be compelled to cry as well. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

- Cannot be used to debilitate anyone. 

- This sadness can be dispelled by people who are in a good mood to begin with. 

 

Questioning - Tier 3 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 channelling emotes and 1 casting emote. At Tier 4, channelling is reduced to 1 emote. Those within a 5 block radius will find themselves deeply contemplating their current action, whatever it is. 

- Cannot be used against someone fighting the caster.

- Cannot be targeted; everyone in the area will be affected. 

- Cannot be used in combat.

 

 

Tears of Healing - Tier 4 - Non-Combat

Passive. The caster's tears heal wounds.

- Cannot be used to force tears.

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Longing - Tier 4 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Makes everyone within a 20 block radius see an illusion from their past that either gives them a strong sense of nostalgia and longing or helps them find solace in times of darkness. 

- Does not magically dispel any positive or negative emotions immediately; simply brings them down a considerable amount. 

- The targets get to choose what they see.

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

 

Bearing Burden - Tier 5 - Non-Combat

Requires 1 emote of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Takes all the melancholy of a character within a 1 block radius and gives it to the caster.

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Communion - Tier 5 - Non-Combat

Requires 3 emotes of channeling and 2 emotes of casting. Can only be used when in deep sadness (deeper than usual, I mean). Speak to Eldara and ask three questions for advice. These questions may be things that you know OOCly but your character does not. Eldara will answer all questions honestly, but is not guaranteed to know the answer.

- 1 OOC week cooldown. 

- You CAN look things up on the wiki for this. 

- Use common sense. Think about what things Eldara would know. This is very honor-based; please don't exploit it. 

- Cannot be used in combat. 

Dread 
 

Shadow's Veil - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Requires 1 emote of channelling and 1 emote of casting. Create a small area of darkness with a radius of 3 blocks. Those in this radius would find themselves more afraid than usual. 

- The fear is very weak.

- Cannot be used in combat. 

 

Herald of Fear - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. At Tier 3, channelling is reduced to 1 emote, at Tier 4, channelling is removed. Send a telepathic image to someone within a 20 block radius to induce fear. 

- Cannot be used as a weapon.

- The fear is stronger than Shadow's Veil, but cannot scare a character out of their wits.

- Cannot send messages; just a short, fleeting image. 

- Cannot be used in combat.

 

Truth - Tier 3 - Non-Combat/Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 2 emotes of casting. Make everyone within a 10 block radius see their greatest fear for 1 emote. 

- Cannot be used to kill or harm.  

- Cannot be used to debilitate anyone. 

- This fear can be overcome and the targets get to choose what they see. They do not have to indicate with an emote what their character sees. 

 

Shadow Guide - Tier 3 - Non-Combat/Combat

Requires 2 channelling emotes and 1 casting emote. At Tier 4, channelling is reduced to 1 emote. Summon a shadow of something within a 10 block radius for 2 actions; for example, a sword or a cup.  

- Cannot be used to create shadows of something bigger than the caster.

- Cannot create shadows of more than one thing.

- Shadow weapons can harm but not kill.

- Shadow items retain all their normal properties.

 

 

Resolve - Tier 4 - Non-Combat/Combat

Requires 1 emote of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Those within a 5-block radius, be it ally or enemy, will find themselves less afraid. 

- Cannot be used to make people perform reckless, dangerous actions.

- Cannot be used to make someone do something they would not normally do. 

 

Terror - Tier 4 - Non-Combat/Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. An advanced version of Shadow's Veil. Makes everyone within a 20 block radius feel strong fear of the caster. 

- Can be resisted by characters that very rarely feel fear. 

- Is NOT an illusion spell; simply makes the caster appear more intimidating

 

 

Eternal Night - Tier 5 - Non-Combat

Requires 1 emote of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Extinguishes all magical and physical light within a 20 block radius and gives everyone fear of the dark. This darkness and fear lasts for 3 emotes.  

- Cannot be used in combat. 

- Can be resisted by those with darkvision. 

 

Infuse Fear - Tier 5 - Non-Combat/Combat

Requires 3 emotes of channeling and 2 emotes of casting. Gives a single target an immense fear of one thing of the caster's choice. Lasts for 1 OOC day. 

- 1 OOC week cooldown. 

- Cannot be the fear of a specific person or object. 

Fury

Rage - Tiers 2, 3, 4, 5 - Combat

Requires 1 emote of channelling and 1 emote of casting. Channel the rage inside, increasing physical capabilities for a short time. 

Tier 2 - lasts for 1 action, increases speed and reaction time. 3 actions of intense fatigue afterwards.

Tier 3 - lasts for 2 actions, increases speed, strength and reaction time. 2 actions of intense fatigue afterwards. 

Tier 4- requires 1 emote of casting only. lasts for 3 actions, increases speed, strength, reaction time and accuracy. 1 action of intense fatigue afterwards.

Tier 5- requires 1 emote of casting only. lasts for 3 actions, increases all physical capabilities significantly. 1 action of mild fatigue afterwards. while in rage, channeling and casting emotes are not required.

 

- This is NOT an invitation to powergame. The caster can still easily be defeated.

- Be fair to others. Be honorable. Seriously.

- Can only be used when there is an event to make the character angry or seek vengeance. 

 

Induce Fury - Tier 2 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Make a single individual within a 10 block radius angry at someone else within a 10 block radius. 

- Cannot be used in combat and cannot be used to start combat. 

- A reason to be angry is required.

- The two targets must either be strangers or enemies to begin with. 

 

Inspiration - Tier 3 - Non-Combat

Requires 2 emotes of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Make everyone within a 10 block radius agree with you just a little bit more. 

- Cannot be used in combat and cannot be used to start combat. 

- Can only be used if the caster is trying to convince them to join a cause that makes the caster angry.

- Enemies are not affected. 

- Does not make targets immediately agree; is not an obey spell. Simply lets them see things from the caster's perspective a bit more. 

- Cannot be used to force targets to do things. 

 

 

Tempest - Tier 4 - Combat

Requires 1 emote of channeling and 1 emote of casting. Manifest the caster's anger in a tempest of fire and wind, burning targets and throwing them back. 

- The angrier the user, the stronger the tempest.

- The tempest cannot be larger than double the caster's size. 

- Targets cannot be trapped in the tempest, only knocked back or burned. 

 

Ravak's Wrath - Tier 5 - Combat

Requires 3 emotes of channeling and 3 emotes of casting. Summon a divine, powerful lightning strike from the sky, killing the target instantly. 

- Can only target one target, no matter how close together. 

- Can only be used once, EVER. 

- After using, the caster will faint for 24 IRP hours. 

- Cannot force PK. 

- Both the caster and the target must be exposed to the sky.

 

Purpose (OOC): 

 

I joined LOTC seeking rich character development and deeply emotional roleplays, and while I do run into these every now and again, they don’t happen as frequently as I think would be fun. Also, the reliance on teachers for most types of magic kind of feels like a limitation.

This new magic fixes both of these problems by offering a more flexible approach to magic! It allows for greater personal agency in magical development, eliminating the need for a mentor and thus enabling a more seamless integration of magic into character arcs. It not enhances the potential for engaging and dynamic roleplay and also maintains a balanced and enjoyable experience. I really hope you consider :D

Edited August 7, 2024 by Nebta Maplewillow

[Nectorist 12869]

20 minutes ago, Nebta Maplewillow said:

Purpose (OOC): 

The Empathic Resonance magic introduces a new element to the world of Lord of the Craft, enriching the roleplaying experience by allowing characters to channel and influence deep emotional states. With gifts from the Empathic Monarchs—Joy, Sadness, Fear, and Anger—players can directly affect the emotional atmosphere and interpersonal dynamics within the game. This magic adds layers of complexity to roleplay, enabling characters to harness and express emotions in profound ways. It opens up dynamic new interactions and storylines, where the manipulation of emotions can drive conflict, healing, and resolution. By integrating Empathic Resonance, the game fosters immersive experiences and dramatic moments that are central to character development and narrative progression. This addition not only deepens player engagement but also enhances the richness of the game's emotional landscape, making each interaction and event more impactful and memorable.

Dog you've gotta hide the ChatGPT better.

 

 

Spoiler

To add a more serious criticism...

 

I can commend the desire to want to add something to the server; however, it's only worth it if it's authentic and it comes from you. A lore piece that is written poorly, but has unique, relevant concepts and ideas is worth 10000x more than something that's been largely generated from AI. I highly recommend you take some time to RP on the server, improve your writing skills, and give lore writing a shot when you feel confident in writing your own work.

 

[Metamancy 1767]

I admit that last OOC part is ai generated, but everything else is hours and hours of work ;; I'm sorry if I write like an ai

Edit: I changed that last part to my own wording. Sorry! I was three hours of hard work and I was getting tired. 

Edited August 7, 2024 by Nebta Maplewillow

[MsLinni 828]

On 8/6/2024 at 8:03 PM, Nebta Maplewillow said:

I admit that last OOC part is ai generated, but everything else is hours and hours of work ;; I'm sorry if I write like an ai

Edit: I changed that last part to my own wording. Sorry! I was three hours of hard work and I was getting tired. 

 

Why would you use AI to write lore, I do not understand? Can you explain your reasoning.

[Metamancy 1767]

None of the lore was ai 😓 just the part explaining why it would make a good addition, it'd been three hours of hard work and I was getting tired, and even that i changed ultimately

Edited August 8, 2024 by Nebta Maplewillow

[alexmagus 959]

Dear [Name],

I trust this message finds you in good spirits. I wanted to extend my recognition for the considerable effort you have invested in your recent lore submission. Crafting lore, particularly for something as intricate and multifaceted as magic, is a formidable undertaking. It’s abundantly clear that you’ve imbued your work with a great deal of creativity and intellectual rigor, which is a commendable endeavor in its own right. Your initiative to contribute substantively to the server is laudable and reflects a genuine passion for the world we collectively inhabit.

However, I feel compelled to offer some constructive critique, which I hope you’ll perceive as an effort to aid in your development as a writer and as a burgeoning member of our community. While your lore exhibits some intriguing concepts, it appears to fall somewhat short of fully integrating into the established canon of the server. The Lord of the Craft universe is characterized by its rich, intricate, and deeply layered history, and crafting lore that harmonizes with this existing framework necessitates a profound understanding of the narrative’s complexities and subtleties.

Given that you’ve only recently become a denizen of our world—having joined merely a couple of months ago—it might be prudent to allocate more time to fully immerse yourself in the server’s ongoing sagas, character dynamics, and pre-existing lore. Such immersion will furnish you with a more robust foundation and an enhanced comprehension of how your original ideas might be woven into the broader narrative tapestry. It is not uncommon for newer players to feel a fervent desire to make an immediate impact, but often, a period of observation and participation can culminate in far more refined and cohesive contributions.

Moreover, I observed that the formatting of your submission could benefit from further refinement. The way your ideas are presented is of paramount importance, particularly in the context of lore submissions. Clear, well-structured formatting not only enhances the readability of your work but also reflects a meticulous attention to detail—a quality indispensable in the creation of lore that will be scrutinized and engaged with by others. Enhancing the visual clarity of your submission will allow your concepts to be communicated more effectively and with greater impact.

I wish to underscore that this feedback is offered with the intention of encouragement, not discouragement. Every writer embarks on their journey from a point of origin, and the mere fact that you have already taken the bold step of contributing to the lore is indicative of your potential. With time, experience, and continued effort, I have every confidence that you will develop the capacity to create lore that not only aligns with but also enriches the world we all cherish. Please feel free to reach out should you desire further discussion, feedback, or even just a dialogue on the intricacies of lore.

Persevere in your endeavors, and I eagerly anticipate witnessing your continued growth and the evolution of your ideas.

Warm regards,
[Your Name]

[Metamancy 1767]

Thank you! While this does sound mildly AI generated, I thank you for the feedback anyway! I think I’m going to give up on this thread for the time being.

[Islamadon 9158]

This lore has been denied. You will be sent a forum PM regarding the reasons for denial within the next 24 hours.