[Edited] [Unread] So'kranati Application

[Tronan 4]

MC Username: tronan999

Rp Username (be sure to include the correct prefix, look up on info thread):So'Kranati

Character Skillset: Kranati is a skilled hunter and trapper. He prefers to

use hunting knifes((swords)) and a bow. Swords:25

Archery:25

Appearance (age, SUBRACE, gender):

Kranati is a Kha'Cheetra and is about

22. He has black eyes and is around 5'11.

He is fast but not very strong as he

prefers to use bows and finish them off

with his hunting knife. He also wears

a hunting tunic of sorts on his body.

Personality:

Kranati likes to hunt and trap. He likes to talk to other Kharajyr, and

brags to his friends that he could

trap a man ape or even shoot him down with arrows. He has never

met or even seen a man ape before and thinks that they are just

a lower race and he wishes to meet one and trap one and have fame

and glory. He is very cocky when it comes to everything and thinks

that he is the best at everything (( which he is not))

He likes to improve marksmanship and trapping and hunting skills.

He will not give up on what he is focusing on.He likes to go out on

hunting trips and bring back food for the empire and him as well

He doesn't like to cause trouble and rarely ever does cause trouble.

He tries to steer away from trouble but If an ape insults his family,

Metzlti,or Him directly he will take action no matter in Kharajyr or in

ape lands. He may or may not give mercy depending on the

severity of the insult. If it is a fellow Kha he will

Challenge them to fight in the arena instead.

Please include a short bio of your character's life:

Kranati was raised by kind and loving parents or so he thought they were. He was a curious cub and liked to explore around the empire when he had free time. He also wasn't a very strong kharajyr from birth. His mother and father Were alarmed when he was around ten and he couldn't pick up a twenty pound chicken and they rushed him to the priest to see if Meltztli could handle it. They prayed for days and days but he never grew much stronger he could when very healthy could lift maybe 35 pounds at the most. But what his parents thought was a bad omen or curse was actually a set back to a gift from Meltztli. Kranati was actually much faster than most other cubs his age. 2years after that to finally understand that. His father taught him how to use a bow and how to trap and skin animals as well. His mother never really liked that she thought that he should be kind and loving to nature. When he was about 15 and was fully matured his father gave him his first bow crafted out of the fine jungle wood of the forest in which they lived in with their fellow Kharajyr. Then when he was about 22 The once dormant volcano Erupted into a fiery Inferno. This angered Kranati because he would pray to Metzlti for it not to erupt. They had to evacuate anyways or they would die. Once they were on the ship Kranati prayed and asked for forgiveness to metzlti.

Kranati never liked the water or boats and had a hard time on the boat ride to mainland Asulon. When they finally arrived he thanked Metztli for giving them safe passage. Kranati knew it would take some time to get use to his new surroundings. He didn't know that they would be staying for how long they did. It took a long time for his father and him to get used to hunting in the new environment that they were staying in But they still got use to it and thrived. One day though the Tlatlanni's scouts returned and gave great news that their original home was well enough to repopulate again. This gave Kranati mixed feelings though because he grew accustomed to their new home to much that he did not want to leave but he followed his Tlatlanni's orders and pack up his belongings and boarded the boat. He then grew more anxious to see what their homeland was like now after the volcano destroyed it. He could hardly sleep. He awoke one day to the sound of people cheering He got up and dressed himself and went to see what all the commotion was about. he then saw his homeland and was shocked to see how desolated it was. Once everyone was off the boats including him the Tlatlanni started giving out orders and telling people were to go and such. Kranati was assigned to go out and scout the area and find useful items and building materials. Kranati was happy to be back and now knows that he must work hard for a while to restore their homelands former glory.....

Character's ambitions: Kranati wishes to once again live with his mother

and father once again and restore their once great

homeland to its former glory. He also wishes to be

able to once again hunt in his homelands forests again and

to capture a man ape to gain riches and glory.

---Situational Rp Questions---

1.

As you travel through the Karakatuan jungle, you spot a human trespassing on your nation's lands. He approaches you, obviously distressed, and asks for any food, water, or shelter that you can provide, then tells you that he has been lost in the area for days without any proper supplies. How do you react?:

It was a particularly boring day and Kranati was walking down a road just milling about

hoping to be able to hunt toaday and maybe...just maybe see an ape. He suddenly hears

rustling in the foliage and he pulls out his bow his father gave him. He then notches an arrow in place and turns to face the foliage. "Come out...Or I'll shoot!"Kranati shouts. The rustling stops and Kranati continues forward with his bow in his hand and a arrow still in place. He hears the rustling again and he thinks its just a cub messing with him. Then suddenly a man ape bursts through

The foliage. "H-h-h....elp m-m-m-e p-p-p-lease"The ape says. Kranati shocked and speechless stands straight up and let's go of his bow. "C-c-c-an -y-y-ou spare food and water"the ape says. Kranati still speechless grabs his bow and runs back the other way still scared from the ape. He goes and tells his friend who happens to be a guard about the encounter and has Kranati take him to the ape. When they arrive the ape is gone and Kranati stares with disbelief and his friend scowls and tells Kranati that he is a liar and he returns back to his post. Kranati curses to the ape and says "Next time ape...next time:" and walks back to help out with the rebuilding....

As you romp through the lands of the "apes", you come across a tavern. Inside this tavern, a Dwarf notices you and starts gawking at you, then begins to speak.

"Oi! I gots a bowl of cream for you, Kitty! Ha! I'd bet you would make a nice throw rug, wouldn't ya, ya mangy furball?!"

He continues act generally as racist as possible. What do you do?:

" Hey kitty want some milk!" the dwarf says mockingly. Kranati scowls and gives the dwarf one more chance to back off and let him be before Kranati does something bad to the dwarf. "Oh looks like the kitty is angry hah!" the Dwarf says. "alright you runt if you keep insulting me I'll gut you!" Kranati

Angrily replies. "Alright bring it on kitty I need a nice pelt any ways!" the dwarf says and pulls an axe out. Kranati secretly pulls one of his hunting knifes out and lets the dwarf make the first move. The dwarf charges Kranati and screams profanity's at him. Kranati The jumps out of the way before the dwarf can strike him. Kranati thanks Meltztli for his great speed and agility. Kranati then sheaths his knife and pulls out his bow that his father gave him and notches and arrow in but freezes as it is not an animal he is killing it is a man ape and he has never killed one before and starts to worry he sends the arrow flying but it harmlessly lodges itself in the wall behind the dwarf. "Ha yer can't kill a swine!" the dwarf mocks. Kranati decides to run instead he slings his bow over his shoulder and runs out of the tavern and relies on his speed and agility to make it back home with out being followed...

3.

One of your fellow Kharajyr and a close friend of yours comes to your dwelling in the middle of the night and begins to pound on your door. After you let him in, he confesses to killing another Kharajyr over a slice of cake. What do you do in response?

"You did WHAT!!" Kranati shouts. "shhh keep your voice down." Kranati's friend replies.

Kranati then stares angrily at his friend and then says " you stupid idiot I can't

believe that you killed a fellow Kha over a piece of cake!" Kranati says. " I wasn't

thinking Kranati I was just so angry." Kranati's friends says and begins to sob.

"No you do not get to cry because your a coward." Kranati says. "B-b-b I am sorry."

Kranati's friend says. " Well pray to Metztli and ask the Tlatlanni for forgiveness."

Kranati says. Kranati's friend nods and tells the other Kharajyr to get the guards.

Kranati nods and closes the door and goes back to sleep.

Do you swear to follow the Tlatlanni and uphold his law, and do you swear to hold Meltztli and all of her actions as sacred? I swear to my grave to follow the Tlatlanni and uphold his law and judgement and I swear her actions to be sacred and are holy

Please include a screenshot or 3D render of your character's skin Click me

[KarmaDelta 969]

Denied:

Reasons:

-Your character questions dont follow your characters attitude. Fix that.

-Major grammar issues (ie: spelling mistakes and badly spelled words, etc.)

Side Note:

This is a bit on the fence, but I dont understand how your character is quiet and sees to himself in his bio. I might be reading it different, but I dont see it. If you elaborate it in your edit message, then I will pass you along with your revised version.

Please wait 5 hours before state you edited it.

Good luck and have a nice day.

[Tronan 4]

Alright I edited my characters personality and edited the rp questions a little bit as well and I think I got the spelling errors as well

[KarmaDelta 969]

Denied:

Reasons:

-I feel like you didnt really listen to me:

-Your character questions dont follow your characters attitude. Fix that.

Which includes attitude. As you can see it in bold.

Evidence:

But is quiet and cautious towards Apes from the mainland.

He asks Kranati for food or water and a way out of this forest. Kranati speechless tells the man to stay here and he turns around and runs and tells one of the guards of the apes presence.

The guard thanks Kranati and informs other guards and they go arrest the man ape. Tired and shocked Kranati begins to walk back towards his hut again.

That doesnt seem to make any sense. Quiet and Cautious towards "apes", yet he just tells him to stay there, and he runs for the guards.

And this:

Kranati thanks Metztli for his great speed and strength.

Elaboration on the strength could help. Is it Speed strength (ie. the force with it)

or is it just normal strength and speed, but separate. Elaboration on that will help.

Side Note:

That doesnt seem to fit. I know I am poking on small things, there is a reason for it.

It wsa the incident, in which you were forgiven, which makes me judge you harder. I hope you understand this and perhaps take a second thought about your character's lore and personality. I honestly want you to prove to me that you can make a damn good app, and make up for what you did. When this is done, feel free to message me again. I wont put a time limit on, since I feel like you can work harder and think of new things.

Message me soon, and cant wait to read your app.

P.S: If this try and the try after that dont work, then I will hand it off to another KAT member.

Again, I hope you understand Tro. And Meltztli guide you in your up and coming app.

P.S.S: Meltztli <---- Its spelled like that, its also the last thing you write in which you swear to her and the Tla'.

[KarmaDelta 969]

Denied:

Reasons:

-Question 1 doesnt add up

-Still a lot of grammar mistakes. I see hardly any commas, I think mis-capitalization, and places where periods should be.

Recommendation:

Why not try and make a different bio and everything and different attitude? For example, he can be a Kharajyr that is full of his hunting skills and boasts whenever he gets a kill and brings back a prize.

I dont know, but its up to you.

I now pass the torch on to the next KAT member, just make another post here saying "Editing" along with a "Reserve". And when you are done, you can replace the Editing and reserve to "Done Editing". So the KAT member may know when you are done and ready to be looked at.

Good luck, and try and prove yourself.

[Tronan 4]

Editing

Reserve

[Praetor 1550]

It seems to me that his third try is up.

[Princeton 396]

Moved to the Great Library. It shall be sorted into appropriate category shortly.